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A Miralukan Jedi Master known as Damaya Tadro was running, running from the New Order that was hellbent on exterminating Jedi from the galaxy. She finds a previously completely unexplored sector of the galaxy, determining that it is a good of a place to hide as any, but is thrown off guard as her ship, the Imaharo, is brutally thrown around. After a dramatic and fiery crash she finds herself on a strange new planet, perhaps even in a different galaxy!

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 40 )

"yay" a Jedi in equestria! Great so far NEED MORE! :flutterrage:

We havent had a Jedi in Equestria yet. Looking forward to the next chapter :)

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Aw you all make me feel loved. :heart:

:ajbemused: Jedi in Equestria. :ajsmug: About damn time.

I added the image I just now noticed failed to upload originally. I also updated the character list.

interesting start, i just pray to god, rassilon and celestia that pinkie dosen´t get her hoofs on that lightsaber :pinkiecrazy:

Oh yay Jedi Mind Tricks!
Probably the only thing that can shut Pinkie up, too.

69373 that and lots and lots of duct tape

69443 You can fix the world with enough duct tape.

69513 true one can never get enought duct tape i have functioning space shipe thats made of 90% duct tape and 10% plywood

:rainbowkiss:I've got a drift car thats held together with duct tape.:ajbemused: It does get sticky when I have female company though. :ajsmug: Not that I mind,:trixieshiftright: BOW CHICKA WOW WOW!

69645 :rainbowkiss:I've got a drift car thats held together with duct tape.:ajbemused: It does get sticky when I have female company though. :ajsmug: Not that I mind,:trixieshiftright: BOW CHICKA WOW WOW!

I approve of the direction the comments have turned.

69945 okay that was way more information than i needed :pinkiesick:

So, is this story supposed to be in present tense, or past tense? It would be best if choose one, and stick with it.
Other then that, I say continue! The world can always use more Star Wars crossovers. :twilightsmile:

Edited the first chapter after I noticed my horrid run on sentences and repitition.

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I also addressed that, it's supposed to be past tense, as I've always felt more comfortable writing that way. I also promise to proof read chapter two soon and I promise to preread before publishing the chapter this time.

70046 Suffer well brony. :rainbowlaugh:

70733 :pinkiecrazy: i just sent pinkamena after you so i would suggest that you start sleeping with one eye open :pinkiecrazy:

Well i have to say that it's refreshing to see a fan fic with no (to my limited knowlage) gramatical errors.
Keep up the good work:twilightsheepish:

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Thanks! I try my hardest to not make stupid grammatical errors. Although upon re-reading Chapter 1 I saw my horrid run-on sentences. So I made sure to fix that! I'm surprised at the amount of support I'm getting for my very first fanfic. Thanks everypony!

Chapter Two has been edited for issues pertaining to me not making things past tense. I also chanegd a small part of the plot around, so you may want to reread it. Sorry for not pre-reading before I published the chapter, I promise I won't do that again!:twilightsheepish:

70747 :ajsmug: I've already got a suprise party set up just for her everything from candy to streamers to ice cream cake and pie. :pinkiehappy: You can always stop for pie.

:trixieshiftright: Your move.

71223 i was talking about insane cupcake baking pinkie but i will never say no to free pie, you sir are a master of the battlefield :ajsmug:

71227 I'm glad we have an accord. Now Have some Skindred.

71288 thank you kind sir and may the force be with you :twilightsmile:

Yay you all kissed and made up! But anyways I'm writing Chapter 3, it should be up in an hour or two. :pinkiehappy:

71313 May the force be with you Sulle. Now to Celebrate.

Well I've had trouble with Chapter 3 for some reason, I may scrap it and rewrite it. I've just been feeling bluh today.

AH-HA! Continuity error! Jedi of this era weren't raised with their parents, and were traditionally forbidden from seeing after they had completed their Jedi training. :ajsmug: The only way this could be possible would be if she stayed with her parents while on the run, and that is unlikely to happen as she is bound to know that if she shows any amount of attachment to other people the Empire would snatch them up to be used against her in a heartbeat,

Also, Inquisitor Drogan? Quite the Space Marine shout out, huh? :moustache:

As well, I know you put the Wookiepedia link in the description, but I really think you shouldn't have glossed over the description of Damaya's species. It would have been a great character building moment, both in showing how young ponies react to the description of the Miraluka, and showing how our Jedi Knight friend reacts to tough questioning. One of the greatest character points for a Jedi Master is how they interact with Padawans, and this could have been like a miniature moment of that.

It doesn't mean this chapter is bad, in fact it's actually quite enjoyable, but I do lament these missed opportunities all the same.

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I'm glad you caught my little reference there. :twilightsmile:

As for your other concerns, they have been duly noted. I always welcome feedback.

I like what ive read so far. Keep em comin :pinkiehappy:

73470 she never said when she was with her parents so maybe she was with them before becoming a Jedi?

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Considering that most Jedi are taken from their parents when they're too young to form memories I very much doubt that. Anakin was the exception that proves the rule.

Great story so far. Definitely tracking this one. Don't worry about the Star Wars Purists. There is an infinite multiverse out there and yours is all your own. Update when you feel the story is ready. That's more important than any deadline.

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OH My Goddess.... She's weaponized cuteness....

this story is awsome please please please make more chpters, its epicly awsome.

Force Sight is one of my favorite abilities in KOTOR. Being able to see auras and through walls is quite cool.

Through Damaya's eyes, I'm sure she would see that the Mane Six are most definitely high up on the alignment scale.

Uuuuh, a Miraluka hn? I remember when I played KotoR 2, this Miraluka you could... well, free more or less, from Darth Maskie was one of my favourite squad mates. That girl was, all her issues aside, so goddamn adorable.

Heh, the moment with the Cockatrice made me snicker. Silly chicken-snake, you can´t stone-gaze someone without eyes.^^ Also, that the wreckage is now the little beasties new nest could be problematic, especialy when some nosy little horsies come by to snoop around.

Well shit, Equus is about to get Extermintus-ed.^^

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