One thing leads to another after Spike breaks up with Gabby... starting with Spike getting his head together, with Rarity's help. A slow-burn, ongoing piece of indeterminate length beginning a couple years after S9E25 that is going to end with a Sparity wedding and yes, that's a spoiler, but the journey's more important than the destination, am I right?! Anyway if you want to read a nice and comfy fic where the characters talk about their feelings a lot that isn't too dramatic about it, come on in
Rated T, just to be on the safe side; while there's no severe language or content this fanfic does deal with some slightly more mature themes than the show itself. Also the dragon and the unicorn are going to make out when the time is right, it is foreordained, by me. I fully intend to take my sweet time getting there though, fair warning.
Cover art by Pia-Sama, because of course it is. Cropped and dinked around with a bit in The GIMP by me.
So far this is a good story! I'll read the future chapters.
That story is seriously intriguing ! I am glad for all the finale references and the continuity you are building. As far as I can tell, you and I are the only ones writing finale inspired Sparity fanfics. I am working on mine since the end of September, it has different approach but talks about Spike and Rarity's future. I am eager to to share it here.
Please upload new chapter soon, I really want to know what happens next. And I am all for the development of the relationship in your own pace.
Heh, gown face. Well played
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Hey, after registering here I checked out other Sparity stories on the site and I read the one you wrote set in the aftermath of the S8 Xmas special, it was pretty good! (I actually stole a tiny detail from it in chapter 3, you might have noticed) Looking forward to your next one. Thanks for reading my thing so far, I should have chapter 4 ready inside of the next week
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I will probably start uploading my story on the future Sparity very soon. I think that with enough hard work, it may be one of my better stories. I am so very exicted to see both our stories unravel. I am eagerly waiting for your next upload.
I did enjoy this chapter! Great bonding between Rarity and Spike. I'll be looking forward to the next chapter and onwards!
Sorry for the delay. I forgot that a new chapter was posted until today.
This was a lovely chapter!
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No big deal, it's not like it's your job to read my fanfiction! Thanks for enjoying. The next chapter will introduce a bit of drama, I think. (Though don't worry, I am definitely not veering wildly from the cute quasi-romantic fluff! it's too much fun to write)
Well... I am waiting for more! I hope spike have a growth sprunt soon...
Great chapter!
On my way to read a new chapter !
Awesome, Rarity is so cute with her emerging feelings. Also, Button Mash always causes problems ,in my fic Sweetie had an argument with him as well.
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I spent a while trying to avoid using Button Mash, partly because I read that part of your story, actually! But eventually I relented and used him; nopony else seemed to fill the specific niche I needed, and I wasn't desperate to make an OC just for that role.
Thanks for keeping up with this, by the way! I'll get round to the rest of yours soon enough, I haven't yet
Well, this is a very interesting story, dear. I quite like it so far. It has magnificent and vivacious details of the areas involved in each chapter and I especially fancy your descriptions of the sun set and the cascades.
I would have liked to have a better idea of where the characters are in relation to the path of the running of the leaves, however. There was no real direction indicated in regard to where Pinkie and Fluttershy were facing as they sat on the blanket, where the blanket was settled in regard to the stands and I didn't honestly understand where Rarity and Sweetie were while they discussed matters of preparation, as it were.
It is simply easier to read when you don't need to give much thought as to where the characters and objects are. It is a touch distracting when you need to ponder where everything is in a particular scene, at least for me. There isn't much left to the imagination in that fashion, so to say, if the writer conveys that. It is your story, after all and your imagination needs to be transparent on the pages so that I see what you see. Of course, that does not take much away from this impressive and engaging tale, I must say, dear.
The only other criticism that I have is the sort of excessive use of the words you know, by both Rarity and Spike. I may be erroneous and I certainly apologize if I am, but I don't think that either of them use those two words together very often in the show, at least not at the end of a sentence. It strikes me as odd, but then again, I haven't watched the show in a little while. I think that I do remember Rarity phrasing a few sentences like that beginning with you know, as a realization of sorts, but it seems different to me when it is at the end of a sentence.
