• Member Since 6th May, 2012
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Lightning Flicker


A writer with a bit of a scattered brain, but always appreciating a bit of positivity.

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Everyone knows about Celestia and Luna, the raisers of the sun and moon respectively. But, what if there was a third, nearly forgotten Alicorn that was the older brother of them both?

A "what if" scenario that played through my head.

Also...first story I'm starting here. Would love to have constructive criticism.

(Cover art is...well, filler until I get something better, but totally not my art)

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 17 )

Very good story and I hope to read more in the future

Oh crap I can see this story developing into something great. I look forward to battles twists and tomfoolery from discord:pinkiehappy:

And, of course, the whole ordeal with Nightmare Moon.:pinkiecrazy:

cool more more more:heart:

A little more cute and family fun. Hope ya'll don't mind.:ajsmug: Things won't stay this way too much longer. Took me three days to get this thing to the way I wanted it to look. :twilightsheepish:

dude you are an amazing writer. This story deserves more views. I think the reason it doesnt have is due to missing picture and also because of the intro. People hate new alicorns for some reason but I am happy that I gave this a shot:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

I would gladly put a picture on this story, but I don't really have one that would fit...not to mention, getting cover art for it, while high on my priorities, is something that comes second to trying to update this once a week if possible.:rainbowdetermined2:

two things, One, I love how Terran's turning out, Two I hope my vote will get him more views LOL. It's pretty awesome how a way to explain Cadence turned into such an interesting story though. congrats!

Spent a while with trying to get the spelling and everything to be as...correct as I could manage, also, extra long chapter, woo!:pinkiegasp: Again, sorry for the long wait. Hopefully inspiration will come a little quicker.:unsuresweetie:

Sounds interesting. I will track and read when I can.

Seriously this deserves the feature box. Its creative, cute, very humourous and im although any actuon has yet to take place i love the tranquil style of writing.

Fixed a few things in the chapter, overuse of ellipses where they weren't needed. Gah, I wish I had more time in the day to work on this at times.

One problem with this story.
it hasnt been continued!

Update for all you who still are watching for a New chapter, I'm finished with it but still need to tweak it a bit. Currently I'm at work but I should be able to get it written and posted when I have access to my computer later. Also hoping I'll be able to work on it faster, but work is a fickle thing with alternating work days.:ajsleepy:

I feel like I should retread the first 3 chapters. Good chapter, short, a little difficult to make sense of at times, but still overall good, glad you're back.

6693782 Good to be back, I'm still trying to get this back off the ground, and I'm sorry about any hard to follow parts.

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