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ZeroMonkey


You know what they say about monkeys and typewriters.

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The war between Equestria and the Crystal Empire has ended after nearly a decade. Thousands of lives have been lost on both sides. Although a provisional peace treaty has already been agreed upon to end the war, further negotiation is required. Thus, King Sombra will attend a formal dinner in Canterlot, where the final details will be hammered out. Twilight Sparkle is chosen to give him a tour of the city to keep him busy until then.

Written for the Imposing Sovereigns II contest for King Sombra and Peace.

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Comments ( 9 )

This was quite good for how short it is. The world is intriguing and I would love to see it expanded upon.

This is where you left off.

Leftover editing note?

Either way: fun story! I hate Sombra with all my heart.

I love how subtle some of the worldbuilding here is. Sombra being able to get away with what he did in the restaurant speaks such volumes about the state of this Equestria. This was so succinctly unsettling. Really nice job!

Poor Twilight, something about the narrative implies to me that Sombra intents to make her his... something. That said, if anyone could pull off assassinating Sombra it would be her, even an alternate version who never quite measured up, so letting her get too close probably wont end well for him.

I think I'll publically disembowel the next one. Do you think that will discourage ponies from trying?

"Have you tried... not killing their loved ones?"
"Ha! Oh, Miss Sparkle, you are a delight."

In any case, wonderfully horrible stuff. I was wondering how you'd bring together both tags, but this is indisuptably a dark slice of life. Sombra is rubbing in his victory and it's equal parts squirm-inducing and strangely fun to watch. I suppose it's too much to hope for a sunbeam to his face. Really, Celestia should've set up something in the throne cushions.

Excellent use of the gift that is the hammy Sombra we got in the Season 9 premiere. Thank you for it, and best of luck in the judging.

Got to say I was pleasantly surprised by this one! I don't generally expect much from Ye Olde Darke tag, but I was pretty impressed by how the story lets you infer the situation from context, not actually heaping on overt and explicit stuff, which I find to be a serious weakness of a lot of dark stories... This way it lets my imagination run rather rampant, which I think is pretty good!

Just enough here to give an idea of how bad things are that this is mundane. I'm left wondering a lot of things, and so I would love to see more of it. There were a few sentences that seemed to go on longer than they should, but it didn't distract too much.

Overall, I really enjoyed it, and hope you'll do a little more with it.

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It didn't work out, but I'm still proud of poor Saffron for trying. :C

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