I am very happy with how you have written the characters, except Spike seems a tad peculiar at times. I don't think that he would say s'up to Rarity, even while wearing the stylish jacket. I feel like he would generally use more sophisticated language, if you will, with her at least. I also wish that the writers would have had Rarity fashioning ensembles for him in the series, because he is her favorite dragon and would want him to look fabulous and magnificent even if she didn't return his feelings, but it never truly happened other than his tuxedo and the bow tie.
Even so, I do rather like this story thus far and I am now dreadfully melancholic for having to wait for the next chapter to see how Rarity and Spike's complicated relationship blossoms further. I trust that there will be a reveal of the fire-ruby to Spike by Rarity in supplementary chapters, yet that is likely far off.
I believe that that is all other than your vivid use of words to present a variety of details and how you subtly and clandestinely demonstrate the strength of their relationship with how they speak to one another so fluently, but with a scant few touches of difficulty and hesitancy sometimes. They do always manage to talk after a touch though, which I like. Well done so far and I look forward to more, dear.
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Hey, thanks a lot for reading! Don't be too worried about the next chapter, I'm working on it -- 3.7k words as of last night. It should be ready before the 25th unless irl crap comes up. I've been a little slow lately because it's January and I suffer a bit during this godforsaken month, y'know?
Also thanks for the crit, it helps me out. To respond to your points a bit:
1. You're right to call me out wrt positioning characters into a scene, I admit I wasn't paying much attention to it... to an extent it's up to the readers' own interpretation but I could have been clearer. I'll probably quietly go back and elaborate a bit later (I will not draw attention to this when I do!)
2. Spike saying "S'up" there is supposed to be awkward -- I'm trying to be subtle about his attempts to assert himself a bit more. Consider who else used the phrase earlier on in the story -- he's trying to be a cool guy in mixed company, without thinking through whether it's an appropriate way of greeting Rarity. Putting his name on the jacket is a bit more obvious towards that end! I probably could have made clearer that that was his intention.
Again, thanks for reading! I hope you like the future chapters.
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Oh, it is an absolute pleasure. I do like writing these to try and help other writers to improve. It is what I need from readers and other authors too. I simply do not have the time to write like this for everyone, which is truly a shame. The most important thing for me is being undoubtedly positive that I don't hurt anyone by my writing, through misconstruing my words, phrasing or otherwise and that takes a long time of thought. Writing is an art as much as drawing and painting is and it therefore is an extension of the writer. I do not ever intend nor wish to prevent anyone from showing who they are and writing is especially beautiful and powerful to me. Well, that is marvelous to read, dear. Oh, well, since you ask, I quite like January. As long as you are prepared for each day and wear suitable and stylish clothing, no day is truly terrible. It is all about the mood, dear.
I know that it can be difficult to write your precise thoughts on the page, because it makes sense to the writer where the creatures and items are while writing, yet in my opinion it is necessary to keep attention on what is important. It is like you are a magician and you accidentally misdirect attention to what you are doing, in a sense. It distracts and loses attention that you thought you would have by disregarding the minute details. You don't need an entire paragraph on the topography of a pristine, exotic white rug in the exact center of a living room, but it upsets me a bit, even in my own prior tales, how I have to think about where a writer has thought that their characters are.
I am not innocent in behaving like this and I admit it too, but it is worse in published authors when I cannot garner from their writing where everything is. "I paid for this and now I have to think about what you wrote?" Mmm, that doesn't apply here though. I have to find a semblance of stability, if you will. I want to experience your world by you taking me through it, not supplement yours with an approximation of what I imagine it to be, because it would instead be my world. There are matters for readers to interpret in some circumstances, but I find myself distracted more about having to think about their placement so that I can properly enjoy the story. If I don't, I have to keep changing where something is when something else appears in that location, to actually enjoy it. I would have to read most paragraphs twice to understand, which I think would upset some after a time if it persists.
