(My own take on sao with alot of changes occurring inside it saving a few needless deaths and making it more real for a few of them later on also if anyone has a idea to strengthen the tie in is welcome)
Other tags I could not include slice of life and romance and it swaps between third and first person)
Kirito one of the original beta testers for sword art online was helping a new player to learn the game when something unforeseen happens and a creature he has never seen before appears hurt and bleeding.
Redsopine hurt and banished from his home just for being what he is after saving the life of a filly in danger revealing his true nature he finds himself trapped in a game that just became all to real asking himself if he should try help others and risk being hunted again
Well cool
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Thanks I was not sure if I came across to op also it's under edit but it's just cool
I have to say this, but you need to find a way to tell when people are talking instead of just plain text. "Using this might work"
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It's still under edit I just wanted to see if it works or not
Chapters 3 part 1 and 3 part 2 are under edit rn will be back up when done
Chapter has been edited feedback welcome
Well done.
Well done on the ending, I look forward to the next chapter.
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Thanks but I have to say thanks to you for your amazing help
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good news guys im about to start getting back to this
WOW!
You need a TOTAL rewrite.
I'm sorry, but this is just flat out too much to do by PM on Fimfiction. You need to get another proofreader.
Thanks
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I got 2 now lol ones good for lore and stuff relating to it and your great for spelling issues
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Ah the wings are part of the changes his demons have caused ones a feathered blue wing but made of ice the others like a dragon wing
Thanks will get on it RN keep it up
This is we’re the fic diverges from the anime
I saw a few miss spellings but other than that it's pretty good.
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Yup up next a dragon fight
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Looking forward to it.
Good chapter.