"Never think you won't make it. If you believe, you'll succeed."
Human in Equestria16,972 stories ·16,818 members
Looking for Editors3,384 stories ·5,415 members
Technology VS. Magic778 stories ·2,658 members
Celestia's Library3,173 stories ·1,083 members
Pony Transformation General1,878 stories ·1,069 members
Humans in Equestria and Ponies on Earth376 stories ·57 members
My name is Zach, I'm just a normal guy living in a normal apartment and then... one day i wake to find nothing, nada, zilch. Everybody's gone and I'm a pony, a FREAKIN' PONY! Well, you get the pleasure of following me through the world humanity left to the ponies.
Page generated in 0.085 seconds
Total duration
951 users online
511,615 hits today, 2,054,621 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Hum, writing still need work, especially in narrating the MC thoughts, but you are on a good start. I wonder how this will stand apart from ponies after people Alt. univers? I wonder what happened to everyone, in a state of panic I am sure. Are they all ponies put can't seem to work all their equipment. How would they be able to prove who they are with each other I wonder? How will they change everything to accommodate for pony philology? would magical creatures be created out of existing ones or will they come from directly from Equestria?
Also if you are looking to commission a cover art let me know I have a number of cover art under my belt already hear is my DA gallery if you want to take a look in the link bellow. Good luck on your story.
https://www.deviantart.com/amalgamzaku
Oh this adds a lot of interesting elements, despite the guys seemingly being the only ones in the general are (I would wonder if they tried to contact their family before going for their looting trip), they certainly seem to be taking the situation at it's worst outcome, which could pay off. at least they seem to have a happy go luck deminor to them, always serious can get boring quick.
It was interesting to see Discord that just so happen to be in the area that he had the senses to know that what ever happen to Earth to be apparently deserted of it's original inhabitants, and even greater that this wasn't his work or that it got him concerned leaves me to wonder if the guy TF might be cause by what ever passed by or that maybe their transformation (or is a by product) was the only thing that stopped them from being swapped away like the rest of humanity these two' little struggle might just get bigger for them. I would wonder if the wild life has also been affected by what ever magics that turned them and if it would get even more wilder reclaiming that humanity took from them. I wonder if Discord will contact Twilight on what ever happen or if he will just least the place and forget about or even worst try to help humanity, which has always been a double edged sword for anyone foolish enough who thing he can snap his fingers and fix everything for them; which sounds great actually. I wonder wonder if this word warent ponies of Equestria to try to help humanity?
Looking forward to the next chapter, and see what you will come up with.
The uniform just sitting there does give the rapture feeling. Also a feeling of a ponified version of the Langoliers.
Very interested to see where this goes.
10058530
To answer your question, yes, the guys did try and call their family in ch. 1. They don't say so specifically, but they do imply it.
Can’t wait for the next part
hum, interesting to see other survives, would be nice to see them compare notes on what happened. The writing unfortunately sound more stilted then before.
10074682
What do u mean?
I'll give you a thumbs up, because the premise is interesting, and it's not bad enough to deserve a 7:5 upvote ratio. You need to do some proofreading though.
Oh yeah, also, the writing is a bit bland. It's kind of just like 'this happened then this happened.' (Show, don't tell.) The 3rd chapter was a little better about this... perhaps because it had more dialogue. As a very basic piece of advice, throw in a bit of feelings here and there. Like: 'this happened and it scared me. This happened and I wondered why would this happen?' Something like that.
Hum I wonder how the ponies of this world can actually use magic compared to Equestrian? So their are places in the world where the population didn't disappear as much, I wonder why is that. IT is interesting to see that Discord didn't waste time in warning Twilight about this place, and seems more obvious that he only did it because he thought it would interest Twilight in some way and not for any concerns to actually help the inhabitants . It was interesting to see that Twilight might be interested in exploiting this world for her own kingdom and maybe settlers, while she isn't aware that they where still in the mits of catastrophy for the inhabitants and not just something that happened a while ago, I can't wait to see hoe she will react when she finds out about it and to discover that the inhabitants weren't originally ponies, which won't help their situation in not perceiving Equestrians as invaders or the cause of their blight at the moment. The new characters introduces were interesting, the uninterested guard pony could be worth expanding upon in seeing things in the common pony POV, the STMS students would be great to learn more of them and what they managed to rigged together to work with hooves. Keep up the good work.