Well, I think that I understand, but you could deal with that in a different fashion. If you have him think of doing or thinking something to himself and doing or saying something else, I believe that that would be useful too. It may not be as subtle, but it seems truer to his character. Spike is mature enough not to really mimic anyone to seem confident and would know that Rarity wouldn't like that. I don't think that he would either after his encounters with Garble. It is a bit of a contradiction when he realized through Rarity's sweet and adorable assistance that he was sort of following after Gabby for protection from the spotlight, because it would be another comfort of not having to be himself. He knows that he needs to deal with his opinion of himself; what he thinks he can accomplish.
He would still want to be himself because he has seen how other characters who act cool or look cool at the off behave. Truly being cool in this context would be being helpful, considerate and generous and he already is because of his friends and himself. I think that his thoughts before an approaching conversation should be about telling himself that his friends won't care and would likely encourage him if he says something that may seem unusual, but audacious and healthy for him, especially after his quazi-court appearance with Rarity, Twilight and Smolder.
Yet he would still suffer from anxiety about it because of his past and thinking that he isn't good enough and likely not be able to say precisely what he wants on the first few attempts at changing himself. He could honestly even start to think about how Rarity and Twilight would encourage him if they could hear his thoughts and stand beside him in spirit in situations that are stressful, to be brave in the matters of hesitancy and fear of opening one's self to others to assist him in this regard after a while. That is the only time that anyone can be brave, after all. I think that that would be a magnificent way to show his growth. His friends and Rarity give him strength.
Oh yes, I appreciate your kind replies and consideration and I do hope that all of this is helpful and not taken in a disrespectful fashion. You may use or disregard any and all of this if you like. I am certain that I shall fancy any supplementary excursions with this lovely and fabulous couple, dear.
Quick update in case anyone is wondering why I missed my self-imposed Jan 25th deadline: real life crap hit me hard last week, shit hit the fan somewhat at work (for my boss more than myself) and my mother is in hospital after suffering a hyperglycaemia attack (she's fine now but it was scary for a while!). Also my current chapter is overrunning and I don't want to end it yet, I'm 7.5k words in and there's gonna be at least 2k more. It is still happening! Watch this space.
Great chapter!
Ooh, another magnificent chapter, dear. I do not mind the length of it either, especially if the majority of it is simply my favorite couple chatting and clandestinely flirting with one another.
This is my favorite thus far, I must say, largely from Rarity and Spike's interactions. Thank you ever so much for this addition. Oh, I would love to see more soon. I know precisely how you feel about having half of another chapter written by the end of one too.
I hope that your mother is recovering too and there is no need to explain why you were delayed.
Mmmmm. Yes. This is warm and fuzzy. Great so far! Much wow!
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Thanks for enjoying so far. Hope you enjoy the new chapter!
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I mean you're not wrong, I was pretty up front at the beginning about how the journey was more important than the destination but I guess I was feeling a bit bad over the last couple chapters taking so long -- I do want to get to where I'm going eventually! Fortunately this new one came out easily... hope you enjoy it!
Great chapter!
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Oh, yes, it is. The journey is always more magnificent and fun. That is fine. I feel guilty about leaving my story for so long too. I think that I may need to fix that little oversight as well, as it were.
I most certainly did enjoy it. I quite fancy this one, truthfully, even more so than the last. It is a little unfortunate and sad how it ended, because Rarity and Spike were really comfortable with one another, but it isn't unexpected. Still, poor Rarity. It is also rather understandable given the elegant mare's previously expressed confusion to herself about her burgeoning feelings for her dragon. She doesn't want to lead him on or be taken advantage of, even when she desperately wanted to surrender to that bliss.
She learned from doing that with him before and handled the situation as best as she could. Rarity would be positively remiss if she allowed herself to do that again without knowing precisely what she feels toward him. Experiencing something like what she did with Spike is quite a serious matter, especially because it is him. Spike is also quite lucky that Rarity is so patient and forgiving, yet she will likely be giving him several severe reprimands and admonishments. I completely understand why she couldn't tell him that, or really much of anything because of the overwhelming flourish of emotions.
