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Mousse


"Mousse once killed a man just to watch the light fade from his eyes. this isn't a bit, I am legitimately terrified of her" -numbers

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Mommy doesn’t like it when I’m myself.

So I do whatever makes her happy.

Winner of the second song contest from Quills and Sofas Speedwriting Competition. It was hosted by Drider. Art done by Charlie!

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Ooooooooh fuck.

That was good.

Wow. That story is relatable. Not for me but for a close friend. Well told. :)

Maybe his sister was Cozy Glow and his mother wants a replacement daughter?

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If you look up what a beach wave perm is, the style is pretty different from Cozy Glow. Her style is generally called sausage curls, though I can't think of what a pony pun for that would be*, and it seems unlikely the author would take the name of a totally different style and try and pass it off as another.

I wonder what drove this mother to be as wretched as she is.

*Something with Shirley Temple but a pony pun, maybe?

I'll just paraphrase what I said before, during the speedwrite, because I think it's still applicable.

I know a lot of people were surprised by the direction the story took, but I called it pretty early on. Yet, despite that, the ending still managed to hit me like a freight train. This story is truly something special, and you should be very proud.

Majin Syeekoh
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Oh damn.

Oh god damn.

Oh my god damn.

:rainbowderp: Oh man, that really got me. Wasn't expecting that in all honesty. I had to pause for a moment to fully acknowledge the lengths that last sentence threw at me.

This short story is very special and relatable to some of my friends, as they have told me.

Good Job! :pinkiehappy:

I think she wants a replacement daughter after her daughter died.

Where are the Foal Protective Services when you need them?

Send help! This story is dark as fuck, and my flashlight batteries just died!

what the fuck

Okay. I want to say that was good, but I think what spoils it for me is that the link to MLP is a bit weak, because the character is an unnamed OC, and the use of words such as "hair" and "boys" instead of "mane" and "colts."

This story is great and flows very nicely, but I feel it would have been better as original fiction with a human character.

Sorry. :fluttershysad:

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