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OfTheIronwilled


Ash. they/them. Loves Fluttershy, Pokemon, and the color pink.

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Twilight Sparkle succeeds in finishing Starswirl's mysterious spell, but just as her friends have rediscovered their true callings Celestia informs her of a new great purpose. Twilight and the other Element Bearers are to travel far beyond Equestria's borders, perform a spell together, and once again seal away an ancient evil that threatens not only Equestria, but all of Equis. Of course Twilight and her friends have vanquished many a foe in the past, so this seems simple enough.

But it's not. Celestia isn't telling the entire story. There is more to Starswirl's spell - and Twilight's destiny - than the six bearers have been told.

Thrust deep into an unknown world with little direction, Twilight and her friends will soon find that there's more to Celestia and Luna's shared past than they could have ever thought possible... and that the Equestria they call home may already be far beyond saving.

Just how, exactly, was Equestria really made?


An alternate universe diverging at the very end of "Magical Mystery Cure". Ignores comic canon. An attempt was made to stick to canon geography, but considering the world hasn't been mapped out in full there will be headcanon thrown in as well.

Chapters (7)
Comments ( 17 )

This is well done for a first chapter, and sounds intriguing. There's not a lot to go on yet, but I'm interested to see where this is heading, particularly if it involves world-building around Equestria's origins. Your use of imagery and little pony-esque details (nickering, etc.) makes the writing feel vivid and grounded. It does feel like it runs a little slowly overall, you could pick up the pace a bit, but then again that might just be me. I do tend to focus on the specifics of what happens, whereas you're taking time to make events and interactions more concrete and detailed, which is great.

Keep it up, and show us the world as you see it!
:twilightsmile:

Immq be honest I saw the name and thought this was a re5 crossover lol

Definitely a very interesting and intriguing start. I'm going to definitely favouriting this story to see what will become of it.
Oh, and one thing I couldn't help but notice.

“Uh, Sugarcube,” the ground said. It felt suspiciously soft and warm. Around there was a chorus of groans that sounded a little too familiar. “Y’all okay there? Y’mind getting off ‘a me and telling us all that the hay is goin’ on?”

Since Applejack is only referring to Twilight here, it sounds a little weird for her to use y'all, since it's short for "you all".

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Y'all not only plural but constitutional and definitive pronoun,, this a topic for debate :P

I have to agree with Let's Do This I'm definently intrigued and am looking forward to more of your world. Liked and followed my dear author.

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I'm glad you're intrigued! Things should pick up a bit as things get going, but for the beginning I really wanted to make sure that the interactions were solid - I love adventure, but to me it's the interactions between the adventurey bits that are really interesting. Also I'm glad you liked my ponyisms, because I love writing them. Idk, the idea that the characters pulling off ancient spells and taking on magical creatures are still, in fact, teeny tiny horses is really cute and funny to me. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story as we go along!

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Aw thank you for the favorite. And yeah, the "y'all" thing is kind of debatable, but in my experience living in the rural south, people definitely say y'all when referring to one person sometimes. I can see how it could be distracting though :twilightblush:

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Thanks for giving my story a shot! Hope you like what's to come. :twilightsmile:

I really hope that Twilight's not doomed to follow a path her mentor went down for no better reason than no one warned her.

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Don't worry friend, things are a bit more complicated than they may first appear.

Intriguing. Is this being continued? :)

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Yes it is! This story is super important to me, and I plan on seeing it through to the end. Unfortunately real-life stuff has gotten in the way the past couple months, but I hope to continue soon. If you go to my profile page, I have a small section where I list my current fic progress, if your ever curious :twilightsmile:

That was a good chapter. I wonder how far outside Equestria they are.

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That's assuming that map shows the entire world, when it's possible there's undiscovered locations. And it only shows major landmarks, when there's doubtlessly smaller towns and things located between locations as well. :raritywink: Not to mention that this map is slightly inconsistent with past maps as well as those in the comics. Still though, this is a good resource, so thank you. :twilightsmile:

That was a good chapter goodluck with the next one. I wonder how Twilight and her friends will react to this news.

That was a good chapter. I wonder if this unknown evil is truly a great threat or if all these Alicorn's just hear the rumor of it being overpowered and just give up on fighting it.

Nice to see this back!

I wonder if mistake refers to the mind reading or something else?

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