• Member Since 6th Feb, 2012
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Alex Warlorn

Just your average Brony who happened upon an idea that might actually turn out to be clever enough for guys to love.


Just because the Veil has passed over a place means there are no more stories to tell. And it doesn't mean the fanatics are satisfied. Just ask one New Whelp.

Edited by Mtangalion.

Part of the Not Just Ponies setting. https://tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php/Fanfic/TheConversionBureauNotJustPonies

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Great story. But all hell's going to break loose with the non-pony races back in Equestria if that new gas version of the potion works there as well. "Now we can save everyone in Equestria from the horror of being non-equine, too!"

After this, Equestria will likely be extra careful who it lets into its borders.
"Equestria is a welfare state, but it's a carefully balanced one."

Then it turned out that all of the PER ponies had requested Equestrian citizenship before the attack.

None other than Princess Twilight Sparkle came to see the damage for herself.

And I spent a good minute just giggling at how that second line just tells you all you need to know about what a dumb move that was.

Burning books, and then being judged by the bibliophile.

Great, but holy shit if it didn't terribly. Not in a bad way, but damn that was dark. All of that only for the damage to be permenant and irreversible? Depressing.

Most of those people having to spend the rest of their lives either as deformed freaks or having to become ponies fully, shouldn't that be impossible? I'm pretty sure that goes against what's already been established as canon for the universe. Multiple transformations should be impossible because it would kill the subject by screwing them uo at a cellular level, either melting into goo or becoming fleshy blobs. And yet even though the kitten was never human in the first place, she doesn't get a second transformation to return her to normal, being forced to be a unicorn... I like your series Alex, but I can't say I like this one very much.

Edit: specifically, the ending feels depressing compared to the rest of the setting, not that the whole series is bad.

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