Chapter 6: Ticketmaster, The Prince Is Invited! Part 1
It's been a couple of hours since Vegeta told the truth of what happened before to Rainbow Dash. She told him she needed to go and do her job as a weather pony. The prince meanwhile, went for a walk on a dirt path close to Apple Acres gate, Vegeta would keep wondering to himself of what happened last night.
'I sensed a presence in my dream, but it couldn't be that baldy and namekian. It had to be somebody else.' Vegeta was broken out of thought when he heard somepony call his name.
"Hey, Vegeta!"
The Prince looks to his left to see Applejack, Twilight, and Spike. Applejack and Twilight were carrying baskets of apples on their backs as Spike kept looking for a certain one.
"What are you doing this fine morning partner?" Applejack asked.
"Looking for something to do..." Vegeta explained
"Well, would you like to help me with one of the apple fields today?" Applejack offered.
"I guess it'll be something close to my training." Vegeta said, "Might as well, I've got nothing better to do."
Applejack then proceeded to show Vegeta which field she's had some trouble with. Vegeta looked in awe to the size of the field, it looked like it spread across the horizon. "Here she is, the biggest field on the lot." Applejack claimed.
"You chose this very field just for me, didn't you?" Vegeta questioned, easily irritated.
"Yup, with your strength, I'd bet you could get this field done by the end of the hour." Applejack said. Vegeta just smirked at the claim.
"1 hour? Please, I'd bet I could get this field done in 10 seconds, without going Super Saiyan!" Vegeta challenged. The farm pony grew a smirk, ready to see the Prince be proven wrong.
"Alright partner, let's see it!" Applejack said, smirking.
Vegeta looked at the field with determination, planting his feet in the ground. Applejack began a count down, "3..." Vegeta got in a running stance, "2..." The air pressure began to condense around Vegeta. "1..." Vegeta ignited his aura. "GO!" Applejack screamed.
Vegeta seemed to vanish, but he was moving at great speed. The first tree he saw, he hit it, but not to the point of breaking the tree. He would do it to all the trees in the entire field in 8 seconds! Vegeta then reappeared in front of a bemused Applejack.
"Seems I did it under 10 seconds." Vegeta boasted. The prince turned to twilight, who wrote down the entire thing, he could even hear Twilight mumble. Vegeta smirked, but then heard a noise, he turned his head to see Rainbow Dash fall from one of the Apple trees.
"Ow ow ow! Who woke me up?!" Rainbow questioned. Vegeta walked up to the cyan pegasus and held out a hand.
'What the hell am I doing?' Vegeta thought as Rainbow took his hand and been helped up.
"Thanks... Vegeta?" Rainbow questioned, "That was unlike you?"
"Sh... Shut up." The prince scoffed as he turned away with his arms crossed with a pink blush forming, making the girls giggle.
Applejack then quietly went to Twilight and whispered. "I think both of them gotten alike for each other." making both of them giggle and Spike gag.
Rainbow then went back to her tree and took a nap. Vegeta would then help by carrying loads of apples in baskets to the barn. On the way, they all hear a rumbling noise. Applejack looks to Vegeta, "Don't look at me..."
"I think I'm responsible for that one, been working hard with carrying these apples." Twilight explained, getting a small chuckle from Vegeta.
Spike was on the back of Twilight, looking for a certain apple, until, "Ah-ha!" Spike said as he pulled a delicious Apple from the basket.
"Oh Spike, that looks delicious!" Twilight said as she licked her lips, but the apple was eaten right in front of her. "Spike!"
"what?" Spike asked as he swallows the treat. He then felt the urge to burp. Spike opened his mouth as a green flame transformed into a letter.
"It's a letter from Princess Celestia," Twilight said aloud, catching the Prince's attention.
Spike grabs the letter and opens it as he prepares to read it. "Ah-hem, her grand royal highness, Princess Celestia of Equestria, is pleased to announce the grand galloping gala to be held in the magnificent capital city of Canterlot, on the 21st day of... yada-yada-yada, cordially extends an invitation to Twilight Sparkle, Prince Vegeta, each are give plus one ticket for a guest." Spike read aloud.
"The Grand Galloping Gala!" The mares said with excitement. All Vegeta and Spike did were giving a deadpan expression.
"This is Gala suppose to be a fancy get together?" Vegeta asked, but then Spike belched again to revile 4 golden tickets to the Grand Galloping Galla.
"Hey look, 4 tickets!"
"Wow, I've never been to the Gala before, have you, Spike?" Twilight questioned.
"No, and I plan to keep that way! I don't want any of that girly frilly frou-frou nonsense." Spike explained.
