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Licensed Real Estate Agent & Notary Public. I also really love magical girls.

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Sick and tired of being overshadowed by all of the amazing ponies that live in Ponyville, Amethyst Star goes on an adventure into the unknown to show she can be just as special as anybody.

But it’s a big world out there and maybe not everyone is meant for greatness.

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I also really love magical girls.

Let me introduce you to my friend Azure!
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/23609/never-judge-a-book-by-its-cover

So, first you write a story about early Equestria and Trail Blazer filling in the map, which was close to an an idea I eventually used (for all it’s worth, Trail Blazer had a heavy hand in the comedy department there). Now, you make a story about Amethyst Star happening to go to the Undiscovered West and starting a walk in what’s presumably a straight line through it, which is the payoff to that same story.

It’s like you know all of my plans for my stories, I should start updating it faster.

It’s still a really good story, though.

I love it! :twilightsmile:

I can really relate to Amethyst’s situation, and I’m also a sucker to characters that rarely gets their attention. :twistnerd:

I can’t wait for more of this.

I don't usually go for background pony type stories, but this looks rather promising. Tracking.

Will read this later on. Looks like a very promising premise.

Neato. I'll be tracking this one. 👍

I have a feeling, that this won’t end well for Amethyst.

Keep it up! The story is going somewhere in a interesting take.

Well, this already surpasses my similar story, good job.

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Thank you for the praise. Good luck on your story.

There was also a short length of rope, because she thought adventurers always had rope with them, and an apple that she would have for breakfast tomorrow.

Well, that one way she's more prepared than Samwise:

“Rope!” he muttered. “No rope! And only last night you said to yourself: “Sam, what about a bit of rope? You'll want it, if you haven't got it: Well, I'll want it. I can't get it now.”

Her physical prowess was put to the test by a simple walk up a hill and it made her feel horrible, time to fix that.

Oh! Yeah! By playing to your actual strengths, right?

Beating up some big fighting pros who came here specifically for this tournament would be a huge confidence booster. This was a great idea!

…Oh. Uh, Amey, dear...

Martel was trying to be nice, but you got to let people make there own mistakes. Should have let her fail in the Prelims...

Swamped would be a good name for an album.

I bet the Flytrap clan is going to suspect the exact same thing.

I don’t see this going well.

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That'll be the driving feeling for the whole fic. I already envisioned this story as a parody of typical adventures and it's sort of a sister/foil to my other adventure stories, especially Trixie's. Trixie lucked into victory on every occasion even when she was biting off more than she could chew. Amethyst Star is doing the same thing but doesn't have her luck and isn't a main character loved by the world. So she fails a lot.

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Especially if she's seen coming from the exact direction of the Foxtail Clan.

I hate to say this, but I really hate Amethyst Star here. Everyone knows that the best way to deal with trolls is to ignore them, and her idea of her having to be the one to screw over the champ is just idiotic.

Yes, it would be nice if you could take him down, but winning is punishment enough.

This story is pretty good, but Amethyst here just rubs me the wrong way.

I still want to punch the champ though.

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It'll take some time before she learns anything. The theme of the story is "failure" after all.

Amethyst Star is out here being crazy and only surviving due to luck.

And this is going to be immortalized in a book, too. Everypony will know.

Oh dear. Possibly the most awesome aspect of her adventure yet, and:

1) her circle of friends probably wouldn't believe her,
2) the ponies who would would because they beat her to meeting her, and
3) she probably wouldn't really be allowed to tell anyone outside of the Mane Six.

Harlequin is rather sketchy, he reminds me of that one character that’s from Fallout Equestria: Project Horizon but I actually encountered in Fallout Equestria: Resistance because I’ve never read PH.

Anyways, they’re both sketchy dudes who appear out of nowhere and ask something that really means another thing.

Well... this guy's not shady at all, nope...

But uh, overall, throughout, Amethyst Star here does kinda strike you as the type of unicorn who might (given the opportunity) end up dabbling in dark magic to get ahead, because of course she could handle it, control herself... and suffer the inevitable consequences of not actually being prepared to deal with it (as per usual).

I dunno, just thought that was an interesting thought.

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Which one of your stories is the Trixie story?

Amethyst was smart and avoided the sketchy pony.

Or rather Amethyst Star and the ex-cultist.

I definitely wasn’t expecting this sort of cultist, she’s so nice!

Really, an inn over a tavern is only good for ponies too drunk to go home. Or, shall we say, not sleeping. (Unless the inn part is adequately soundproofed.)

“That little idiot… does she have any idea what she’s gotten herself into?”

Not since she got on the train.

I’ve read a story that involves an inn over a tavern, I suppose there would be problems with that.

The story’s good enough that I can excuse it. I also think the inn closed for the night, because there’s only one bartender, and he needs to sleep, too.

No, don’t do it Amethyst.

“Maybe now I can get to the bottom of things? Heh, wish my friends could’ve been around to hear that one.”

Well, it might just have gotten you stares. :pinkiehappy:

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And she was specifically warned against trusting him. By the rock.

So she ran away from the huge crates full of gemstones? She could have at least gotten some treasure!

I don’t know what it is, but I really like this chapter. Even if it will give me nightmares because I’m reading this at 11:00 PM because I can’t sleep.

Also, I totally thought she wandered into a Fallout Vault, I’ve clearly been playing that game too much.

Was the cactus laced with freaking LSD?

How many chapters long will this story be?

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Is this going to be the anti-Austreoh and have like, a thousand chapters?

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To be fair, Austreoh was very long for its day.

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No, no, this isn't going to be nearly that long. I'm still estimating only about 150,000 words and I think I'm sitting at exactly 55 chapters?

Of course the whole verse put together is going to be very long. And the Rainbow Dash story after this one is going to be longer than all the other individual ones put together. That's the long story.

“I hate deserts. More than swamps, or hills, or rivers… or dumb jerks that play bocce. I hate deserts,”

“So no more dillydallying, I’m done with all this dumb sand!”

In before "I hate sand" etc.

Amethyst Star essentially just gave out a heavily padded resumè.

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Why'd you respond to my comment? I'm not the author.

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Because that’s what the reply buttons are for?

You’re supposed to pitch in your own opinions with them, Dashie76 had used it in Autraeoh, a fair few frequent commenters on Fallout Equestria: Commonwealth utilize it, and people often tag comments they agree with in general, among other cases.

Well, I shouldn’t’ve put this chapter off for 3 days. This chapter’s quite good.

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Thank you, this is an important chapter to me. I love a blending of childish fun adventure with some horror, like classic Disney movies and the Wizard of Oz, Tim Burton movies, etc.

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