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redsopine


hiii just a heads up but anytime somone is kind enough to use my ocs has permission to use anytime (just no clop without me either asking or being asked)

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(My own take on sao with alot of changes occurring inside it saving a few needless deaths and making it more real for a few of them later on also if anyone has a idea to strengthen the tie in is welcome)

Other tags I could not include slice of life and romance and it swaps between third and first person)

Kirito one of the original beta testers for sword art online was helping a new player to learn the game when something unforeseen happens and a creature he has never seen before appears hurt and bleeding.

Redsopine hurt and banished from his home just for being what he is after saving the life of a filly in danger revealing his true nature he finds himself trapped in a game that just became all to real asking himself if he should try help others and risk being hunted again

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 21 )

9955793
Thanks I was not sure if I came across to op also it's under edit but it's just cool

I have to say this, but you need to find a way to tell when people are talking instead of just plain text. "Using this might work"

9956158
It's still under edit I just wanted to see if it works or not

Chapters 3 part 1 and 3 part 2 are under edit rn will be back up when done

Well done on the ending, I look forward to the next chapter.

10097243
Thanks but I have to say thanks to you for your amazing help

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9963369
good news guys im about to start getting back to this

WOW!

You need a TOTAL rewrite.

"Redsopine you stand accused of making a pact with demons. How how do you plead? "Says asked princess celestia Both title & name should be capitalized as she looks looked down on aan injured man bound in chains of mithirl and injured man his The two tone blue and green hair covering his face his red fur was stained with dark blood as was his his red fur. his wings folded on draconian and the other ice like (Not sure WHAT this means) he looks He looked up showing a eye a heavily scared scarred reptilian eye with his iris showing a reptilian eye with a black Scalia with and a greencomma redcomma goldcomma and blue iris as he speaks spokein a quit voice.(need to put a space here"We both know where this is goingnew sentence don't drag things out and new sentencedo what you have to."

I'm sorry, but this is just flat out too much to do by PM on Fimfiction. You need to get another proofreader.:fluttercry:

10320808
I got 2 now lol ones good for lore and stuff relating to it and your great for spelling issues

10320808
Ah the wings are part of the changes his demons have caused ones a feathered blue wing but made of ice the others like a dragon wing

Thanks will get on it RN keep it up

This is we’re the fic diverges from the anime

I saw a few miss spellings but other than that it's pretty good.

10696871
Yup up next a dragon fight

10696950
Looking forward to it.

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