One of the few stories I seen that covers (if only slightly) people not coping well with a species change
Nice
Very interesting ! I'm eagerly waiting for the next chapter.
Well that was quick, can't wait to see him pocked and prodded by Twilight. Still I am surprised he could actually could cast magic bolts so soon after his transformation and even giving it a firework effects, that seems are even among unicorn. I think at this point in the story chapters would need to start getting either longer or with a higher frequency maybe.
Yes. When you think of Wallmart and your a pony. Guns.
Guys sorry for delay, civic has thrown me off, but the story is still going and I’ll be back soon.
I forgot about this story
I think the story just became even more interesting with some of the Equestrians taking an interest in Earth now, probably going to unlawfully colonize it is my bet with out the princesses sanctions, but I wonder how they will manage to get access to it as at the moment only Discord can even reach it? I did love Discord's quip on trowing back Twilight's method back at her. I do find it interesting to see that the So called Chaos magic somehow is what caused the transformations but the Harmony magic is what solidified it into making it irreversible for humans I wonder if Twilight's presents alone there is was enough to spread the harmony magic thought out Equestria?
Nice to see an update on this story again, keep it up.
10255087
To be honest, I don’t blame u. But, I hope you enjoy it nonetheless.
10255587
Thank I’m glad you like the story and I’m always happy to see your comments. The story is definitely going to start solidifying soon.
10255620
No problem I always like seeing beguines writers taking their first step in writing, and I like to support their work as best as I can, even some time going overboard in my comments, but I try to measure my responses better. I will be looking forward to see more of this story again soon.
10255763
Hey, you’re not gonna here me complaining about long comments, the more the better!
10255772
You'd be surprised, and I have been know to do a lot of nitpicks comments, I think my personal record was 4k, longer then the chapter itself that it was posted
10255802
That’s pretty long, I’m surprised to see you don’t have any stories you’ve written on you’re profile.
Need a break or some kind of marker between these two paragraphs. The location and character switch is too jarring without it.
Otherwise, it is going well and is interesting.
Is this a "Pony's after people", AU?
10430813
yes
Hum, from the sound of it Bronze has resentment of Shining Armor and the Elements because they got the praises for events for what he sees he should also had for doing the same thing, or rather passed over and colors his opinion of them and repressed those sentiments deep down under his 'duty' bur secretly wishes do be praised for his 'duty' and is now using it as an excuse to get some recognition of for himself for once, by manufacturing a potential crisis and maybe get some glory form himself for if he gets some commands of some sort in the colonization expedition and have the chance to boss others around for a change. I could get that earth pony farmers, with no land of their own would certainly be interested in going there and will probably make the bolt of the colonization, but what about the pegasus and the unicorn would would interest them in large numbers? Sure I could guess that there are settlers among them but what will there collective skillsets would contribute to the effort and how does their respective magic work in this wold, like controlling the weather, have the chance to name places after themselves or plunder the natural resources for themselves?
Nice to see you around again.
As for the Remaining Chrysalis loyalists, couldn't be anything thing else if she is in stone now and the rest of the reform changelings don't have to worry about feeding on other sapient beings just to survive, unless some of the reform changelings have different plans that doesn't involve Thorax in it, not sure why they would even need ponies at that point at least.
Also how would the other cases can reach that world as far as we know only Discord can reach it at the moment?
I'm curious. Are you using a "Childhood's End" (Arthur C Clarke's book) reasoning?
That for many generations humans have been getting premonitions of a great rapture causing Humanity to disappear on Earth, but really it's just magical transformation, and time dilation into future reincarnation as magical Equestrians when the inevitable magical saturation from the Milky Way's Black Hole transitioning into a new stage of maturity?
This feels a lot like the Europeans kicking the Native Americans out of their land. Well, humans have always been on the more chaotic side.
10438849
Ha, great to hear from you again. You did a pretty good break down of Bronze Shield's character. As for the changelings well.... ill tell you this much. Thorax isnt involved.
Unless bronze Sheild is gonna be a bigger part I don't see why he was introduced
Not bad, I enjoy it, though the start was a bit confusing at first
10502135
thanks for the read! The beginning is a bit confusing, i agree
10502174
Still, eager to see where this goes