Trust Once Lost
written by Greenhorne
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Nice
Also I don't wanna grow up I wanna be a toys r us kid
I was half expecting this to be the morphine again.
Canon chapter? Or again non Canon ?
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Canon for now.
The song kinda reminds of Olaf song from frozen 2. When I was little I thought growing up meant no more fun because grownups never seemed to have any. They also worried about everything too much. Everything was a straight line and must fix neatly in the box. Some things haven't changed.
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It's based on a song from the Matilda Musical I saw recently.
wait wasnt green a grown up already?
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Yes, the song is about how Green feels like she spent her whole childhood waiting to grow out of her problems, but when she grew up she still felt like the same scared little kid inside and wonders if she's actually "grown up" or just better at pretending.
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ahh clever
This has some sinister undertones in a way
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Hmm, I didn't think about that.
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I need to see this. This is art.
Plus I want to hear Green sing in a bri'ish accent.
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It was all a dream...
Hope you don't get too stressed pumping out chapters like this, Greenhorne. But good work! :)
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Oh no, you're leaving? Thank you for the obligatory announcement. We all totally care, so let's all come together and beg New Rebellion to stay.
Jk, nobody cares about your opinion. The door's over there.
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What's up with people thinking tropes are a bad thing and that doing le epic subversion is inherently good writing?
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100 100 words. Nice.
woona!
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this is an anonfilly story sir....
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To my understanding, this story involves a self insert anyways. And you don't always have to subvert tropes to have a good story.
Heh, that was sweet.
Only question is, was it really only Green and Luna in the dream?
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🎶 You can't have a nightmare if you never dream! 🎶
A slip of the tongue indeed. There's a high possibility that Luna now knows that Green used to be male.
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oh nooo its almost like its a self insert story nooooooooooooooooooooooooo
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lol
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I was skeptacle at first, but gave it a try anyways. It's really good, in my opinion. Don't fully judge a story because of a single trope you dislike, there's more to the story than just that!
I just realized two things.
The author says this chapter is canon, meaning Luna now knows that 1) Green was for sure an adult (though she likely already suspected this due to the early chapters where it's said "I haven't feared my dreams since I was twelve"), and 2) Green is revealed to have originally been male (references to "boy" and "son" as terms used for her/him). Even if ponies don't use terms like boy/man, "son" is a word they'd recognize.
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Thank you for being civil in your response. It is hard to find those on these sites.
I do respect your opinion. With such a glowing recommendation, maybe I will try to read it at a later date.
Thank you again for being civil.
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What did the comments say? They're deleted now.
I do want to know what's turning people away from my story.
An absolutely lovely chapter. And thank you for the heads up on that song it was enjoyable.
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They were saying they didn't like the "human male turned into pony female" thing, said it was overdone.
First comment I believe was them saying "It better not be this. Its overdone, why can't it be the other way around, yadda yadda." The second comment was them quoting a part of the story's first chapter where Greene found out that he was now a she with a ton of "..............." followed by the words, "Yeah, I'm out."
Not really an issue I think you can fix, just something of their personal preference, and they took a poor route of venting it.
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If people are normally rude to you, there's a decent chance you're saying something wrong/the wrong way, not a guarantee, but a decent chance.
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Perhaps. But I'm a rather blunt person who believes in telling the honest truth.
Admittedly, I probably could've rephrased it a bit. But my comments had been directed towards the author, not his readers.
Thank you for at least trying to moderate things, though.
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Bluntness is saying what you mean.
If you mean "Disappointed, I've seen this too many times before. Going to drop this one."
Saying "this had better not be X" has an implied judgement that I should not have written the story this way, which is what my readers seem to be responding to.
It's the difference between bluntness and entitlement.
I like how the story is going so far. I did take a break part way through so there are parts I don't remember anymore. I am still enjoying the story. It is very good.
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I'm seriously considering taking the Musical interlude chapter down and reworking it to be a main story chapter. The longer I think about it the more it starts to come together.
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Looking forward to it, no matter how you decide to proceed
I love this story can't wait 4 more thank u
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True enough.
I apologize.
Greensleeves - feat. Tim Foust - YouTube
I would kill for you to eventually incorporate this song into a musical interlude.
God damn it, here I was getting all worked up over all the beans about HIS past Green just spilled... and then it was a dream.
Fooled again. At least, tis a good dream, indeed.
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I can accept this, as it is well explained.
I shall be more careful in the future to do so
Thanks for the effort
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It depends a lot on where you work. Most of the actual information where I work (at least in terms of nurse observations) is all contained within other forms with checkboxes and dropdown menus, obs also have their own seperate chart, as do medications, so the progress notes end up being quite brief. At another facility I worked at the notes were more similar to what Dr Red Cross wrote in the first supplemental chapter with subheadings within the notes.
I love this story! One of the best I ever read!
This seems to imply that Luna had been there for a while, enjoying the song.
When did she join the dream?
I wonder because only a few verses earlier, Green mentioned being a boy in her singing and I'm curious how much Luna heard.
i am loving this story and i cant wait to find out what happens in the next chapter
Just binged the whole thing, gotta say, enjoying it a lot.
Would be neat to see Green lean into her magic more, that said, I completely understand why she hasn't yet despite the 100k words, since not enough time in universe would have her at any level of competency.
Only regret now is the slow update speed and my need for moar
Keep up the good work, and have a Merry Hearthswarming
This was an incredible chapter! The drama, the romance, the pancakes... incredible. Keep it going!
There was pancakes?