I wonder if I will read about that and Spike's conversation with Gabby when they meet next. It will probably have them both crying by the end, but at least they won't be melancholic alone. Everything before that was terribly entertaining, sweet and not simply a little provocative. Other than the intentional mistake in regard to Spike's actions, this tale doesn't seem rushed at all.
I am also elated to see some Fluttercord. It is likely my second favorite relationship in this series as well.
Nice chapter!
Oh, this is another fabulous chapter, dear; they only seem to be improving after each one. That is not to say that any of them are terrible, goodness no, but I love the vocabulary, the sweet melancholic snuggles and the connection between Rarity and Spike. Now, it is clear to both of them that they have feelings for one another, it is purely a matter of waiting to see what happens between them. I can imagine much more vivacious teasing and flirting betwixt the lovely pair as well as some less than pleasant circumstances, so to speak.
I am very curious to see where you bring this wonderful and very poignant tale, my dear Mareity.
Great chapter!
Were some of Earth’s modern technologies like helicopters and other things existed mentioned in this story before?
Is the mirror supposed to be a foreshadow for something happening later on?
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Don't read too much into the helicopter, I was just making fun of the time there was a Hasbro-mandated pony-driven helicopter in the show for like two seconds that got used for a gag. It's meant to be ridiculous and anachronistic!
The magic mirror may well figure into things later. It's the same one that traverses between dimensions but it can also do video calls now! I think in continuity the only thing that was capable of that was the Storm King's crystal ball in the movie , but I'm taking artistic license and rolling the two things up together... besides, long-established magical stuff in the show had a way of surprising everyone once in a while!
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Hey I was phone-posting on the comment from before and didn't specify exactly what I meant. The helicopter I was thinking about was this -
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- from "Testing, Testing, 1, 2, 3". As you can see it is pony pedal-powered. There's also a really rudimentary helicopter kind of thing Pinkie Pie uses all the way back in "Griffon the Brush-Off" but that's not mowing anycreature down
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Thanks for the info!
Oh, what another wondrous addition to the tale, dear. I quite like your characterizations and your vocabulary usage as well. I am always positive to look for different words, and styles for that matter, to use with my own writing and I always seem to glean something from you that I would like to use or that has simply faded from my internal list. I am excited to see whether Rarity heard what Spike and Sweetie Belle were speaking about. That could explain her nerves a little, unless that is purely her fretting about the well-being of the outfits, which is possible.
It also has me absolutely gleeful to see Rarity and Spike cuddling one another. It is always delightful to see how connected they are. I loved their dance as well as their somewhat matching ensembles. I am patiently awaiting the next chapter in their complicated, but nonetheless magnificent relationship.
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Hey, thanks for reading. I'm curious, what did you like about the characterisation in this chapter? Regarding the characterisation outside of our heroes (which was intentionally light on the emotional interaction after the depths of angst the previous chapter took them to, I wanted them to just enjoy doing stuff together for a while) I have slightly mixed feelings about it, although I'd like to think I did a decent job!
Part of me is concerned that I made Sweetie Belle a little too bratty but, like I said a few chapters ago, she's entered an age wherein she seeks to assert herself more, and it's not like the stuff she said to Spike was malicious, just a bit overprotective of Rarity... or at least that was the intention! I hope I didn't make her too out-of-character but it's difficult to tell! (In terms of her physical size, I may not have made it all that clear but she's no longer as small as she was in FiM and resembles her older appearance in "Growing Up is Hard to Do" almost exactly, as do the other CMCs at this point)
On the other hand I see people around saying Yona is stupid and that's just not so, she's a monosyllabic barbarian for sure but stupid she ain't, so much as rough around the edges (and seeking polish, to extend that metaphor, as we saw in "She's All Yak" -- I hope I'm doing a halfway-decent job projecting her personal development between that and her appearance in the epilogue episode).
