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Dr Sharaz Jek

Cynically Pretentious Hedonistic Nihilist...and those are my nicer qualities!


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Good whoa.

The story pic is very enticing; would love to see the full original version.

“How rude, finishing before you master!” Sunset cackled, watching her slave's psyche crumble. "Not that I blame you! Those drugs were laced with a special magic! You're now a permanent botch on heat!"

I love how Sunset bitched her evil dialogue right there! :trollestia:

Bork, bork ~ Rarity just got porked.

This is the full version far as I know, but I'd love to see it too!
Lol! Good fail there!:twilightblush:

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------ Review ------

Please keep in mind, I know I can be overly critical and negative at times. I can always find something to nitpick, even in the greatest works of literature ever written. Please don't take it personally!
-Fairly good job of giving juicy details to this one.
-Not really buying it, though ... which ruins the whole thing. It tries to be a lot darker than its fast pace and superficial detail can support, which makes it fall flat.
-Maybe reading the prequel could have sold it, but the prequel's not in the contest, so I didn't read it.
-The characters don't seem to have life in them, they're acting like puppets to do what the fic demands -- all three of them seem mindless.
-Having Sunset orgasm as well was a good idea.

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To clarify what these scores mean, check my judging rubric.
Cloppability: 50/100
Allure: 20/100
Enticement: 70/100
Immersion: 60/100
Prose Quality: 90/100
Total Score: 290/500
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