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Great chapter, two mares certainly are working diligently to gain Rose Tints favor.
This chapter shows again how difficult just popping into existence is, but for the time being he will be fine.
After the Changeling invasion however...
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Applejack is the one talking <:3
I love how much more comfortable the story goes. Don't get me wrong, I liked the first version, but it always felt like, even at calm moments, that the MC was being chased by something, not quite rushed, but just a tiny bit faster than it should. Here, it feels comfortable to read, not just in the sense of pacing, but how Rose is integrating into the whole new world at his own pace like a sheet of plastic in a basin of amber. If that makes no sense, then blame it on the old German literature, that stuff has corrupted my sense of metaphors.
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thanks! I've worked very hard to try to bring the pacing to heel as well as make my writing wander a bit less while keeping he prose impactful ^^
I am happy that you separated the two different stories, your rewrite and the original; it was a very good chapter of this one.
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Glad you're enjoying! And yeah, I decided now was the time, since the first chapter of this version has now been seen more than the final chapter of the last one. Seemed a good arbitrary milestone.
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They are just doing the right thing! And let's not discredit the pink boys hustle >:3
And we will see when the time comes
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I am sure he will be able to run a fair bit...
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I'm not sure what this means but he is at least in decent shape, since his body is at Factory Defaults
To heavily paraphrase Smiling Jack from Vampire: The Masquerade - Bloodlines,
Brings tio mind part of the Garfield Christmas special.
ister, shaking her head. “Sorry Rose, she don’t mean nothin’ by it.”
Apple Bloom is two words. Says so right on the Wiki. Two words.
Weaving, maybe?
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I appreciate that you are enjoying my story enough to leave feedback, Thank you for reading.
If you are that invested that you want to correct errors In the material, you should join my discord and participate in my beta reader program, which lets you read chapters as they are being written and offer feedback, rather than pollute my comments section with multiple posts correcting my spelling and grammar