Desperate for dates on Hearts and Hooves Day, Twilight Sparkle created a spell that would make others ask her to be their date. She's too shy to make a move herself.
But a mistake made the spell go wrong. The one who would get the action Twilight longed for was one that did not want love in this way. Even if she once thought that she would never get enough love!
Entry for the "No Author left unnoticed" Holiday Competition, with Heart and Hooves day being chosen as the holiday to make the story about, obviously.
Last, but not last, special thanks to flutterJackdash for editing this story. The edits came a day after the story was submitted, so the errors I missed when editing it are fixed now.
Chapters (4)
Twilight... ya done goofed.
And it's called herding when it's ponies, not harems.
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Oh yeah. I had "harem" on the brain when I wrote that author's note so it slipped my mind
This is the first story in which I felt sorry for Chrysalis.
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Don't blame you. This was a bad day for poor Chrysalis.
nice work
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Thanks!
Not bad...
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I'll take a "not bad".
Better than "bad".
Everypony heard about the herd...
Oh, this is just too good...
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Celestia emote?
Sequel...sense...tingling...
Dang, where do even start with this one? Poor Lovebug
The whole thing was funny. Especially Starlight's regret and Fluttershy's...lust(?).
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And to make it even worse for me: I've helped out with stories with herds, even wrote a couple of chapters with one, and it still slipped my mind.
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Glad you enjoy this story too! And poor Lovebug and Starlight.
You crammed soo many memes in there I lost count, XD
And yeah, I do wonder how they will explain this one as pits either Twilight or Chrysalis in odds with Big Mac... And you don't smacc the macc... XD
Cool story bud :) was more than enjoyable, definitely two thumbs way up! Although I would have loved to see what happened to Chrissy XD I feel sorry for her...
Also I do get with the premise since I kinda consider Twilight to be unshippable but I also thought the same of Pinkie until "The Last Laugh" aired so I can be wrong...
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Glad to hear you enjoyed the story!
Amazing Story, This Is The Best Fan Fiction I've Read Yet!
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Give it a day: you'll find something better.
But seriously, I'm happy that you enjoy it so much!
You're welcome.
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mmmNope!
Brilliant line right there.
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Thanks! I laughed even when I was typing that in.
Of course she doesn't make mistakes with spells.
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The narrator at least remembered the truth in the next paragraph.
Well, that can only end well.
Uh-oh...
Freedom!
At least Chryssie should be full for a year or two, though all that love might go to her hips.
Awww...
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Damn. My thoughts exactly
Chrysalis will likely need therapy. Or memory erasure juice (tequila).
Spitfire actually calls Rainbow a "newbie" at the Wonderbolt Academy in the show, and "noob" is a slang spelling of "newb" with the added implication of being bad at something because of stupidity, while newb and newbie just mean being bad at something due to inexperience or lack of familiarity. Cute story though!
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Thanks!
I was trying to think if any of the characters ever used "noob" and I couldn't think of a time they did. From an Equestrian's point of view that never went into the human world, hearing "noob" could confuse them, if they never heard it before to know it's slang for newbie/newb, so that was the angle I went with.
Kinda like if a brand new slang word for "best friend/bestie" that sounds similar to "bestie" was unexpectedly said: it would probably confuse you unless it's explained to you what the word means.
Or any slang word really that you're not familiar with.
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Ahh, makes sense!
https://www.fimfiction.net/group/213901/my-little-reviews-feedback/thread/448610/a-review-everymare-loves-chrysalis
Review is up for you! I'm so sorry about the wait!
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this made me think of a fan-video where Starlight Glimmer messed up a spell...