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The Red Parade


I wish you all the luck in the world, you need it more than I do.

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Everything is different yet nothing has changed. Fiddlesticks faces another sleepless night and reflects on her old friends and the life she leads, waiting for the sun to raise again.


Entry One in time changes everything.

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Hm

This was a neat little fic you have here. Quiet, introspective. Sad but with a happier ending. It was good.

This might not be what you'd intended, but the repetitiveness of Fiddlesticks being stuck in a pattern, plus her sleep issues, could stem from depression brought on by her abandonment issues. Biggest criticism I have is that it's a bit repetitive. And that it's a bit too short.

As someone who's dealt with these issues before (abandonment and mental health issues), it felt...odd that someone would just be able to decide upon such a huge life changing event like that without really thinking of the logistics of it. Which you did touch upon of course, but it still felt rather abrupt. To me at any rate.

Good read. Good job!

10070944
Fair points all around. I'll definitely be taking a look at this shortly. Glad you enjoyed it!

You know how the universe is a hologram and reality is an illusion? Good cause you got reviewed!

Good story the first thought I had for this story was that it would be similar to do androids dream of electric sheep.

10112782
Interesting. What made you think of that story out of curiosity?

10112815
The way the story is written reminds me of Philip K. Dick

10113874
Interesting, glad you enjoyed it!

Well, this was depressingly depressing. For me, stories like these are just too random. It's hard to empathise with the protagonist.

Ah’m just another background pony in someone else’s story.

(゜-゜)

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Yeah, I can understand that. Especially because this isn't a fully flushed out lifestory of a character but just a one-shot. It's hard to make empathy and a character that's never been named in the show.

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