Welcome to a Equestria where vampires, ghouls and other creator hide in shadows and plain sight; where the mist rise easy; where dark magic is used to harm and twist; here Celestia have developed organisations to protect her little ponies from the things that go bump in the night, but will it be enough?
In the township of Ponyville an unnaturally localised earthquake destroy only the spa and create rumors about witchcraft, leading Mayor Mare to send a call for help to Canterlot. From the capital arrives two witchfinders - Zenith and Twilight Sparkle - to investigate, much to the anxiety to the towns secret vampire: Fluttershy.
Chapters (3)
Errrm
Interesting concept so far. Twilight is very Twilight, her mentor plays the role well, although the factor of her extraordinary ability kinda comes up without much of a lead-up. Aloe and Lotus do seem a bit antagonistic towards Rarity, not sure if that's intentional. A few typos here and there, nothing major but could benefit from a quick proofreading pass. All in all, looking forward to seeing where it goes.
Although in each case, Twilight forgot to ask the ponies how many nipples they have.
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Regarding Twilight's extraordinary ability so is that based on her canon presentation as being very powerful when it comes to magic, and I would say that Zenith's comment is the lead-up :P
When it comes to Aloe and Lotus so was I not intentional in making them seem bit antagonistic towards Rarity.
Regarding the typos so do I gladly see them pointed out if you see them.
Hope the new chapter will be to your likening :)
The description says Twilight Sparcle, I think that should be Twilight Sparkle
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Thanks, fixed