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"Only the most subtle of references." -No fanfiction writer ever

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Twilight Sparkle believes that she understands the world around her.
But what if one of the most common, everyday things, was actually completely beyond her comprehension?




A short, experimental piece based on working with a very limited word count. Written in first person, in a sort of journal-like style.

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 17 )

It's complete.
Drats. What is it then!

Lovely little experiment in minimalist storytelling. Enjoyably, subtly creepy. Though the last line throws some of that out. Still, leave it to Twilight to make friends without meaning to. Thank you for this.

Have your like and the eternal nagging in our heads, you monster :derpytongue2:

But... But what is it?

Fetch #7 · March 6th · · 3 · Chapter 5 ·

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A story which should be just 5 paragraphs on one page.

I recall a time that FiMfiction deleted multichapter stories if ALL the chapters were less than 500 words. And also when it was a RULE that the first chapter had to be 1000 words minimum. Both of those are because each chapter is an entire webpage, which uses up FiMfiction's server space.

Ehh... I'd feel more intrigued if there were more evidence of what it IS. Is there a reference I'm missing? Even if I can't be certain, I'd like to be able to guess.

I'm liking this already!

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I disagree. This story would not work so well workout this format. I'm loving it. It's short yet provocative. All it needs is a little more conclusion.

I'm going out on a limb and saying it's some strange SCP that's attached itself to her.

Nope, nope, nope! That settles it, I'm not sleeping tonight.

But what was in the ceiling? :rainbowhuh:

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The Foundation has not approved you for clearance to SCP-[REDACTED].

well i haven't the foggiest, surely interesting to say the least.
I would really like to have more information, even more so knowing that it's freaked out Twi but she said nothing about it.

I liked this. The break in repetition at the start of the final chapter hit harder than I'd have expected when I started reading this.
I'll agree that there could be just a little bit more to finish us off. What was it that, after four entries of rationalization, has caused our purple protagonist to change her belief so starkly but still write about it?
Still get little shivers reading the last bit, though. Nice.

Very interesting! Impressed Twilight hadn't been driven insane yet (or had she?) and alas, I'm left wanting more. Still, the conclusion left me with a lot of implications: with the nice flow of events in her life, I'm guessing chapter 5 could've taken place after Celestia/Luna's abdication when she's back in Canterlot (now that I'm thinking about it, I wonder how far she lived from the castle as a kid). Maybe the... thing is friendly, but if not, a villain that knew every detail and pattern of Twilight's life must be very fun to deal with.

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