Next chapter is on track for a majestic choir of angelic pegasi to descend from Heaven to upload it to Fimfiction before the end of April, btw. Haha I wrote all this to procrastinate from working on it, ain't that crazy and not at all counter-productive 🙀
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Well, I think that you did an excellent job of showing the side characters. Yona and Sandbar were easy to view doing and saying what they did, but they have also changed in a believable, natural manner. Sweetie Belle can be a bit like this at times. She acts a bit like Rarity too, both in good and bad ways, which she has likely seen and is trying to stop or at least ease. She wants her own mannerisms and idiosyncrasies. I can understand Sweetie wanting to protect Rarity and you explained that she is taller well enough. Rarity and Spike are very sweet with one another, even with something unspoken. It is one of my favorite complicated relationships.
Yona is hilarious, I love her. She is simply a bit naive, perhaps. She doesn't have the same boundaries that other characters have. I think that you are faring well with her development. Speaking of the last episode, what do you think of Rarity and Spike at the end? I think that the writers left it for interpretation in a way, if you want to believe that they have been dating or not. Even if they didn't, I think that after the Dragon Dropped episode, Rarity realized that she liked him more than as a friend and they eventually told Twilight that they had started dating when she returned to Canterlot, myself. They have been dating and married ever since.
Ooh, that sounds divine, dear Mareity. It isn't the silliest excuse I have heard. I look forward to it.
Toodaloo,
Victoria
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My read on Dragon Dropped is, well, the premise I've been going along with this whole time in SSME; that Spike and Gabby spent a couple years dating even after Spike moved to Canterlot, then split up, then Spike and Rarity reconnected and got together not long after that.
Dragon Dropped is an interesting thing for me and not just because it's pivotal to my fanfiction, I keenly recall hitting up a pirate video site to see it the day after it aired in China -- July 2019 was a difficult time, pony-wise, I tried not to break American air dates for the most part but I just couldn't bear it for that one thing!! I was initially really mad that a character I'd loathed in her single previous appearance -- I'd found Gabby profoundly irritating in "The Fault in Our Cutie Marks", to say the least -- was not only back but was also breaking up my favourite ship?!?!?!?! But it actually worked out pretty well all things considered. It's true that there was an imbalance between Spike and Rarity that needed addressing, and the shenanigans that transpired in that episode acknowledged and resolved them well enough that their relationship was ultimately healthier for Gabby's reappearance.
As for the time skip/epilogue, I consider the time that elapsed to be around fifteen years with the ponies in their forties. All the stuff that's insinuated in the future of the mane 6 and Equestria is grist for the mill, and it gives me an anchor point for where I'm going with this. I kind of have mixed feelings about it overall (IT'S THE END OF PONIES 😭) but more good than bad... most pertinently I was a bit mad that there was zero interaction between you-know-who besides A Look during the final song! But that was also the impetus for starting fanfic in the first place so it works out, I guess. I am no longer mad, about anything, except maybe the "season 10" comics getting delayed by the 'rona because damn right I want to see Zecora's homeland 😓
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I see. I am sorry, I suppose that I should have guessed. I was simply wondering if you had a different opinion if you only referenced the show.
Actually, that is rather entertaining. I delayed watching any of season nine for months. I was positively dreading that episode, myself. I honestly wasn't particularly fond of Gabby either when she first appeared. That is a terrible thing to say, but the high-pitched voice reminds me too much of anime characters like that. She can also seem rather attached and moody, which is hard to deal with. Was there not a better alternative for Spike to start spending time with, like Moondancer or Ember? Eugh, ah, well. I like her more now, because she helped to improve Rarity and Spike's relationship, but the episode actually made me a little annoyed with Spike. He kept leaving with Gabby without at least saying goodbye to Rarity. Simply because Rarity mistreated him before doesn't give him the right to mistreat her. Spike also calls himself a romantic and a gentledragon, but that doesn't seem like it. He should have apologized for that too.
