This story is a sequel to Them Bones
You can bully her, you can tease her, you can even hurt her, but whatever you do, DON'T MESS WITH APPLE BLOOM'S FAMILY!
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Somber Concerto
Came for the party, stayed for the food. | Pronouns He/Him
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This was amazing
The story was awesome! I especially liked the fact that the sequel is actually a pre-sequel. Though the only thing that I would say needs some work is the punctuation and paragraph spacing. For example, when characters are talking, always start a new paragraph when another person (or in this case, pony) starts talking. Other than that, fantastic!
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Thank you for the constructive criticism, it was greatly appreciated! I went through and made the changes you suggested, and I agree, it's much easier to read now. I will also keep this in mind for my future stories.