PLEASE NOTE: It is essential that you read "Anon-a-Miss Remastered" by The Blue EM2 before reading this, otherwise you may not understand certain aspects. These vignettes exist thanks to his kind permission.
This fic explores a few scenarios I've thought about after reading the aforementioned fic, and here they are. I should point out that this is not an attempt to "fix" things - the fic itself took a fresh approach and did a very good job of keeping the reader guessing right up until the end.
In the first vignette, the CHS School Detective, One Truth, has been waiting for Anon-a-Miss to slip up, only for a more pressing matter to stem from it. (Knowledge of Detective Conan is optional, but not essential.), followed by the immediate aftermath in the second one.
I like it a little over the top but still good.
Better then the original still hate that stupid super happy happy everything is fine ending!
Said he rewrite it but so far nothing.
Good stuff, I have to say. It was surprisingly fun seeing my own creation being deconstructed.
I actually assisted in cleaning an 8F at the GCR a few months ago (48305, some dirt had accumulated on the valve gear). That was hard enough, I hate to imagine what cleaning the boiler would be like.
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I still enjoyed the story even when it got dark. I was hoping to see justice given out,.......no no no not doing this again.
I already said my piece and that is that. Apologies
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Hey, no worries. You have the right to your opinion, and I shall defend that right to my dying breath.
Since I contributed some ideas to the original story this is deconstructing, I've got some to share if you're willing to have them?
I actually think I might have gone overboard with Applejack and Granny Smith being sent to prison - I might dial it back to suspended sentences (with the implication that Apple Bloom specifically asked for them to be shown leniency) and have them given Bitter Tears-style punishments by Bright Mac and Pear Butter (and a lengthy period of detention in Applejack's case).
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Sure, go ahead.
Current ideas are:
Celestia and Luna getting reamed out by the Superintendent after the CMC are cleared
Celestia and Luna not being idiots in Chapter 5
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Well, one thing's for sure: For Celestia and Luna, The CHS students, The Apple Family (especially Applejack), Rarity and her parents and the rest who have cursed and assaulted the CMC, there's only one thing that needs to be said:
...Princess, would you kindly do the honors?
Still like to read how Celestia and Luna are handling how they fubar in this one.
i do like the other ideas sounds pretty good.
90210 is a local for me. It was shedded at Stratford for many years.
Though one tip; for GWR machines, perhaps use the nicknames, not the class numbers. Talk of a GWR 4079 and most people don't know what being discussed. Talk of a GWR Castle and people tend to cotton on, especially with 7029 Clun Castle making the headlines recently.
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Just checking to see if you received my suggestions?
As of today, I cannot look at parts like this without having this running through my mind. And honestly, in this story's case, I'll arrange it to make it fitting
https://youtu.be/jXpMVmjOCrE?si=-6CJQMJ7-RraafJh&t=1
(Play from 0:01 - 0:12)
Granny Smith: POLICE, I SWEAR TO GOD!
Applejack: I SWEAR TO GOD!
Granny Smith & Applejack: NOT TORTURING A CHILD!
You know, I can just picture this: One day, Celestia and Luna were finishing another day working at the mall and are getting ready to go home when Crystal Prep's Abacus Cinch shows up and starts mocking them of their failures and before she leaves, this dialogue happens:
Abacus: You know, I really had a lot of doubt you two would pull off the school business. But it appears this Anon-A-Miss has revealed the truth about you to everyone, especially the whole School Board and Superintendent Holiday. Therefore, it has confirmed that doubt. (snicker)
Celestia: (annoyed) And what is this "truth" about us, must I ask?
Abacus: (turns to them before she enters her car) 😏That you two are worthless losers. (Celestia and Luna's teeth gritted and got angrier as she keeps talking) You both were born as losers, you'll both die as losers and only your rats will mourn the both of you. (Luna runs up to Cinch's car as Cinch got in and the door closes, causing Luna to slam her hands on the door. Celestia and Luna watch angerly as Cinch drives away.)
Luna: 😡We're NOT worthless! And we DON'T have rats!