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Now tell me what you want, I'll pay the price, what's money, I roll the dice, I'll loose it all, I'll take the fall and let it ride as long as I have you at my side.

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After a mysterious object exploded from the night sky, a magical shock wave spreads all around the town of Canterlot, giving some a lot of it's inhabitants powers. Flash Sentry, is among those who found themselves with magical powers, and plans to use it for good. However, after meeting a scientist who has knowledge about the strange phenomenon, Flash soon learns that other people might use their powers for their own evil agendas and must form a team to stop those kind of people.

And with an army of magical-powered teens, alongside a few Equestrian-magic powered girls, Flash and everyone must protect their city from the forces of evil!

Chapters (6)
Comments ( 26 )

REALLY good job on the first chapter of this story. The work that went into the exchanges, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up are pretty well done in all the right places.

So, Flash has electrical powers, Mac has super-strength, Wallflower has plant powers, Blueberry has telepathic powers and Norman can see the amount of time somebody else has left in their lives.

And the next chapter is the explanation.

REALLY good work on this latest chapter. Really good explanation for the "Enhancement Orb" and the upcoming bad guys of the story. And, yeah, Blueberry's got a real upgrade on her TV remote (though she is, fortunately, more responsible about it than Wallflower was with the Memory Stone). Plus, yeah, getting Pinkie to help gather everybody who might have gotten powers from the Enhancement Orb IS a pretty good idea.

Anyway, splendid job on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up in all the right places.

I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this, but will also respect that real world concerns need to take top priority and muses can be fickle.

Excellent job on the exchanges, characterizations, humor and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked how Sunset got Pinkie to help gather everybody at the school together, the fact that Blueberry teased Flash and Sunset for still having feelings for each other and the reveal that LITERALLY EVERYBODY at the school got super-powers (with the exceptions of the seven that already had super-powers BEFORE the Enhancement Orb) and the plan to keep on the alert concerning everybody else who was ALSO affected by the Enhancement Orb.

Now, while I have no way of knowing ALL the powers gained by the Canterlot High students (or even MOST of them), I WILL guess that Apple Bloom gained Super Intelligence (a reference to her pony counterpart's talent with tools and potion), Scootaloo gained super-speed (like her big sister figure) and Sweetie Belle gained a sonic vocal blast power since those seem like the most obvious. Of course, I will admit that I COULD be wrong.

At any rate, I WILL be looking forward to more of this.

Watermelody

Watermelon.... :O....

Sunset turns to the direction the doctor is pointing and saw a guard with a donut and a cup of coffee in hand while watching everyone with a smile.

You know that he will be the best guard to have around...

Applebloom nodded as she held the toy car with both hands, "Here goes.'' she muttered as her hands glows brightly before releasing the glow as it grew bigger, the light then subsided revealing that the toy car has transformed into a large sports car.

Now do it on a Thanos action figure!

"Daring Do can do stuffs like that too, you know." Rainbow pointed out unimpressed.

Can she dodge a bullet when I shoot her with a minigun?

Ok.

Oh god Norman
He sees their death clocks

Have to say, you did a great job on this latest chapter. Love the exchanges, characterizations, humor and future chapter set-up in all the right places. Yeah, definitely spotted the references to Green Arrow and Hawkeye concerning Scott and the Hulk concerning Micro Chips, but I did enjoy the "Strength contest" between Mac and AJ (with Mac winning), Crimson demonstrating those sword skills on Rainbow (and ending up in that "duel" with Zephyr in the process), Apple Bloom turning that toy car into a real one, Sandalwood showing off his own plant powers and Pinkie cheering up Norman.

REALLY looking forward to more of this.

Okay, out of everyone's powers, I think Norman's might be the creepiest. :twilightoops:

Sunset looks at her in horror, "Have... have you already tested all of that?'' she asked nervously as Blueberry's abilities is dangerously similar to the Memory Stone.

I felt this right here. Gosh! This is why I hate telepathy-based powers. They're just so violating.

"We're gonna need Pinkie Pie for that.'' Flash answered.

Pinkie Pie. You gotta love her. :twilightsmile:

Pinkie shrugged her shoulders, "I don't know.'' she replied, "It's probably something to do with the story's plot where we are all needed together because of what happened last night and for what's going to happen in the next few days!" she explained rather fast with a smile on her face.

:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

How are you going to coherently develop this story with this many characters exhibiting superpowers? Also, aren't Micro's powers supposed to stop working when the trigger passes?

>>Godslittleprincess
There are definitely pros and cons with these many characters but I've been writing stories with a massive cast in another site and well... TV programs, so I have the idea how to balance things out. As for Micro, his powers are indeed based from that character but plays outs differently which will be explained in later chapters.

Really good job on the exchanges, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up in all the right places. I particularly liked Scootaloo's point out that Bloom using her powers to create a REAL Thanos could only lead to bad things, as well as Fluttershy mentioning that Zephyr basically gained the abilities and personality of Sanji from One Piece, Flash showing some creativity with his powers (making him look just as much like, well, THE Flash as he does Static) as well as the start of that dust up between the Rainbooms and Blast (with Bulk/Captain Barbell stepping up to help out). Really good job on the cliffhanger too.

