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A magician never reveals her secrets. The Great and Powerful Trixie just happens to have a few more secrets than most magicians. For example, she’s actually a princess of Transylmaneia. And she may or may not have doomed Equestria to eternal night. That's not even the biggest secret, either.
An entry in FanOfMostEverything's Imposing Sovereigns II contest, for the prompt Trixie / Coronation. Set between seasons 8 and 9.
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Ah, a good old fashioned Twilight/Trixie story where they are forced to listen to each other without stabbing the other in the eye with their horns. Sharp words, though? Fair game!
And the story narrated by Trixie is sure to be entertaining, even if some of the details may be slightly bent to make it so.
The back and forth between Trixie and Twilight is hilarious. Despite Twilight being the more learned one, Trixie is still able to match wits. The two make quite the pair, no?
Well, leave it to Trixie to go big when trying to claim princess-ship. No other way, really.
Oh, and a new challenger has appeared!
Of course Starlight would get involved. Those two are joined at the hip. Still, it's amusing how the two tease each other into doing what they want. Just like friends do!
I know who the real princess is!
Though, it's just a matter of putting two and two together.
Definitely liking this and all the amusing twists. And of course Twilight should know that misdirection and half-truths are Trixie's forte. C'mon, Twilight, show us what you've learned.
Wow, not how I was expecting this to end. The lead up, sure, but the final conclusion... good thing Trixie's picking up some good friends.
Overall, this was great. And powerful. But mostly great. All the little ticks that make me love Trixie are here along with a healthy dose of humor.
Let's hope Transylmaneian, and the rest of Equestria, are ready for her.
Awesome story, well rounded with an engaging plot. My ONLY nitpick is that you didn’t use Romanian city names like Brasov “brashoof” Timisoara “Timidsoara” or Cluj “Clopj” to give Transylmaneia a more, well, Transylvanian theme
Tatters and Drifting are essentially batpony Lyra and Bonbon irrespectively, and I love it. And the story in general.
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Trixie and Twilight sniping at each other are just such fun to write. I love the larger-than-life characters, which is basically most of why I chose Trixie for this contest in the first place, and Twilight makes such a good foil for her, whether it be
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Huh. The snarky baker and the quirky musician. Yes, I can see that now you say it. I hadn't intended that parallel at all, but I'm quite happy with it, whether it be subconscious or coincidental.
Glad you're enjoying the fic... and I look forward to seeing what you think of the later bits
I actually figured out a mystery before the reveal! That usually doesn't happen.
In any case, fantastic stuff, from Trixie's Kenobi-level "truth"telling to the kind of fumbling intrigue I'd expect from a good D&D campaign to the satisfying ending that still leaves potential for more. Thank you for it, and best of luck in the judging.
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And what probably really sticks in Twilight's craw is that Trixie was able to save the day (literally, in this case), despite more or less bumbling into the solution and now has all this new responsibility. She's never going to hear the end of it. It's going to be a looooooong sovereign for Twilight...
A pretty good read overall! I liked how things turned out in the end...even if some bat ponies were too stubborn to try and accept a good deal when given to em...heh. Still, if there's a possible sequel it invites some intrigue and possibilities. Besides, TGaPT does best with someone to butt heads with more often than not.
And Drifting Melody...well, that also has some fun prospects for her too. All and all, I enjoyed it immensely! 
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Yay! Which mystery? The end of ch4 reveal about Trixie, the end of ch5 reveal about Requiem, the "real princess", or how Trixie could stop the Penumbra? Each of those were designed to be at least theoretically guessable, though I'd be somewhat impressed if many people managed the second or fourth.
Kenobi-level "truth"telling is a highly entertaining characterisation, even if not quite fair... Trixie did take care over the exact words she used and left a lot to implication. I think "destined" is perhaps the most quibbleable "truth", but the rest are quite carefully worded.
I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
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Thanks for the kind words! I wish I had thought of using horsepuns on Romanian city names, but the thought sadly didn't even occur to me
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Thanks for the kind words! I was trying to give a satisfying ending that still leaves potential for... well, perhaps following up if FOME gives the contest a third run
And especial thanks to RTStephens for leaving his thoughts on each chapter as he went along, because I do so love it when readers do that
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The latter two. Guessing how a "blood door" works is fairly simple, and confusing cause and effect is a very clever but frequently used way of obfuscating things.
And hey, everything Trixie said was true from a certain point of view. I'm sure Obi-Wan could make verity crystals turn any color he pleased.
Mhm.
So... this is how the civil war started, right?
I'm sad that Trixie isn't a real Princess. Seeing her in that kind of a role is something I'd rather enjoy.
Trixie was casting an illusion on the crystal to make it appear green, right? I bet she knows how to cast spells while hiding her horn glow.
9937260 It's definitely why Las Pegasus is now hovering over Trotsylvania and Flim and Flam are repelling gargoyles from their rollercoaster.
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She's just very good at being careful what she says. Drawing her audience's attention to what she wants them to notice and skirting away from other things. This is all part of the magician's art.
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Nicely done!
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Hahaha. That's another delightful mental image, and yes, the Flim Flam Brothers would be another fantastic pair of larger-than-life characters I'd love to write.
I'd imagined Twilight (and Starlight) would support Trixie in her new endeavours, albeit somewhat grumpily in Twilight's case. Civil war? That'd need something to go very badly wrong. And fortunately there aren't any batponies with a grudge against Trixie who have a vested interest in things going very badly wrong for her, so we should be fine...
