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Blackwatcher


I like crossover story and student six. Whatever it is the story is, as long as it's a good story and enjoyable i'll be glad to check it out

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a mysterious creature has enter and roam around Equestria, but there are more then just one and they all scattered around the world. Twilight and her friends have to solve this mysterious case, and figure out where did those creatures came from and why are they in Equestria.

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Willthse will do a trouble or those would be reasonable

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Uuh what? What do you mean?

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The picture shows Henomorph.
So I expect Henomorph.

Will those henomorphs/that Henomorph would cause trouble . (The henomorph trouble kind bad (forcefull impregnation of unwilling victim... infestation that sort)

Or would you be more civil meeting between henomorph and citizens of Equestria and maybe included in the society like it happened in some universes.

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Xenomorph not henomorph.
The main Characters will find more creatures, deadlier and larger then just meeting with the "perfect organisms" (Xenomorphs)
Because alien is not the only one they will find

(check the creature on Canterlot, it's not a Xenomorph, it's something else..."

To answer your question, just wait until the next chapter

Okay. Is English your first language? Because the description is a mess that looks like it was translated from another language to English.

And disabling the ratings is a cheap move by authors unable to take criticism properly.

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Yeah, i'm not good at any language especially English, but i try my best to make readers to understand the word.

This is my first story so I need to disable it until it's finish. (Also I'm kinda scared that someone will judged my story so badly)

The thing roar at him and sink it's teeth at the neck of the Stallion, blood splat in the face of the monster and the ground. The cops heard a loud scream and go back to the alleyway, when they get there the cops shine their flashlight around the place, one of the cop check saw a bag on the ground and blood stain on it.

Ok just reading this it spells for possible infestation.
I now suspect the result of the thing when it is technically born . Better operational otherwise after a while would be gone almost certainly.

"I never seen a creature look like that, must be a very rare animal, let's find out what it is" She teleport her groceries to the Castel and lift Spike and put him on her back, following the derection where creature went.

Just because it is two legged does not mean what kind of intelligence has .
Will it be friendly encounter when both sidesbare not hostile? Does it has to be specifically traumatized or wounded and offer a hand and react more friendly ?
Or has to question it's moral of the xenomorph kind ?

"I never seen a creature look like that, must be a very rare animal, let's find out what it is" She teleport her groceries to the Castel and lift Spike and put him on her back, following the derection where creature went.

MORE in the action or less in the action Spike it is situation preferences.

The voice coming behind the shelves. She look behind it and saw somepony in the cashier. A red male Unicorn with a black mane and brown eyes, resting his head in his hoof.

Agent of SMILE ? To Keep the "sugar" while looking around for the "Diabetes"

"Yes i did, finally create my own buisness" he answer "never thought i seen you around here. Quite surprising actually, since you're here we have sales every kind of craft decoration like furniture, statue, and of course gems, we also build toys for children. They all made from every kind of meterial like wood, rocks, steel and even crystals. Anything that you Interested?"

Cover up for the agent?

"Yes i did, finally create my own buisness" he answer "never thought i seen you around here. Quite surprising actually, since you're here we have sales every kind of craft decoration like furniture, statue, and of course gems, we also build toys for children. They all made from every kind of meterial like wood, rocks, steel and even crystals. Anything that you Interested?"

He was talking about creatures to keep out and look out . That means either Everfree creatures , Xenomorph s as presumed beasts , diamond dogs or changelings.

"Yes i did, finally create my own buisness" he answer "never thought i seen you around here. Quite surprising actually, since you're here we have sales every kind of craft decoration like furniture, statue, and of course gems, we also build toys for children. They all made from every kind of meterial like wood, rocks, steel and even crystals. Anything that you Interested?"

Material

"Maybe it because my shop is far away from Ponyville view and nopony want to visit a shop that closer to the forest full of wild animals"

Why that shop is way too close to Everfree.
Technically seems Suspicious .

The shop being too close would not attract a lot of clients just those who know or stumble the shop than being in more open visible area .
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The forest creatures could be guards technically to the dangerous thing which the creatures could subdue ... And you know ... Unless if it is arrested/contained and put back in the containing chamber/prison .

It should be better prison than the royal prison in strategic point .

"Thank you Twilight, we all really like to make something cool and show our creation to other and make them astounded and amazed by the work we did. But to bad no other pony see it"

I allready got a advise . Either make that more known with MAPS , BROCHURES , Commercials , or GET THE SHOP CLOSER AND MORE NOTICEABLE ! Not in this hidden Hovel/cabin thing .
Near that space could be a better Spy base than a shop .

"No, sorry, i didn't see a creature you described, but i just saw a fast shadow outside a minute ago. probably just some exotic animals coming from the forest. You know how many rare creatures had been spotted resantly in this area. Even one of them look like a giant Timberwolf that is a size of a town hall. That's why i need to make a hold on the grant opening"

That can be the result if the Xenomorph s did that before on planet Equios with 4legged creature/s

"And dangerous" Spike add, look closely at the red heart shape ruby

On spot .
Less clients as said because DANGEROUS AND NOT KNOWN

"You don't wanna know, your to young to knowledge that"

Red lights . That reminds me of agent .
And as Spike and Twilight said would not have much customers

"Just as usual news, there was a manticore on the lose from the forest but Fluttershy already calm them down and take them to her santuary, but they were too scared to came back to the forest. There also many report in the newspaper about a mysterious monster sightings and ponies were badly injurt around the street and houses.

Oh no . It is spreading . It seems like typical Xenomorph infestation.

Just by reading this chapter Ponivile would have REALLY BIG TROUBLE.

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It's more then a Xenomorph, Bud...

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Well could be xenomorph hybrids whith the aditional dna they got . Whatever it is that would be either help or bigger trouble than that .

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