I'm guessing Blast gaining the powers of Nitro from Marvel Comics and Bulk gained the powers and personality of either the Tick (which would make sense as Bulk is already pretty close to the Tick's personality) or Hanna-Barbera's Atom Ant (getting powers from lifting weights). Of course, Mac might have gained the powers of Superman (though only showing the strength so far [again, super-strong nice guy farm boy; pretty much has the early makings of a Superman Expy already], which makes me worry that these Gorfs might have Kryptonite). Though I WILL admit that I COULD be wrong.

At any rate, I WILL DEFINITELY be looking forward to more of this.

This was strangely fun. Is everyone going to get their own transformation sequence? That's a lot of people to make transformation sequences for.

KO awesome chapter, well things just got crazy and now it’s battle between friends of muscles vs explosives! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2:

>> Godslittleprincess
A few characters has their own transformations but not as flashy as the Rainbooms.

The girls let's out shriek as Scootaloo grabs the action figure and threw it in the trash, "Snips! Are you insane?!" she questioned in disbelief, "Thanos is already a big problem in comics and movies, and you want to bring him in real life?!" she exclaimed.

MY DREAMS ARE CRUSHED BY A NAGGING REDHEAD!

"My life is officially over!!" Rainbow declared rather over-dramatically, "Someone posted of me, in my sports undergarment, in the MyStable!" she exclaimed, "And it's all Crimson's fault!!!" she pointed out.

Hey, at least two guys fought over you, you should be proud :P

Wallflower then spoke, "If it makes you feel better...'' she said while checking her phone, "... the video of Crimson Napalm and Zephyr Breeze's fight is trending a lot more than your embarrassing photo.'' she pointed out while watching a video titled "Two Guys Fighting Over Rainbow Dash".

See, this is better.

"The doctor did said that in order for our powers to improve, we need to use our imagination and creativity.'' Brawley pointed out, "And looks like you've been using your creativity to the fullest.'' he pointed out, "Which is odd since you were never these creative in the first place.'' he added with a grin.

My imagination consists of unspeakable horrors taken from movies, art, and the web. My creativity...I have none.

The second boy has an average height. He has a dark grayish-brown skin tone, he has light amberish-gray hair that partially cover his moderate azure eyes. He wears a white t-shirt, yellow pants, and black sneakers. This is Dumb-bell.

LOL

The girls then jump out of the path of explosion, "Look out! It seems he has the power to create explosions!!!" Twilight pointed out.

Yeah...where do these explosions emit from? If he emits explosions, wouldn't he be burnt by now? Explosions create shockwaves that forces matter away from the source of the explosion, if he is resistant to explosions, he would have been blown back by the aftershock of the explosive force.

"Just where the heck those Gorfs got these kinds of powers?!" Twilight exclaimed in disbelief.

By copying already existing powers from others. It's like replication or the Jurassic Park creature which was made by combining existing abilities.

At first nothing happened until Rainbow's entire clothes were ripped apart leaving her only with her black sports bra and shorts, "DIIIIAAAAHHH!!!" she screamed in shock with a red face while covering herself.

Poor Rainbow Dash

REALLY good job on this latest chapter. The exchanges, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. I particularly liked how Twi managed to deduce the true nature of Blast's powers, the girls figured out that Hoops and his pals were the ones that set Blast off in the first place and Ringo (who obviously has the power of Scott Summers/Cyclops) and Muffins' roles in stopping Blast before anybody else got hurt. And, yeah, Fluttershy showing she is stronger than she looks carrying an injured Rainbow was pretty cute to see and Shining being shown investigating the situation himself was a really good touch.

REALLY looking forward to more of this.

KO awesome chapter, the heroes have managed to come down the explosive guy and it would seem Fluttershy is stronger than he looks though I think Twilight is gonna be in big trouble as well. :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::rainbowdetermined2::rainbowdetermined2:

"Sunset, Flash! You all right?!" Flash questioned.

Why is Flash talking to himself?

Is Shining Armor the Inspector Javert of this story?

>>Godslittleprincess

Oh my! Thank you very much for pointing that out.

Holy crap !!! Do you STILL have room on this roller coaster of excitement and awesomeness ?!

Because, i wanna RIDE THIS DAMN THING !!!!!!!!

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Well, hopefully, more sympathetic than the ACTUAL Inspector Javert. Hopefully more along the lines of Commissioner Gordon.

Maybe not, but we CAN hope.

I really liked your story. I also try to write similar stories, but I'm not very good at it. And now I need to write a boring paper, which I entrusted to the service https://au.edubirdie.com/essay-writing-help-online because I don’t want to write this paper. I want to spend time developing my writing skills for creative writing and not some essays I don't care much about.

"Blast Kane? That retard?!" Brawley spoke in surprise, "I haven't heard of him ever since he found out that he's adopted.'' he said.

Did Brawley really have to call him that? I have been called that before by a customer at the place I work and it was an insult.

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