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Dusty Sage


I've been writing online for thirty years. One of these days I might actually get good at it.

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Nopony knows very much about the afterlife, and all Rainbow Dash knows is that she wants to fly just one more time.

(Cover art commissioned from Jada.)

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 23 )

hmm, interesting. I like

Is good! Last fic I read had 200 thumbs-up, and was not as good as this one. I also recommend How to do a Sonic Rainboom by bookplayer.

Very sweet. I love it. I love a good end-of-life fic that isn't sad. (That one that Bad Horse mentioned non-withstanding.)

Liked, faved, and I'll keep an eye out for more from you. :ajsmug:

Hm. Seems very coincidental that I start watching you, then you drop a serious story of this caliber - am I lucky? Or is it for a more sinister reason... I mean, Bookplayer and Bad Horse being here too? Wow. On a totally different tangent, ever watched the anime "Night on the Galactic Railroad"? Just do it - you'll get the relevance.

Mulder and Skully wish they would be so worthy!

I implore that you write more for us, Dusty! I'll give you my favorite yo-yo! Just think about it!

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I was trying to avoid all but the slightest traces of Sad. Which explains, I suppose, why it begins after the service. I think I was reasonably successful.

Short and sweet. Scoots finally gets a chance to show her stuff (even if there is mechanical assistance). :scootangel:

Rainbow Dash is off to a better place.:rainbowlaugh:

(I got my Internet connection back at home, thanks to replacing a damaged junction box outside):derpyderp2:

Life is good!:pinkiehappy:

This piece of fiction made me feel things I cannot simply put into words.
This is a masterpiece, I only can only hope to measure up to you, Dusty. Cheers! :pinkiehappy:

Two :pinkiehappy: in two consecutive comments. High praise indeed.

Considering I wasn't sure I had even one story in me, I'm surprised to find there was room for a second.

This is here mostly to remind myself to look at this stuff once in a while.

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Thanks. I am perhaps inordinately fond of this story, which is the only one I've written that didn't involve several hours of soul-searching: it just flowed from the start and I was lucky enough to catch the best parts.

I sent this through I Write Like, which tells me that I write -- in this instance, anyway -- like Anne Rice. Izzatso?

Neat.

Just re-read this. Forgot to comment the first time, so I will now. This was very well done. Good execution, and an even greater concept. You really nailed down Dash's character into a nice literary package. I think this'll be my feature fic of the week on my page. More people should read this one.

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Thanks. I had some doubts about it originally -- the theology, if such it be, is vague, and who ships Applejack with Pinkie Pie? -- but everything seemed to come out all right.

I think I've seen you around places. Let's have a look-see.

There's a bit of confusion in the beginning regarding Dash's speech - her usual informality is cut with odd bits of formality, like how the beef in pies is cut with chicken. It makes for a bit of wobbly reading at first.

There's not a lot in the way of scenery, and by that I mean next to nothing. While the tone and style allows you to get away with it, just a little bit more would have helped give ground to the events occurring - though then again a third of the story is blue monologue, which I suppose doesn't need background per se. Just making a note of it - scenery sets scenes.

This fic treads the delicate line between being infodumped headcanon and being interesting. Dash's voice was done well, and you didn't go too heavy on the headcanon - you stayed true to the story, which worked to your favour.

Style and editing were good. The lack of facial expressions and body language is waived given the tone and atmosphere; it's interesting how that is so.

All in all, it's a short little scenario done well. Have a like, and keep writing.

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Thanks for the review. I have a long way to go before I get good at this, but at least I think I'm heading in the right direction.

Speaking of reviews, Not Worthy has deemed this little tale deserving of attention, putting me in some august company indeed.

This is what im thinking when Celestia talked about the long black train. Also how did Rainbow die? Please tell me! Also also a nuclear powered jetpack ummm WHAT? That makes no sense.

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I really appreciate how positive Rainbow is about her own death. :) That goes against the grain so hard, we need more stories like this.

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She died from pneumonia, it says right in the text.

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