• Member Since 12th May, 2012
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Regidar


irresistible

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Just because Bright Mac and Pear Butter are dead doesn't mean they're gone.

Far from it.


Editors:
R5h
Posh
No Raisin

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 19 )

right beside their slumber daughter’s bed

slumbering?

A nice, sad little snippet. How many lives have been lost trying to save loved ones, but for naught?

R5h

I'm glad you published this! It was a lovely read.

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thank you, fixed!

jmj

Nice story. It was a soft, cute look at love with just enough sadness to feel real. The dialogue was great too.

MnM

This story hits really deep. Great job.

It's good to see you're putting out such good quality writing after all these years.

Very cool. Wistful but not overly so, nice characterization, good dialogue and description. Welcome back.

If they want to touch something, they need to learn how to channel their anger... or possess Whoopie Goldberg.

Either that, or they could always summon Michael Keaton by saying his name 3 times.

The story kinda begs the question: how many other pony homes have stuck ghosts? And why aren't Celestia and Luna doing anything about it?! I swear, they're the laziest gods since the Roman ones.

Absolutely adore the way you wrote Bright Mac and Pear Butter.

Always good to see more stuff from you.

Somewhere, a Hoofbook for the Recently Deceased goes tragically unfound and un-used.

I love how very little is actually explained. It leaves Bright Mac and Pear Butter in their own little corner of the world, where they at least still have each other's company to enjoy.

I love how vivid this story is. The descriptions of the gopher holes to the farm to the inside of the house and Applejack's room were precious in the way you not only described them, but paced them. You have a very nice way of writing soft moments.

And the way you've written Bright Mac and Pear Butter brought pangs of emotion I've long forgotten within me.

Pear, adjacent to her son, held up her hooves and did her best to balance on her hindlegs. Big Mac filled another gopher hole as his mother stood position like a ballerina over him--

And he straightened himself, walking right through her as he plodded off towards the next hole.

Pear sighed, and slowly walked back towards Bright Mac. “Almost felt him that time,” she whispered as the two watched Big Mac pour more dirt into the ground.

That hit very hard for me.

And that open-ended ending--open ended in the sense that it has no end was, in my opinion, masterful.

Overall, a beautiful treat!

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Bright Mac & Pear Butter: "Beetlejuice! Beetlejuice! Beetlejuice!"

*Ringo Starr poofs in from out of thin air & looks the two dead ponies confusedly*

Ringo: "I think you got the wrong 'Beatle'. You want Paul, not me."

Beware, you who attempt to steal away the righteous from the Kingdom of Heaven.
"No one can snatch them out of My hand. My Father who has given them to Me is greater than all. No one can snatch them out of My Father’s hand."

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I don't quite understand; are you taking issue with the story due to the fact that ghosts are presented?

10176349
Don't mind me, I'm just trying to be metaphysically thought provoking. I don't really take issue with fiction.

10185216
oh okay, i honestly thought it could be read either way; i've come across some wacky people on this site so i guess i was just jumping to conclusions :rainbowlaugh:

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