you know I hope there a killer vs killer or her murdering a few bad ponies that make ponies like Trixie she doesn't want that near those she cares about cause bad ponies know how to play society and rules so the normal ponies miss their sins or completely blind to the monster in there amidst
Hmm, even with the plan laid out, I had trouble following some of the action in the last part. I know where Trixie ended up but I'm a little fuzzy on how that happened.
Regardless, the plan worked and now Trixie's in an odd situation. I'm curious once again to see where this is heading.
A lot of other nasty ponies in this mix. Wonder how they were able to do this for so long without getting caught. Well, "justice" was served either way.
10058191 There will be something like that in the near future. Maybe not bad pony v bad pony, but definitely some interesting combative interactions in the near future
10058235 You're right! I tried to tread a line between explaining Concrete's methodology between explaining it briefly and hitting the reader over the head with it. I thought it was well explained enough, but I should've been more coherent about it. Thank you for the feedback!
I let out a sigh, shifting in my stiff, rickety cot to face the faded splintering wood in my cramped dim work cabin. I got the top bunk because nopony was going to deny the mare that snapped a tree when she bucked it her place of sleeping. The work was easy, especially when I can’t get fatigued. It left me time at the end of the night in between drowsiness and sleep to think about things like this. I couldn’t discern if it was something beneficial or detrimental. The other ponies barely had any strength left to remain up and fell asleep as soon as their heads hit the pillow. It wasn’t a possibility that they’d leave me be, the EUP. Likewise, it wasn’t a possibility for me to flee. I had my hooves ensnared firmly in train tracks, and could only watch as it barrels towards me. It made me wonder if this was the end for me, that I’d be captured by some band of sorcerers with power beyond my comprehension and banished to the moon. Or if they’d just kill me outright. Is this my fate? If that is the case, at least I’m blessed to know it. Most ponies wander through their lives uncertain of if their cutie marks dictate their lives or if they do.
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And hoooooooly shit that last line! Ruby, you sure know how to keep the suspense.
10453761 Thank you so much for the wonderful comments! My confidence in this story wavers as a flag does in high wind, but reading your comments makes me that much more steadfast in my feelings for it! Thank you so much again for reading, I'm overjoyed that you're enjoying this story!
you know I hope there a killer vs killer or her murdering a few bad ponies that make ponies like Trixie she doesn't want that near those she cares about cause bad ponies know how to play society and rules so the normal ponies miss their sins or completely blind to the monster in there amidst
well time for shit to get more darker for Trixie.
Hmm, even with the plan laid out, I had trouble following some of the action in the last part. I know where Trixie ended up but I'm a little fuzzy on how that happened.
Regardless, the plan worked and now Trixie's in an odd situation. I'm curious once again to see where this is heading.
A lot of other nasty ponies in this mix. Wonder how they were able to do this for so long without getting caught. Well, "justice" was served either way.
Till then!
10058191
There will be something like that in the near future. Maybe not bad pony v bad pony, but definitely some interesting combative interactions in the near future
10058235
You're right! I tried to tread a line between explaining Concrete's methodology between explaining it briefly and hitting the reader over the head with it. I thought it was well explained enough, but I should've been more coherent about it. Thank you for the feedback!
These paragraphs are missing a space between them.
And hoooooooly shit that last line! Ruby, you sure know how to keep the suspense.
10453761
Thank you so much for the wonderful comments! My confidence in this story wavers as a flag does in high wind, but reading your comments makes me that much more steadfast in my feelings for it! Thank you so much again for reading, I'm overjoyed that you're enjoying this story!