This is actually a really funny chapter. Now that I think about it, this entire arc is actually quite lighthearted compared to the previous arcs (in my opinion) and is a well deserved break from all the drama from the previous arcs.

Also:

Gloriosa stomped forward, "Oh, shut it! I've spent the totality of my life trying to preserve this park, this land , for my great-grandparents! I've fought legal battles, lawsuits, even bankruptcy itself! I'm not proud of it because I constantly have a sweaty, salty taste on my tongue now, but it was worth it!"

How old is Gloriosa supposed to be again? I mean, she runs a Nature park without her parents!!

On a related note:
HOW OLD IS TIMBER SUPPOSED TO BE!!! I mean, Twilight dates him (in canon) and we don't even see him go to school. They didn't even mention if he does go to school!

Overall, this chapter's great. It has a lot of jokes, and it seems to be reaching the arc's finale. Though do take your time in making the next chapters, and I would like to see how this arc will go from here on.

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Yeah, that actually really wasn't my intention, but it seems to be that way, I guess. The primary conflict of Legend of Everfree really just passed me by for the same reasons the second conflict did. Which I'll explain in the next chapter.

Well, I'm gonna give a wild guess and say that Gloriosa is 23 or 33. Not sure how she was raised with her brother, but life finds a way. As for Timber, he's a senior at the age of 17. Seems the most fitting, to me at least.

And finally, thank you. I hope to make it just as amazing as the last arc, along with rather stupid, of course.

No offense or anything but I would refrain on the n words a bit

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First things first, thank you for the feedback. It's much better than just leaving a dislike.

Regarding said word, it is used for two integral reasons of the story. The first being culture.

Noah and his friends, as aforementioned, aren't from Equestria. In an attempt to make the characters as realistic as possible, I gave them personalities that would most likely fit people born of color in America. Like in the show, Atlanta, and others staring ghetto people of color Obviously, this does not adhere to all people of color in the US, but of those who've grown up, well, like I have.

I based the characters on those seen in entertainment and of my own experiences. Though the first arc is God awful, like seriously, it sucks, black high schoolers are normally seen acting similar to the behavior shown. Trust me, I've lived, (and technically am), with them the entirety of my life.

The second reason is for character development.

Noah and his friends aren't meant to be seen as good people, and their behavior is in the opposite direction completely. This is planned from the beginning, but the characters, primarily the protagonist, Noah, are meant to transform from this demeanor into better men, and better people overall.

The first arc presents said characters awfully, and they're in desperate need of rewriting. I'll be doing this exactly when I finish the arc I'm currently writing.

(If I could just do the damn thing, that is...)

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You make great points

Can’t wait how the story turns out

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Marvelous 😁👌🏿