"Oh come on Spike, a dance would be nice."
"Nice, its a heap more than just nice! I'd love to go!" Applejack then went to explain why it would be nice to go to the Gala. "I'd give my left hind leg to go to that Gala." Applejack dreamed.
"Oh, in that case, would you like t-"
"WHOA!"
Rainbow Dash crashed into the two ponies, dropping a day of hard work. Vegeta just stood there, still holding 10 baskets of apples.
"Are we talking about The Grand Galloping Gala?" Rainbow questioned.
"Rainbow Dash?" Applejack said, "I thought you were napping?"
"No, I was napping, but I just happen to hear you two have an extra Ticket" Rainbow said while hovering upside down.
"Yeah..." Twilight was cut off once again, but Vegeta was growing impatient to nopony answering his question.
"YES! This is so awesome," She then looks to Vegeta with pleading eyes. "Can you take me to the Gala Vegeta, Please!" Rainbow begged."
"Sure, why not," Vegeta answered, this made Rainbow jump in glee with a cute squeak, almost making Vegeta smile. "But Twilight, now you'll have to choose from 4 other mares," Vegeta explained.
"Oh shoot, you're right." Twilight then looks to Applejack with a sad look. "I'm sorry Applejack, but I need to make sure with the other girls to see if they want to go." Twilight explained.
"Not a problem Twili." Applejack looks to Vegeta and Rainbow Dash, "Since you two are going, I suggest you go to Rarity for a suit and dress." Applejack explained, but Vegeta shrugged.
"Might as well go now, you coming Skittles?"
The Prince is going to the Gala, but how will Twilight be able to choose the other 4, will she give up the tickets, or will she find a way to go with all of them? Find out next time!
Vegeta, at the Grand Galloping Gala...I'll start preparing the damage bill.
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Bet you that one of the nobles will call him along the likes of “monkey” or hairless ape” and he’s going to get (understandably) pissed.
This is not going to end well...
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Maybe, maybe not. You’ll have to see in the next few chapters.
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I've got to say, I like the idea of this story, and I want to read it all.
But things just seem to be rushing ahead to quickly for me to continue on reading.
Yes I understand that this Vegeta is from the Buu saga, and is more open to people than Saiyan/Frieza saga Vegeta. But I can't see him having become so friendly with the Mane 6 or anyone, so soon after arriving in their world.
He would be pissed off, and not be in the mood for parties or socializing, he wouldn't be blushing or embarassed over Rainbow thanking him for catching her, and would probably be demanding Celestia and Twilight hurry up and get him home, to his wife and son.
This Vegeta is acting like there's no rush/he's accepted staying in Equestria, and he's only been there a few days.
I think a more believable representation, if you wanted Vegeta to become friends with them, to reference another DBZ character (even though the special is iffy when concerning canon) I would probably make it similiar to Bardock, in the episode of bardock where he wound up back in time and wound up fighting Frieza's ancestor, Lord Chilled. Bardock's reaction to the natives, initial coldness and distancing himself from them, emotionall and geographically, would be how I would play this out.
Have Vegeta go off into the wilderness, or maybe the EverFree Forest, training and fighting/killing animals there that would try and attack him, not wanting anything to do with the ponies, unless they found a way to get him home.
Maybe have the CMC become intrigued and seek him out but he isn't interested, and the other characters, like Rarity maybe wishing to fix his clothing, or Pinkie bringing food.
And possibly coming to stop the Ursa Minor when it's lured into Ponyville, this could be the part where he decides to stay in Ponyville, or at least start visiting more often, and begining to socialize, slowly opening up.
(This isn't bringing up the obvious power scaling, and the fact that Vegeta could vaporize the entire castle of the two sisters, or the whole planet, without too much effort, and thus would have wiped the floor with NMM, or more likely, straight up killed her)
So yeah, again I'm not trying to say this is a bad story, but there are issues with pacing and characterization in my personal opinion. It seems like you're forcing Vegeta into a roll too quickly, that canon Vegeta would take much longer to fill and embrace.
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I had planned on rewriting the story to make it more like Vegeta. But thank you for you outlook on the story. I do like the idea of Vegeta going to ponyville to stop the Ursa Minor. I do want to fix the story, but right now on how school is holding me back, it’ll probably be rewritten slowly.
But thank you for your outlook on the story and you have yourself a good day!
Vegeta would probably stay with Bulma. After all there is the hope that they might wish them back with the Dragon Balls so no point having a new relationship.
Yes Saiyan's are attracted to strong / strong spirit will woman but Bulma is already that. Back in the earlier saga she would yell and burst in rage much like him