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LOLOLOLOLOL! :rainbowlaugh:

Too bad that they were only wrestling. Maybe it will lead to bigger and better things? :trixieshiftright:

How could you still think it was sex after you joined in? WAT

Part 2: Twilight actually loses her virginity!

Yay for misunderstandings that aren't resolved and probably will lead to conflict in the near future, but are unknown unless the author makes a new story detailing previously mentioned conflict!

Hint hint.

Irony earned the thumbs up.
:trixieshiftright: :trixieshiftleft:
Innuendo earned the favorite.

LOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOLOL:rainbowlaugh::twilightblush:

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Exactly what I was thinking! This story makes little sense. :unsuresweetie:

1114020 1114196 Or she could have thought they were playing along because they felt just as awkward.

i wanna be the guy that
has the curse of always walking
in on awkward moments!:raritydespair:

*snrk*

BWAHAHAHA! :rainbowlaugh:

Oh, you! But wait--there's a picture!
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(In all seriousness, though--Excellent writing, wonderful premise, very enjoyable little snack of a read. Inky-Approved)

read it. loved it. faved it :derpytongue2:

Actually snorted at that last line XD Funny stuff.

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Oh yes, that curse that happens quite often in anime.
Of course, if anypony found a way to give themselves that curse, it might be: :trollestia:
Oh, the trolling fun she could have with that.

This is good, I can already see the party now and all the MASSIVE awkwardness that it entails :rainbowlaugh:

Oh that ending!!! :heart:

"Congrats on popping your cherry, Twilight!"
...
"Oh, you're still a virgin?"
...
"No, you were doing the eight-legged monster with Dashie, silly!"
...
"Oh."
"OH."
"Hey Applejack, we need to talk."
...

Red it gladly :D nice, i loved it, really funny XD :rainbowlaugh:

personal epilogue (um...i had this idea, so i will just post it here. Sorry for writing this so poorly without any kind of permission :twilightblush:):

Twilight and Rainbow where walking casually over to sugar cube corner. "come on twilight" rainbow said. "I don't see what the rush is, I don't think she misunderstood nothing" replied twilight. They had just left the library. Twilight had asked spike if he knew what AJ needed and he didn't know anything except she mentioned to be heading over to sugarcube corner. "I just don't see why its weird a friend just popped in to say hello" twilight said. "look twi, I have known AJ for a long time, I can tell she was lying about us wrestling, she was nervous" the Pegasus said. They could now see the bakery coming up now. "OK, lets just convince her we where wrestling, even if i don't think it is necessary" twilight said. They opened the door and whistles and confetti hit them full force. Twilight was stunned for a moment, reading a banner saying "congrats on loosing your virginity Twilight". Rainbow just facehoofed. "I knew something like this would happen" Rainbow said sadly. "bu--but, how the fuck does a party for this just happen" stuttered twilight.

PINKIE PIE of course!

I read the last line.

And then it was very difficult to keep myself from immediately laughing loudly.

And then I decided this story was an insta-fave.

:rainbowlaugh:Totally not what i expected, me gusta. :trollestia:

This needs a sequel. Of the party. It would be so deliciously awkward. And then Twilight would decided that she DOES need to do that with RD... :rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild:

*snerk*
Bwahahahaha!

The story itself was funny, but that line about a surprise party for Twilight getting laid was priceless! :pinkiehappy:

Best laugh I've had in days! :rainbowlaugh:
Can we please get a followup about what happens at this party? :pinkiehappy:

I'm not sure what to say. Good job. It's things like this that work best in text. And out of context. Okay I'm done.

short and funny. I like it.

You always seem to write Fan-Fictions that make me want to stick sharp things in my eye's... BUT I STILL LOVE THEM!

:eeyup: eeyup (slowly turns and leaves the library never to return)

3340802 Please don't. I'd rather not be the reason someone went blind.:scootangel:

Okay, I laughed. :rainbowlaugh:

who would she tell?

Now ya gone an' jinxed it! :ajsmug:

1131767
I don't think that turn of phrase would work between two mares....

Well there are 3 other ponies she could share her thoughts with, so you're bucked and you didn't even do anything...

This may be the most awkward thing you’ve caught your friends doing since you walked in on Rarity flirting with her mirror

Why am I laughing so hard at this one line?

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Because it could seriously happen in the canon. After all of her obsessions turn out to be either uninterested or total jerks, there is always one pretty face that she can look to...

The possibilities. Rarity x vanity mirror. Apple walk in on that and I have a good feeling she would finally decide that she is the sanest member of the group.

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Tom the Boulder. :raritydespair:

Besides, I think if Rarity were to copy herself, it would really take away that "rare gem" feel. I mean, sure, they could do stuff to each other, but executioner Twilight has got to get rid of the copy at some point.

And we all know how clone stunts go. The clone won't want to go and might do a switch-a-roo with the real one.

It's probably best for Rarity not to mess with that particular pool. Besides, she could have walked in on that prior to the re-discovery of that pool.

Rainbow Dash was perched on top of Twilight, their bellies pressed together. There was a visible layer of sweat that gave their coats a glossy sheen in the morning light that poured in from the window. The pair had frozen up the moment Applejack had spoken, leaving an awkward silence hanging in the air.

*puts on shipping goggles*

Twilight smiled. “Oh, I’m sure she just had somewhere to be. At any rate, I had a lot of fun today, Rainbow. Thanks so much for helping keep my promise to the Princess about getting more exercise.”
“Yeah, no problem. Wrestling is a great workout, and it’s pretty fun too.” Rainbow Dash paused. She pursed her lips as she found herself thinking back to Applejack’s earlier entrance to the room. “You know, I still think AJ might have misunderstood what we were doing.”

Damn it.


Oh well. Close enough!:pinkiecrazy:

1131767 i'm going to go write this now :rainbowlaugh:
Because it needs to be done and this comment is genius. Unless the author decides to write it, which they should, Hint Hint.

I felt a need to read this one! You are hilarious!

Oh my, the ending of this story made me think of all the possible things that would happen with that small misunderstanding. :pinkiecrazy:

As always, the place was immaculate. Not a visible speck of dust, nor a single book that wasn’t perfectly flush with its neighbors.

Okay, now I just want to live in her library.

The very last sentence sold this story for me, not that I wasn't 99% sold before then. When you described Twilight and Dashie being sweaty, I thought of Yello's tune "Oh Yeah". Well done.

Hmm, looks like I'm taking up an unaccustomed "Being That Guy" role on this story. I didn't hate it, but I didn't like it as much as almost everyone else seems to. Just one of those things, I guess, but it didn't really click. There were exceptions -- that line about Rarity was genius -- but the "wrestling" scene, though quite funny, felt a little laboured. Not a bad story, don't get me wrong. Just not as amazing as its +/- balance had led me to expect.

4670127 Honestly, this is about my least favorite thing I've written here. That it has as many likes as it does is something I'm quite surprised at.

Never feel bad about offering me a critique. Unless someone gets rude or antagonistic, I like getting feedback, even on older junk like this.

4670760 Thanks for the reassurance! I'd much prefer everyone to take that attitude -- it's how I feel myself -- but I'm always wary of upsetting someone. I read quite a lot of old fics, partly because I prefer to read completed stories.

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