Just a calm and collective brony who loves a good story and loves too wright
Fluttershy`s life long dreams have always come to her so far let it be making good friends, going on adventures (not dangerous ones but it will have to do), geting her cutie mark in something she loves yes Fluttershy`s life seems great but even knowing people like Pinkie Pie she has never really had a birthday party she often dreams of it but she is about to realize her dreams may become a reality!
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There are a few grammar mess ups but it's my first story and I hope you all like it
I found a few imbarssing mistakes and too explane the yelling part I mean yelling at the Galla not yelling that exact sentience
This would be a wall of text if it weren't so painfully short. It's more like a fence of text. How old are you? I find it hard to believe an adult could have so much trouble with writing.
There are too many mistakes to even begin to correct. The only way to fix this is to go to school and pay attention in English class.
1166609 A few. Hmm. There are fewer Rednecks in the North Dakota boonies then there are in this story. The basics being that you need to create a new paragraph whenever someone new starts talking. It's 'you+are'= You're not your. And lots and lots of run on sentences.
That being said, grammar, spelling, and general spit-shining aren't my strong points either. So lets work on the one thing that I have some sway and domain in: Plot.
....Actually, no, let's go back to spelling and grammar: I HAVE NO IDEA WHAT THE HELL IS GOING ON.
I can vaguely make out the premise of Fluttershy having a problem on her birthday, but the climax and solution to said problem I can't read. And that's saying something coming from the man who gives honest and non-patronizing advice to authors who write like they've been lobotomized by a Rhino's penis. All you really need to do is separate out the walls of text, and you'll be good to go.
thanks but i dont wright like ever so yeah if you were a real brony you would tolorate so have fun you fake
1169549 Oy! A bit harsh there aren't ya?
1169568 j.wigflip.com/3TBS43Ym/roflbot.jpg Now I understand that Jphyper there's being a bit on the cynical side, but's no reason to state reasons of toleration. We, as a fandom and a community have grown out of that petty saying for a couple reasons: We got swamped by a bunch of shoddily written-walls of texts. And when we retaliated, the authors, in a desperate bid to save some skin; would always state "love and tolerate". And let me tell you, there's only so much of the same egregious failures of literature the average human can take.
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i see this one is a newfag brony. still thinks love and tolerate is a thing.
and uses it to live by double standards. oh yeah. definitely newfag
1169568 Tolerance has its limits. I don't tolerate Syria. I don't tolerate the corner shop being sold out of Monster (
). I do not tolerate (or love) this story.
*calmly walks out of thread, not looking back*
1169620 1169630
You guys are silly.
I'd like to think I'm a veteran brony. And, you see, "love and tolerate" should always be a thing. No questions asked. No matter how much you may want to deny it, it is the core message of the show. That's just the way it is. That said, nearly all the time, people don't really understand what it means.
To "love and tolerate," as per the message of the show, you don't just run around saying no one ever does any wrong. But wait a minute, you might say. Isn't saying that someone is doing something wrong not tolerating them? Or loving them? No, you silly filly. That's not it at all. There is a big difference between loving and tolerating a person and loving and tolerating an action. The former, loving and tolerating a person, is exactly what the show tries to display, and also what every person, brony or not, should aspire to. No matter what a person likes, does, or says, he/she is still a human being. And a human being, by its very nature, should be loved and tolerated. However, on the other hoof, loving and tolerating every action a person does is silly, stupid, wrong, insert other such adjectives here. There are some things that you just don't do, say murder. Or armed robbery. Those are things we don't stand for, things we neither tolerate nor love. Everyone draws the line somewhere, and there's nothing wrong with that.
So, class, what have we learned today? The phrase "love and tolerate" should be something everyone aspires to, but it applies to a person, not an action. And obviously no one's perfect, so mistakes will be made. However, it is the journey, the attempt to be something greater, better than yourself that counts. Or, in simpler terms (read: lacking my attempts at sounding smarter than I am), the effort is what counts.
So, in applying this newfound understanding, Mr. Author, 1169568, we can see that while 1169549 was harsh, he did not, in fact, act against "love and tolerate." Note how he never actually insulted you. Instead, he said the writing was poor and gave you a means of learning so that next time your writing is better. In other words, he disliked the writing, the action, not you, the person.
In the same manner, 1169566 too did not act against "love and tolerate." And he was not nearly as harsh as Mr. Jphyper. Mr. Ignorable (Curses! "Mr." is already in your name!) simply gave his thoughts on the action, offered some basic advice on how to make it better, and, most importantly, did not once insult you, the author. Again, to "love and tolerate," one must do so with the person. As for actions, if people happen to not like your writing, or find errors (great or small, many or few) in your work, they are free to point them out and still follow the code of "love and tolerate" in doing so.
...Holy crap, I did not realize I would end up writing that much...
EDIT: 1169915 kind of has the right of it, but I felt the urge to edit my post in order to pester him with a notification so that he sees this too dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Fluttershy_lolface.png
I just call it like I see it. Any time I try to phrase things delicately, it always makes things worse, so I don't even try anymore.
Another harsh observation: after such a negative response to the comments, I'm starting to think the author isn't taking this seriously. It's a tough call, because despite the errors, this is nowhere near dumb enough to be a trollfic.