Yes, I quite like how it was handled. It did acknowledge and remove the imbalance, as you say, or the separation between the two. I can appreciate it from both sides and either way it ends with Rarity and Spike being together, but because Rarity and Spike's relationship was growing and developing, they continued to be closer, and Rarity never told him to stop being affectionate or attentive toward her, I doubt that he would disregard that and be with someone else. Perhaps Gabby thought that it was more of a romantic sort, but Spike only recently wrote Rarity an apology instead of a loving serenade during the special and received another kiss from it. Rarity could hardly string three words together after that wonderful, heartfelt song, and he definitely saw that.
Ooh, my apologies. I went on a bit of a tangent with that, didn't I? Pardon me, my goodness. I don't have many opportunities to talk about this situation, so that is likely why. Still, I am sorry and this doesn't mean that I don't accept or love different stories, like this particular tale of yours. I just love to see Rarity being snuggly with Spike.
Actually, I am writing a story that happens directly after the Dragon Dropped episode ends, where Rarity and Spike have an important talk in a bush after hiding from the bats.
A great and lovely chapter!
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No need to apologise, it's cool to hear another read on that episode, and god knows I get off topic about this stuff! I'd actually forgotten about that one aspect of Dragon Dropped. Rarity may not have covered herself in glory throughout it due to how jealous she gets but Spike's not completely blameless in it either, the way he suddenly exits her company without saying goodbye those times is pretty inconsiderate. May be something to bring up at some point -- like I said, it's all grist for the mill! I'm interested in your own take on that, so I'll be keeping an eye on your stories.
If you've seen the post-series clip shows that have aired in Australia lately (the second one just aired today, in which Pinkie Pie feeds Twilight cake over and over between reminisces) you'll have seen there was a dedicated Sparity portion that ended with Spike emitting love hearts into the ether. He definitely still carries that torch to the coronation and beyond...
Anyway, new chapter's up! Enjoy!
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I could go on forever about each episode in which these two are present. I see season nine as bringing more respect to these two separately and together. They save each other from Chrysalis and once again defeat her with true love. She simply acts cowardly and stops casting that spell.
Yes, Spike doesn't simply tell Rarity that he is meeting someone at the start, which would be much easier. I know that it is for suspense and to baffle and upset Rarity, but it is still rude of Spike. Of course, that is not to say that Rarity isn't at fault too. We all have our weaknesses and hers is Spike, but I wanted to point to that as well. Well, thank you, Mareity. Humorously, I was wondering if you started watching me because I mentioned their important conversation in the bush. I have three stories that take place after the series has ended, one where Spike and Rarity apologize for what I mentioned above and more in the shrub that they are sharing and another that is at least one hundred years after. Heart Scales and Diamonds of the Soul is my longest story.
Mmm, I haven't actually. I will need to rectify that unconscionable behavior of mine. I didn't doubt that Spike would. Rarity did sit in saliva from an enormous tortoise to clean him. The fashionista hasn't done that for anyone else. She was so focused when wrapping that fabric around the tortoise that I don't think anything would have stopped her. If she didn't have Rainbow Dash lifting her, she would have levitated herself or even teleported in to rescue him. The roles of Molt Down's conclusion were simply reversed.
As for the finale, perhaps when Rarity and Spike shared a glance they were speaking telepathically. Honestly, because they arrived from separate places, that only makes it a little clearer to me that they are in a relationship. They could have been on a friendship quest that needed them to be in different places, but still be connected. Rarity and Spike are both adventurers in a sense, but for different reasons and objectives, of course. I am certain that they have adventures together and fifteen or twenty years later, they could have children together to care for and take with them too. There are many possibilities with that, which I like. It is a good place to end the series. Perhaps the comics will continue and establish the relationship. There is a comic that has Rarity and Spike cuddling after all. That is still my favorite comic.
Great chapter!
Is Meus or those creatures planning to capture Rarity now?
