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Marble Pie wants to know something very important. Thinking a bit, she decides to go to Pinkie, figuring that Pinkie woud be the one to know. The answer she gets, however, isn't what she expects.

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The Old Khajiit

The Old Khajiit #1 · Nov 26th, 2019 · 2 · ·

"I... just... don't know what went... wrong..."
Khajiit is sad for Pinkie and her family.

In all honesty, I don't know Marble's character enough to give an honest review, but still, good job making me fell emotional about a character I know next to nothing about.

runescythe9852

runescythe9852 #2 · Nov 26th, 2019 · 10 · ·

It felt like Marble wanted somebody to listen. I truly empathize for her.

Huk

Huk #3 · Nov 26th, 2019 · 2 · 1 ·

Relatable and sad

The Marshmallow

The Marshmallow #4 · Nov 26th, 2019 · 1 · ·

This was very interesting. I was looking back at heartbreakers recently, and Pinkie does have a tendency to speak over (or better, in place of) Marble. This is the logical extension, getting to talk for her even when she has something to say...

Also, as much as I feel bad for saying this, the "Sad" tag doesn't really do justice to this story. It plays out more like a tragicomedy, and less like a typical dramatic story.

Jackster

Jackster #5 · Nov 27th, 2019 · · ·

I agree with Princess Cadence, the idea of the story was good and definitely unique but it feels like it's missing some important details. I'm not saying this is a bad story, personally I enjoyed it, but It feels like there was a lack of build up to the ending and no offense but it feels like the plot was rushed a little bit. However I did find the concept behind it pretty entertaining and It teaches us a very important lesson when it comes to this kind of situation.

Pete100