Harriet_Farrar
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Wouldn't it sound better then to make Rainbow two or three years older than Sweetie?
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I guess 36 is a bit old I will bump it down to 27 I want to maintain the fact the RD is older than SB.
It's like you looked at my profile and said, "Hold my beer."
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That made me laugh more than it should’ve x
30 inches is like ... the length of your leg, man. All that's gonna do is kill someone.
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Ponies (bipedal, explicitly sexualised variety) don't have internal organs.
soooo.... that sorrta helps accommodate the extra hefty cock intrusions they are inserted with.
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It’s nice to meet a scholar on bipedal pony biology, Mazel tov.
In this universe, 30 inches is like the maximum safe delivery size before any real damage can be done.
I will be polishing up on spelling and other errors sometime tomorrow when I get home from work.
SweetieDash? UNF YEAH! wait... futa? damn... fine I'll give it a read anyway.
Some criticism:
1: The grammar is pretty terrible. Spell check/Grammarly are great tools, but you still need to reread what you wrote so that Sweetie's breasts are inside of a shirt and not a "shit."
2: 30 inch penis
3: The reasoning for not getting food is pretty weak. There's no Jesus in Equestria so there's no reason for stores to be closed on Sunday, unless Chick-fil-A owns Ponyville. I guess the market could be closed on the weekends, but that still leaves Sugar Cube Corner as well as Sweetie's own house full of food.
4: 30 inch penis
5: Rainbow Dash is sick. The last thing she's probably thinking about is sucking on tits.
6: 30 inch penis
7: There's no build up or real foreplay or seduction. The first thought Rainbow has when seeing a penis (still sick) is "Guess I'm gonna be a slut now, despite being a virgin for 27 years."
8: 30 inch penis
9: There's 1900 words of build up and then just 500 words of actual sex. Most of which is us being reminded about how big Sweetie's tally-wacker is (It's 30 inches). Most readers haven't even unbuttoned their pants yet.
10: 30 inch penis.
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Thanks, when I have time today I will put this advice to good use.
Just revamped and polished up the first chapter so now hopefully most of the mistakes are now fixed
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I’ am planning on doing a non-futa Sweetie Dash fic, do you have any suggestions on what you would want to see in it. xx
Kind Regards.
Harriet Farrar
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I like vanilla stories, maybe something about they having a hidden relationship for years that now they can reveal to the others because Sweetie is now of age.
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Sounds good, would you prefer the characters being ponies, anthro, EQG or human
Chapter 2 is out, please tell me what you think.
don't forget to post suggestions of what you would like to see next. x x x
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I like all of them, but if you ask me my favorite, it's anatomically correct ponies, meaning teats, flares, vaginal winking and the sort.
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Donkey punch a violent sexual act normally performed during oral sex or or doggy style sex. It's on urban dictionary.
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There's a violence tag and fetish tag
Good idea, the execution just could have been better. I'd recommend getting a pre-reader, working on your grammar a little bit, and the story itself could have been a little bit longer. Overall it's a 6/10, though!
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There are more chapters on the way and for chapter length, I only write to what I feel comfortable with, I don’t know who to ask to pre-read my work unless you're interested. (>^_^<)
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I could give it a try! Can't promise my schedule will be completely free but i could help when i get time!
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That would be much-appreciated thank you x
Glad to have been a help! Keep writing! <3
Chapter 2 edited by me! Hope you all enjoy! <3
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Thanks for all of the hard work x
Great work keep it up
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Thanks.
so far i like it and will read the later chapters soon
That was definitely something I wasn’t expecting. Very nice though.
Thanks for the fic so far! I hope there is more eventually!
This chapter got a good laugh out of me