"These are my logs detailing the aftermath of the Great Crisis all the way to the War For Equestria and it's aftermath."
Makuta Kratus
There will be gaps between most logs due the "missing" logs being relatively minor and not important to the story itself as they're actually status updates on other things such as experiments and such, which no one wants to read a lot of those.
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Honestly, I don't get what the hate is about. The layout via diary entries is interesting and the story line intriguing. The only thing is, being as I'm not huge on Bionicle, I'm not familiar with the lore so I was a little confused at times. Other than that, I have nothing to criticize. Nice work.
I have to say, I'm not familiar with the other sourse material this is crossovered with, so it's likely that I missed out on a bunch of references and the like, but I don't think this is a bad story--in fact, I've seen far worse. The only recurring issue that I see here is that each of the entries is one long, run-on sentence. Splitting it into a bunch of shorter, standalone sentences would make reading this far smoother. Plus there were some doubled words and other occasional rough wording, but it wasn't really common. All of this makes me wonder why was this story downvoted as much as you claim as it really isn't that bad. Oh, on a side note, you might want to consider including the supplementary notes directly below the individual entries. While the chapters are short, it's still rather hard to navigate this way.
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Will improve when I move into a new house.
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I just hope it’s gonna help a little.
Sure, no rush
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Though I am working on a chapterized version of it, which is going slow.
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Chapterised version? How should I imagine that?
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It's a third person view.
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Ah, I see. Cool.