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It's taken an interest in Rarity for sure, but "capture" is too straightforward a way of putting it -- remember that it's an amorphous force of nature. Make no mistake though, Meus will return! Although not for a few chapters, unless I change my mind
Wow, talk about an increase in tempo.
Very interested to see where this goes.
I'm also happy to hear that you aren't expecting to keep that tempo going indefinitely.
I was drawn to Spike and Rarity working things out between themselves like adults.
I'd hate to see this completely change course to become a Shonen manga...
Not to say a little action spicing things up is a bad thing.
Spice is good, but take care not to overwhelm the dish.
--Spade
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Don't worry, it won't take over... I've made a start on chapter 13 already and my plans after they've all checked in on Twilight and discussed the threat involve Spike and Rarity hanging out, talking about feelings then hugging and maybe crying, as is their wont. I'm probably not going to write a huge amount in the next week due to work but I'll do my best to plod along. Anyway, the talky stuff is easier to write for me. I just like making them say stuff and then they hug, it'd be silly to overcomplicate that!
All that said, Meus (and its/their as-of-yet unnamed alternate forms) will return in due time. I didn't call this story an "epic" for nothing and whatever the hell that was besides bad news is a mystery I intend to slow-burn reveal, same as everything else in this story!
Also, thanks for reading! Fingers crossed for the next chapter before the month's end.
Ooh, I love this chapter; another brilliant addition, if I may say so.
I really enjoy how you tackle all of the thoughts that they have, either about one another or otherwise. We seem to share quite similar thoughts and ideas about their relationship and I absolutely love reading about the subtle differences. Once again, your talent with story telling shines through and I love how you described the flowers adding to the light shining into the hallway. Masterfully done and so simple too.
Of course, I positively adore how Rarity and Spike interact in this chapter. I must say, and not that you needed any improvement, but I can see how you have made Rarity's manner of speaking more complex and elegant. This is truly quite a splendid story, dear. It is probably my favorite, if I am honest.
I hope that you are doing well with this situation and this was a warm and pleasant escape from it,
Victoria
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Thanks for the kind words -- I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Honestly I was worried this chapter would come across as disembodied talking heads, which is why I put some legwork into the hallway details -- plus the flower baskets were a bit of a callback to the flower fields in chapter 8, don't you think? Also part of the appeal of writing Rarity for me is one big vocabulary flex, as you may have noticed. Nopony else in MLP lets me cut loose nearly as much as she does. She's a fun way to indulge my wordier side, which I don't get to do super-often otherwise. Also there's all the other reasons why Rarity is extremely good, but surely I don't need to go into that
The next chapter (since this is a comment on ch.11) mixes things up a bit in a manner that might concern some but do not fret, there will be more cute emotional Sparity bonding fluff very soon and I have planned things out with the whole frost elemental hivemind invader thing -- it's actually something I've intended in this story from the start. I'm just spelling this out, several times, because I know many a fanfic has become derailed by a sudden tonal shift. I know the risks and how to avoid them! I know what I'm doing!! I swear!!!!!
Regarding "this situation", hah, well, I'm honestly lucky enough to live somewhere quiet that is, compared to many places, only affected a little by The Way Things Are In 2020, so far at least, and as much as I love to quietly harrumph about still needing to work (case in point: the last week was swallowed whole by it and I've only gotten about 500 words in the bag so far, which is also why this reply is so late) at least it provides some normalcy and routine to life... not to worry, I am basically keeping on trucking, general weltschmertz aside. I hope all is well with you too 😇
Great chapter!
question: does the pronunciation "may-oos" work as well?
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Real answer: Well, you can pronounce it any way you like in your own time, but it is intended specifically as Me, as in I, and us, as in we -- in context it's related to how it refers to itself in the singular and plural simultaneously.
Comedy jerkass answer: Heh, bet u say it "May-rio" too. Owned. Pwned. Qwned x1000 *cool dude shades descend from the heavens onto my face* 😎
Great/cute chapter!
Great chapter!
Great chapter!
Great chapter!