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One thousand years in Equestria's future, two young earth ponies are chosen by the Elements of Harmony to succeed the late princesses Celestia and Luna. Transformed into alicorns, these sisters must adapt to their new lives as rulers quickly in order to deal with strange challenges and a grave new threat. Based upon a storyline by Valkyrie-Girl. Now has a TV Tropes page!

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I like where this is going. Keep it up

kinda defeats the whole "immortal goddesses" thing the princesses had goin on. and the mythos kind suggests they transcend the world and harmony (in fact, it even suggests the elements of harmony was just a type of magic celestia used). they're incarnations of celestial bodies.

so no where near canon. but it might be written decently

Hmm. I am not a fan of alicorn OC stories, but the description really caught my attention. So, I will have to give this story a try.:ajsmug:

1110111 Thank you!
1110123 No one ever said in-canon that Celestia and Luna were "immortal goddesses." They may just be powerful and long-lived. But thanks for giving it a try, at least.

1110134 Thanks! I don't really like most alicorn OCs, either. This story is a deliberate attempt to do something different with that old cliche.

1110123 Are you suggesting that since they are immortal that they are incapable of dying?:duck: I am a bit confused about your statement.

1110154 Oh okay. Well, I will give it a read later, but right now, I'm a bit busy with my stories to deal with. I got to get my new chapter up and a new story, but I will definitely read it, and by the time that I get to it, it might a an extra chapter or two. I won't be left with cliffhangers.:ajsmug:

Adding to read later only because my friend is doing an Alicorn story as well

Actually this seems really good
and i like the name Corona that is the plasma layer of a star correct ?

1110222 Okay then. Hope you enjoy it!
1110225 Thank you! And yes, that's what a corona is.

1110144

time to quote mlp like the bible. (because i know the canon you refer to is fan discussion that seldom references the show itself)

ep 1-the prologue
"once upon a time in a magical land called equestria. there were two regal sisters who ruled together and CREATED harmony throughout the land."

and the words

"eternal night"

how do you think nightmare moon could create eternal night if she was not immortal?

yeah... pretty canon. But mlp contradicts itself often, so as I said. Let's see if you can come up with something cool with this fanon.

1110167

i guess.

1110413 Faust herself confirmed that NightMare Moon was an entirely separate entity from Princess Luna. NM may well have been immortal, but there's nothing to suggest the princesses were, at least under normal circumstances.

1110413 Well then, if that's the case, immortals are very much capable of dying. Immortality only gives them the able it to live forever, but it does not save them from traumatic events.:ajsmug:

1110443

regardless my point was made. stopped caring.

rest is left to eternal conundrum of which I will not partake.

1110466 Fine by me. Hope you enjoy the story! :twilightsmile:

1110585 What a compliment! Thank you!

1110589 it took me ten minutes to find that pic:rainbowlaugh: and i adore OC stories. especially alicorm ones. i have one that i work on nao, her name is frost blaze. i like summer and moon:trollestia::yay:

1110602 Thanks! But I didn't create the characters myself - they belong to Valkyrie-Girl (as mentioned in the summary), and she gave me permission to write their story. But thanks again, I'm glad you like it!

1110621 as i have clicked. i like clicking. buttons are fascinating!

As a fan of Valkyrie Girl's work I thought to give this a shot... and looks at the picture.. darn it I've been away too long. Good start and I hope to see more, if it is a great story to go with great artwork then you have my attention.

In the Name of Her Serene Majesty Celestia Everfree, Princess of the Sun
Celesita's Paladin: Ex Solis et Lunae, Providentia et Prosperita

1111084 Thank you! I'm glad you're liking it.

1111095

Maybe people would check out your page if you took the time to actually read and right a comment. Instead you've posted the same comment one ever story on the front page within a minute of each other, this tells me you're not reading anyone's stories and only using their works a place to advertise your own.

If Nightmare Moon had set the sky to night and then everypony *died*, the night would indeed last forever.

Personally, I tend to think of the Princesses as "amortal" - they had a beginning (since they weren't around doing the sun/moon thing when Equestria was founded) and someday they may have an end, but they weren't born and don't age in the traditional way. Some external force would have to cause them to die. But that's just me, for the sake of a good fanfic having them die of natural causes at some point in the distant future is fine.

1111238
So you're telling me you read seven 2000 - 3000 word stories in under in 7 minutes.
No what you're doing is using other stories to advertise your page, its the exact same thing as if I were to go on a famous youtubers channel and say on each and every video

"Hur dur dis video funny plz look at my channel sub 4 sub man"
You don't give to shits about the persons video you just want to advertise your page.

I don't think you're doing that, I'm well aware you are. Now if you want to leave a legitimate comment on each story instead of giving the author a fake review, I have no problems with you adding "Also, would you be so kind as to check out my works as well?"

