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BrawnyBold


Is it wrong to think Cadence is best princess? Is it wrong to think Feather Bangs is best pony? I certainly don't think so.

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Feather Bangs was going to take a mare named Strawberry Sunrise out on a date in Ponyville. When they first meet, Feather thought Strawberry was a nice mare. It wasn't until Strawberry finds some bits of apples in her food when things go wrong. Will Feather survive this one date with this strawberry obsessed mare?

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Hehe, I have been contemplating a Strawberry Sunrise story! Beat me to it. :D

Poor Feather. :fluttercry: I feel really sorry for him.
At least I know Strawberry’s weakness...think of apples as a torture method for her. :pinkiecrazy: [Maniacal laughter]

Not bad. Though I notice a couple things. Feather Bangs mentioned he was sad Sugar Belle got together with Big Mac, that's a no no on a date. Also you have a tendency to put a period within a quote a lot here when it should be commas.

Example: "Strawberries were good." said Feather.

The period at the end of the quote should be a comma, you have this mistake a lot here. The only time you would use a period is if the quote is not followed by a dialogue tag like said, which is mostly the case for second quotes that come after the tag.

Dang that girl was crazy poor Feather Bangs

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