Well, this has been a wild ride. I think I'll take a lesson away from this.

and I thought my red tag fiction was erotic

The story is way too hard to follow properly. I get so lost from all the descriptions that I lose what's actually happening. So much so that it doesn't align so well with what i personally like to see. I think the intention was close, but with all the attempts to add so many details the story portion gets lost in the clutter.