With a comment like this you're saying 2 things
"I think you did a great job with this fanfic, congrats! But it has just a few errors and the usual common typos in there, just some minor mishaps is all... I give it 2.5 stars. I don't usually comment on stories, only first timers, and the most I have read are only 3 stars worth. But great job BTW!
Please, could you be kind enough and return the favor by reading, favouriting and liking my stories? Thank you so much...
And be sure to watch me and check out my userpage.
THANKS SOOOO MUCH:heart::pinkiehappy:"

-I didn't care enough to read it so heres the same rating and comment I gave every other story currently on the front page.
-Hey watch my page and read my stuff, because I couldn't be bothered to do the same.

1111238 That is no bucking excuse. What makes you think other authors, who pour their time and effort into creating these excellent tales, will flock to yours when you can't even offer them decent advice or read their bloody stories?

'i told u, i do that cuz im lazy. but i mean the same thing. cuz i think all of them are good and dont feel like typing over n over again sorry if u think im doing that...?'

You're not saying they are good, you're telling them there are obvious errors that have lowered your opinion of the story. And these authors take these comments to heart. If you can't put the bloody effort into writing a few unique, relevant lines for a story, why should people do the same for you? This is bloody disgraceful.

And to the author, damn good job.

1111238 That is the absolute saddest thing i believe I have ever heard. You are a disgrace to everyone who has ever devoted themselves to improve. Authors work for years to hone their craft, constantly feeding on the critiques of their readers, and you are disrupting that. What's more is that you insult the editors who spend hours painstakingly checking for errors, by saying assuming that there are typos, regardless of whether or not that is true. I am a very sad brony today. Very sad indeed.

First it's hard to say where your story is in a scale from 1 to 10 after one chapter, above all if it has to compete with stories such as "Eternal". The next chapters will show where it stands, but now who can compare two such different stories, not me.

First,
and I have no idea where this story will go:rainbowhuh:

Very well written, characters that one can relate to and understand well, well designed characters and a grounded plot. 9/10 so far, hope to see more.

1117971 Thank you! I appreciate the praise.

Nightmare Moon?????? it will be interesting to see who will wield the Elements of Harmony this day

:derpyderp2::heart::heart::heart:

1118054 Hehehe. I suppose you'll just have to wait and see.... :ajsmug:
Thanks for the :heart:s!

My money is that they are decendents of the Mane six

:ajbemused::pinkiehappy::rainbowlaugh::raritywink::twilightsmile::yay:

pomerion, could you please use my OC for a Wielder of the Element of________. she is white with a vinyl scratch colored mane and tail and she's a pegasus. her cutie mark is a Wonderbolt Cutie Mark. she is the descendant of rainbow dash and her name is Blue Streak. (get it, the name of a rollercoaster @ cedar point). and my friends OC is a pegasus named apple cloud. he is a soft spoken pegasus and the descendant of big mac and fluttershy. has red mane and tail and his Cutie Mark is a winged apple. this is my friends OC, not mine. pls consider them.

1123199 I wish I could, but Valkyrie-Girl and I already have plans for the Elements of Harmony. They'll play a bigger role later in the story. Thanks for the suggestion, though - those OCs sound pretty cool.

1276339 Ah! I see you've found Ghost. She'll be showing up in this fic soon enough.

1276366meh i just googled changelings turning into ponies or something
also, for the sake of changelings:
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I enjoyed this chapter, shame I took so long to read it ^^. Looking forward to more of the story :heart:.

2117142 Thanks! I'm glad you're liking it. Can't say when the next chapter will be finished, though; it might take a while.

I like the idea and I am excited to see what you do with it.

2195286 Thank you very much! I hope to have the next chapter finished before too long. But credit for the idea all goes to Valkyrie-Girl. The story is all hers; I am merely its scribe.

Chuck her into the bog! Good chapter!

Good chapter, but ... why couldn't they have asked Tally Mark simply to not publicly announce the changeling, while allowing her to quietly explain to the victims & families what the cause of the trouble was? They wouldn't be likely to keep the secret, of course, but word getting out that the cause was a changeling that's "been taken care of" is different from the Mayor informing the populace that the Princesses have a new pet.

2585786 That's a very good question. Mostly, it was just a bad, hasty decision on Aurora's part, motivated by fear. As you said, the changeling wouldn't stay secret for long, and she simply didn't feel prepared to handle the potential fallout. At the same time, she wanted to make sure that she had a solution to the problem (i.e., a cure for "changeling sickness") before she revealed the cause. I hope that's a satisfactory answer; at any rate, I mean to expand on the situation in the next chapter, and I'll certainly take your concerns into account then.

I see a link, possibly accidental, to the pictures inserted into Stargazer's tirade.

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