1169970 Hahaha, I checked this as the notification appeared, thereby circling the 'pestering' you tried to perform! Random checking of stories, like a sir!
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I was just pointing out that you weren't actually hating on the author, which the author seemed to think you were. Nothing wrong with being blunt/harsh with how you feel about something
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Curses! I've been foiled!
1170274 Nononononono. Foiled... like a sir
Also, I tolerate armed robbery. It would be hard to rob somewhere without any arms. Or legs, for that matter 
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1170550 Broken image
unless you did that to annoy me... 
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It works fine for me...
Uh, try this one?
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1170655 Ohyouception
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Confound these broken images! They drive me to insanity!
1170689 Argh, my image just broke on another thread
images2.fanpop.com/image/photos/14200000/inception-GIF-inception-2010-14288153-272-124.gif
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This one broke too!
THE.
WORST.
POSSIBLE.
THING!
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YOU. WILL. WORK!
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Dat gif...
1170720 Thread: Derailed
I'm gonna post on your wall instead.
*trots out of thread*
1170730
Oh boy. My wall will never be the same dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Fluttershy_lolface.png
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1169970
you should write comedy.
love and tolerate was not a brony dogma from the start. It was just an anti-troll meme used on 4chan.
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I must have missed something. Where did I say it was brony dogma?
1170771
when ur taking love and tolerate SO SERIOUSLY that you write a freakin essay about it.
1170811
Ha, you're making me laugh.
Me taking something seriously does not mean it becomes brony dogma. You shouldn't jump to conclusions like that. Next time, you might not make the jump.
Additionally, it bothers me when people misunderstand something, and then use that misunderstanding to attempt to put others down, calling them "newfags" or some other such nonsense. So, naturally, rather than getting all angry about it and then yelling and screaming and calling people horrible names, I try and edumacate those sorts of people in the vain hope that maybe they too will make the effort to try and be better people. But I digress. Some people just don't seem to want to make that effort.
And finally,
*When
*you're
*freakin' or *freaking
Cheers.
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taking this seriously=you not getting how it really is.
you can literally define it in one sentence. Guess which sentence I used to define what took you several sentences to FAIL to define.
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Oh yes, some people used that 3-word phrase as a mechanism to counter trolls on 4chan. Yes, it all makes perfect sense now. Because it was used incorrectly then suddenly means that now it has no other meaning. It can only be used to counter trolls. The phrase "love and tolerate" can only be used as a mechanism to counter trolls. It has no other meaning now. Those of 4chan have decreed it to be this way.
Ha wow sorry for wrighting words down on a computer I thought bronys work together but I guess I was wrong I stay away from haters of any kind so have fun choping at eachother like mad dogs not everyone wronged me but I see pony lovers aren't as nice as they should be huh ha have fun
Csquared08 thanks for the support btw and just know love and tolerate is what we are about too all of you so called bronys we are a rebellion against haters and lovers of my little pony that's how I see it and I think all my little pony is great let it be sweet nice bad sad whatever it is it's mlp and it's what we love or what I love some people are good at drawing wrighting honestly my metal band did a cover of mlp fim theme song so I mean we don't care what people think and thats how we should all be and we should be nice and help eachother not argue and shit I feel that some bronys aren't even bronys sometimes
1171526 Looks like you need to learn the difference between criticism and hating. I was serious: take a class. It'll help.
Don't simply brush this off as hating. Some who haven't gone off-topic have offered you advice and you haven't accepted it.
Man your still on about this ha man you need to get out more
It's wrighting on a computer it doesn't need to be pro I did it to just wright it nothing else just calm down and breath stop wasteing your life telling ME what to do and start telling yourself what you wanna do cuz I will do what I feel like I wanna do bud just stop argueing with people and enjoy life instead of annoying people and telling them they suck at wrighting and to take a class If you have that much time on your hands to make people feel bad then you need a therapist bud I don't wanna hear Im not good at wrighting I wanna stop wasteing time on this website full of people telling me how to live and what to do because I wrote words on a screen this world can't even find peace in a loveing comunity
1173243 I'm not going to argue with you or anything, I'm just really OCD about grammar at times.
*Write
WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE WRITE!
WRITING, WRITING, WRITING!
NO GH, WHASTSOEVER!
Well, my brain couldn't keep up with great wall of Fimfiction you have going on up there.
1173202 You too need to get out... back to 1st grade and pass English.
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1173243 we are giving you constructive criticism, that's not hating on you. Actually, giving a person (constructive) criticism is good, as it'll make you a better writer if you take our advice when you write future stories.
Hey, stop being mean to the author, everypony!
It's only his first story, and I think it's excellent! Sure, it has some grammar mistakes, but with some clean up, I think this could be the best story on fimfiction! Keep writing, and don't listen to the bullies, Forever Brony! 
5758346 eh, no. If you are too friendly, they won't learn.
1169568 you mean tolerate? And fuck no. We've tried love and tolerance. You know what happened? People (like you) started writing garbage, and when we said something, they all said "love and tolerance" in an attempt to save their asses. Nowadays, it's used by sad little writers who actually believe things work that way and that this is some sandbox to try their ideas, and trolls.
Which one are you?