Real fun story! Loved the framing setup like others have said it's great to see Twilight and Trixie put in a room together and just grate away at the nerves.
I particularly liked the truth telling gem and Trixie's mastery over it. Either by her self delusion or artful truth bending. I also do love it that she's gotten a bump in intelligence while still very much sounding like Trixie still.
The heist-movie quality when the rest of her 'team' shows up is great too and I love me some Startrix relations. The details and backstory of the batpony society could have filled a fic twice as long as this one. Very interesting and very nice! I hope you revisit the setting sometime in the future. Perhaps showing how Trixie settles into her role
Ooo, this was fun. I have to say I’m unsure about the colored text—I had to stop reading once the red text came in because it didn’t show up well on my screen and I had to fiddle with it and I’m not sure it added enough to justify the distraction. Minor gripe, though.
The other thing that bugged me, I hesitate slightly to mention, because it’s quite subjective, but in the interest of honesty: I didn’t like Trixie’s narration as much as I wanted it to. It wasn’t bad, I just wanted it to be more Trixie, I suppose—there were moments where it did, certainly, but also some where I thought it could’ve been anypony talking,
I really like the use of the narration, though. Quite a few stories in the competition have relied on big exposition dumps to get backstories across, so this one taking a more thoughtful approach was a breath of fresh air and really helped me stay engaged.
Nice work!
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Thank you! "Heist-movie quality" is a nifty description: I hadn't quite thought of it in those terms myself, but I'm happy with the comparison :)
Once I knew I was writing about Trixie's exploits in Transylmaneia, it was always a necessity that Starlight turn up somehow. I love their dynamic (and Starlight generally, really), especially if there's an opportunity for a situation where Starlight can jump to a magical solution where something else might have made more sense
Amusingly, that's what this fic was actually originally going to be: Trixie dealing with the batpony aristocracy and the challenges of actually ruling a province. But then I realised the details of how she came to be ruler had enough going on that they would fill a fic all by themselves. I am definitely keen to write some more in this setting, though it probably won't be till the spring.
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Yeah, I think the coloured text was an experiment that didn't quite work. I was trying to make it be a colour that works both on FimFic's light mode and dark mode, but that interfered with the legibility somewhat. I might go back and just edit the colour out... I'm pretty happy with how distinct Trixie's and Ethereal Requiem's narrative voices have come out.
Interesting you wanted more Trixieisms in the narration: I was worried I'd overdone it with her little narrative asides and "great and powerful"s and so on. I did try to read out everything in blue back to myself in Trixie's voice to make sure it fit coming from her. I shall bear this in mind: Trixie's voice in the series is so exaggerated that fanfics can take a lot of overdoing it
Glad you enjoyed it!
Fun little story! Great job with Trixie's voice, too--I think you really got her down!
One question, which I hope hasn't been answered--any thoughts on Requiem's relation to Heartslash? Is she an illegitimate child, too?
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Thank you!
In my mind, Ethereal Requiem's real deal is something like she's actually one step further removed than she says, so her official position in the line of succession is a lot further down the queue than she claims. Her dad was a cousin of the Queen, or cousin once removed or some such. She was an ambitious young teenager when she perceived that the Queen had no true heir - think Diamond Tiara or Sunset Shimmer - so she falsified some evidence that her dad was actually the Queen's younger brother; then she got that evidence accepted as official history - hence the "it is a matter of public record" line at the start of ch3 with the echo in ch5. I never worked out the precise details but I intended it to be something like that. Sensible question!
Hehe, it took me a bit to catch that one.
I hear it's not a good place to stop at, though.
Hmmm... subtle Girl Genius reference?
I have to say, Trixie has almost CelestAI-grade skills of weaselwording here.
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For me, it was odd to see Trixie use first person pronouns, especially when talking to somebody, but that's really a minor gripe.
Overall, this was a really nice mystery story, and Requiem's reaction was both interesting and believable - kind of reminiscent of Chrysalis, if in slightly different circumstances.
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The Girl Genius reference was not intended; it's been 10 years or more since I read that, delightful though it is.
I'm very gratified by the CelestAI comparison, though: it wasn't a reference I had in mind either, but that's undeniable high praise for the "art of the technically true"
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Ah, now that was a point that I did take care to check when writing this. In the show, Trixie does actually say "I" and "me" a lot, much more than "Trixie". Even right in her first appearance, she chops and changes between third person and first person all the time:
She's mostly third person in season 1, but the distinction all through the show is basically between when she's in performer mode and when she's being honest. The other first person moment in Boast Busters is when we see her at her most honest:
By the time of No Second Prances and Student Counsel, she's using "I" and "me" almost all the time, just seasoned with third person enough to keep the habit going. No Second Prances of course includes the line which was kind of the inspiration for this entire fic, and also shows Trixie casually talking in first person:
I'm glad Requiem's reaction seemed believable to you. I wasn't sure of it, whether I should have her take Heartslash up on the offer, but I thought it just felt better to have her (as you say) do a Chrysalis and angrily refuse.
Thanks very much for the kind words - I'm glad you enjoyed the fic!
This was an immensely fun read. I always love seeing Trixie being great and powerful.
You've been reviewed
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And a very kind and complimentary review it is too! Many thanks!
Damn Trixie, you savage.
A truly Great and Powerful fic. It was a joy to read and really showed Trixie at her best, good job and thank you.