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Awesome story. Love the build up and the way it ends is glorious. I have the deepest of jealousy for Feather and not an ounce of Sympathy. Well done, Lighthawk! Bravo!
Holy carp! A new Lighthawk story! *Swoons*
Does this mean you're tentatively back and we might see new capters for your existing works?
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Sadly, no. I stopped writing my big stories because life changed, and I no longer had the right combination of free time and motivation to keep going. And nothing has changed since then. One shots I can kick out when the mood hits me right, but picking back up or starting any new ongoing, multi-chapter work just isn't happening. Sorry if that is disappointing, but I have to be honest and not give out false hope.
>Feather has his cold, hard and lonely bed
>Suddenly the two mares next door invite him into theirs
>Its huge and soft
>lol this is just a off and on thing and Feather's loneliness problems are never actually solved
>Back to the cold hard and lonely bed with you!
You created the perfect setup, and then you squandered it.
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Well, Feather's relationship status was never meant to be something to be solved, just a bit of characterization for him. And he's not horribly lonely, while Charm and Goldie really aren't looking to change their relationship status, so...respectfully disagree on it being squandered. I just feel like the whole 'we had great sex, let's be an official couple' trope is over played and not much of a basis for a relationship to begin with. Bringing him in as a third is a fun way for them to spice things up, but he needs to find his own romantic partner(s), which again, was there more for some background rather than a plot point needing to be resolved.
Hopefully it was at least an enjoyable read?
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It was an enjoyable read, it just feels like a waste to bring things up like Feather's relationship status and emotional well-being at several points in the story and then never do anything with those plot points.
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Well, I kind of wanted/needed him to be single for the main plot, and beyond that, it was really just where my mind went in an effort to not have a flat main character.
But you know what, I can play ball with this. Let's look at it as not just characterization, but a sub plot element. In which case, the resolution is...that sometimes life isn't that easy and your problems don't go away. Sometimes, the best you can do is learn to cope with them better. Feather is in a better place mentally since upgrading to friends with benefits. He's a little more confident in himself knowing that two hotties like Charm and Goldie find him attractive. He's still single, still got a small bed, but it doesn't bother him as much. And sometimes that's the best you can do with your issues, because real life problems often are things that can only be fixed slowly, over time, if at all.
Not exactly a cheerful resolution I admit, but hopefully not a pessimistic one either. Best I got right now.
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It's an improvement, if nothing else. I appreciate you taking a shot at resolving that aspect of the plotline.
I loved everything about this. Wonderful likeable characterization - Charm is my favorite kind of flirt - and well-paced smut. Just generally very fun! I think you nailed the breeding aspect, too, having Feather get into it just enough, but I'm not the deepest connoisseur.
I really appreciated them staying mature and not instantly dramatically changing their relationship or anything, it was really sweet to see characters not idealized forms of codependent and desperate.
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Oh no, I appreciate the honesty and candor.
If I was a better writer than I am currently, I admit I'd ask to take up "The Herd" form you. But alas, I feel I wouldn't do that story proper justice.
Anyways, look forward to more one-shots from you then at least whenever you get in the mood.
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Thank you very much for the kind words, glad you enjoyed it so much and liked the characters, especially Charm. And I'm happy to hear you appreciate them handling their relationships with each other well. Sometimes it feels like characters (and some people in real life, sadly) create unnecessary drama just for the sake of the drama. Part of the reason I made the characters a little older was driven by wanting them to be more emotionally mature, so I'm glad that came through.
This is really well-written!! I kind of want to see a continuation??? Or more of Feather, anyway. I really like the three of them, ngl.
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Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that you liked the characters. I'm debating some kind of follow up or bonus chapter, so it could happen.
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Well, I mean a bonus chapter here is literally a Golden opportunity to come.
9919319
Feather's turn to get bred!
jk mostly but I'd love to see more of any of these pones, please dooo~
Hot! Well written too
Was this inspired by The Zebra Conspiracy?
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Well played, well played...
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I don't know that Feather is ready to be a father, let alone a mother...and no promises, but I'll definitely be giving it some thought
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Thank you!
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I'm going to have to say no, because I have no idea what that is
Then you realize God exists
I'm a bubble buster and I apologize for nobody.
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And I have no regrets.
9919550
.....I totally missed an opportunity there. The pun had a real Charm to it, though, and was delivered with a Feather light Touch. All in all, 10/10.
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Please...it hurts...just stop...
Considering that one of the foals was a colt, I kinda wonder if the potion wasn't 100% effective.
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Nah, it worked as intended. The potion is totally capable of overwriting a stallion's DNA while still leaving Y chromosomes intact, because magic
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Is Spike God, then?
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It was a messed up story based on the same idea, only they were lying.
Fantastic, really good work. The characters were legitimately fun to read, they definitely made the story both in and out of the sex scene.
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Thank you, so glad to hear you enjoyed the story and the characters
hey if its not too difficult can you make a part two of this??
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It really just depends on if I have an idea for it that I like enough. It's all about finding the right mix of motivation and free time when it comes to writing these days.
Goldie might not have had Charm's skill at oral, but there was absolutely something undeniably enticing about having such a stern, stoic mare sucking his dick like it was the most amazing thing in the world to her.
WOW This is my new fetish.
You can't not make a sequel.
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The world needs more Goldie.
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Heh, always happy to help spread fetishes around. Glad you enjoyed the story, and Goldie. I've been giving some thought to a sequel, so it might just happen.
huh i recently read a story where a potion like this was mention'd, looks like you inspired that ^^
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Do you recall what the name of the story was? I'd be very interested to see what else is being done with this or similar ideas.
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found it https://www.fimfiction.net/story/442094/what-happens-on-saturday ^^
the potion is even explained how it works in the chapter "regaining lost desires"
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Thanks, appreciate it