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Undisturbed Grave


Writing and acting is pretty much the same thing, just keep talking until it makes sense.

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This looks VERY interesting, not to mention promising. I shall be keeping an eye on you, my friend. Well done! :twilightsmile:

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I hope to keep your interest, my friend.

Okay.... Thoughts...

An excellent plot twist! I did not see that coming! Congratulations! (I knew I liked you for a reason...)

Just... One thing: If Bright Eyes or any of the others even THINK about touching a hair on ANY of the girls' heads..... There will be concequences.....

I happen to know a certain draconeques who would love to get in the action, and a certain goat who owes me a favor or two.....

This is going to be juicy.
By the way "Applejack" is just one word there is no space between the apple & jack.

Great to see you back in action πŸ™ŒπŸ»πŸ™ŒπŸ»πŸ™ŒπŸ»πŸ™ŒπŸ»

This, bodes super ill for equestria. But, i wonder if majesty will arrive soon

Great to that this is still being worked on, I was starting to get worried. I'm looking forward to the next and I wish you luck and encouragement with the next ones.

I do want to point out some spelling errors though:

"Unforctualy"

Unfortunately

"Griffen"

Griffin

I look forward to the next chapter. Keep up the awesome work and don't give up.

Seeing a new chapter for this story always brings a smile to my face😁.

Keep it up!!!

Alright, now we got some backstory on Bright Eyes. And it appears he's extremely delusional and constantly lies to himself. Or maybe in his own twisted way he's actually crying for Twilight to help fix his broken mind...

Looks like things are about to get interesting! Keep up the great work!!!

Also, the words became bolded in the middle of the chapter and remained that way til the end. Was that intentional?

So bright eyes is in denial about what happened when he got back to his village. Interesting

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For some reason, the bold decided to not work right. I fixed it. Thanks for the heads up.

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This is based solely on MLP generation 4. If you want a timeline, this is set between seasons 7 and 8.

I foresee dark celestia arisi g and smiting bright eyes

That was a heck of a chapter!!! And with it came the end of Posey, Firefly, Sparkle, and Surprise. I gotta say, that caught me guard, I was expecting them to survive till the end. But in the end, fate appeared to have other plans in mind.

Looking forward to the next!

IT'S ABOUT TO GO DOWN!!!!

We defeated both Sombra and Terek using those skills.

FYI you misspelled "Tirek"

That. Was. GREAT!!!

It's hard to imagine the story is near the end. Going to feel weird to no longer wait for a chapter to come out. I have really enjoyed the story.

At last, Bright Eyes, has finally been put down, and by Majesty herself! Ironic considering that every crime that he and his band of psychos committed was in her name. And summoning her from the past for her aid, only to be immediately killed by the "queen", the "goddess", he was loyal to and worshipped. The battle was truly a fun read, and Bowtie redeeming himself was a nice surprise!

Not to mention the King Sombra cameo/origin during the flashback at the beginning of the chapter was a cool touch.

I look forward to seeing how this story ends. Keep up the amazing work!

And with that, this has come to end and another begins. I look forward to see the next one. I wonder if the Young Six (or any of the members) will appear?

Keep the great my friendπŸ‘πŸ»

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