The Wonderbolts are visiting Ponyville for the week. They are going to be performing their usual stunts, tricks and racing in the local area, bringing their usual events in Canterlot to Ponyville.
But Soarin, one of the Wonderbolts, is searching for a mare he described as "cute" in a photo he had taken at the royal wedding in Canterlot. Although this search doesn't get in the way of his way of life as a Wonderbolt, he feels as if he should find that mare.
Meanwhile, Rainbow Dash had been training hard to impress the Wonderbolts on their visit but feels as if her skills don't meet the Wonderbolts standards.
Will Soarin and Rainbow Dash achieve their goals?
Chapters (5)
It looks like it's going in an interesting direction.
I like the photo idea.
Keep it up and I'm sure this could turn into a wonderful story.
Just don't rush love.
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I won't be rushing anything. It'll go at a fair pace.
(I've been known to be a good writer so hopefully I'll be fine.
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I'm glad too hear that.
I like it waiting for u to continue. school has started so will have something to look forward to after homework.
Just a few problems I noticed:
'At least there's somepony to talk to here at leasr'
'with a joke<- redundant.
Soarin then laughed at the stallion's joke.'
Try formatting your dialogue like this:
It'll look a lot cleaner that way.
Other than that?
dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Bonbon_OMG_LOVE.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Spitfire_lazy.png dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Soarin_dayum.png
NOW GET BACK TO WORK
I am interested in this. i shall proceed to fave it.
This... is rough. It's got a decent idea and the characterization is okay, but man, this really suffers technically.
I wouldn't give it a thumbs down, though, because you're trying and that's worth something, but before you continue you should find an editor and learn everything you can from them.
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I thank you for your feedback.
I only recently got back into writing so my skills will be a bit rusty.
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I thank you for understanding.
Hopefully my skills will progress as I go.
My skills are a bit rusty since I've gone back to writing.
Cool, another Soarindash.
It's Showtime - David Lee Roth with Jason Becker
Point of interest, it doesn't make a whole lot of sense that Soarin' remembers Rainbow from other things but doesn't recognize her in the photo
Otherwise I like it
MORE MORE MORE! I BEG YOU!
looking good so far keep it up
'The other guys must have eaten early and asleep right now. (be asleep)
At least there's somepony to talk to here at least.' thought Soarin as he slowly glided to his space at the table.(redundant "at least")
Ponyville were still were he left them. (where)
I also find it odd that none of them recognized Dash in the picture, despite both Soarin and Spitfire having seen her in formal attire at the gala, and seemingly most of the bolts knowing of "the mare with the rainbow mane"...I dunno I guess there are just some things I can't suspend my disbelief from.dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/shrug_Rainbow_Dash.png
Still you're doing a SoarinDash fic so that automatically gets you a point from me. I'll be watching and waiting for more.
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Hmm. I see your point.
For the mistakes, I'll correct them after typing this comment.
I like it but as Edragon said how would they not recognize rainbow? Oh well. Other then that I give you 3 pinkies
i like this, o.o but wait a sec, he doesnt recognize dash in the pic right? myeh, hope the chaps will be longer though
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I have a feeling as if future chapters will be longer.
I'm currently working on the 2nd chapter and it does look as if it's starting to get longer than the 1st chapter.
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yuuuush, me waiting!!!
Good
and interesting
He took a big long yawn and stretch befoe fully opening his eyes and hopping out of bed. (stretched before)
He's been performing for a few places
in Equestria this year and those involved going away for a week. (broken line)
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I have a feeling as if I met him in Canterlot before that but I don't recall his name. I could have sworn that I heard his name but I can't seem to remember it.' (the second sentence is a bit redundant no?)
'I don't get why, but I feel something for him. Something I can't seem to identify. (no idea who he is but she "feels something" for him?
Does stunt flying cause memory loss? How does nopony remember any of these ponies?!dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Rainbow_Dash.png
Ah well, still interested in this so I await the next chapter.
I Love it! There are a few things that look or sound a bit funny but very few of them. Post another chapter soon please!!! I wanna know what happens!!!!!
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Well, thanks for the feedback.
I'll make those changes.
And I've just realized that some of these mistakes are actually typing errors.
Maybe I should try to look at my words as I'm typing them. (I've had lots of cases regarding typing errors in the past.)
And as for the "feeling", that'll come together in a future chapter.
good chap. but just a few things to point out. in the first chap, spitfire mentioned 'mare with the rainbow mane', how the hell cant soarin figure out it's the same mare in the pic?
...if it's no bother
despite that, it's really good and i wish to see chaps updated asaaaaaap
that was awesome, however i felt instead of Dash "feeling something for him" it could've been "he looks handsome/cute maybe i'll talk to him more when he's in ponyville" and maybe her heart racing a bit from the fact she'd talk with a wonderbolt.
well that's the only thing i saw that got me thinking like that. still loved the chapter and i'm looking forward to more.
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Hmm, could have been useful.
But I wanted to make it so much that she couldn't explain or identify what the feeling was.
Glad you like it though
1128771 I was wondering if they both got amnesia after the wedding.
Good story anyway, I'm still intrigued.
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xDDDD same here.
This is getting interesting
Wait, How does Rainbow Dash dosen't know Soarin?
Great story though
I enjoyed this chapter, but one thing I gotta point out simply because it annoyed me.
'I don't get why, but I feel something for him. Something I can't seem to identify. Maybe I'll know if I actually speak to him this week.' thought Rainbow Dash
Who says stuff like that? Honestly do you think anyone would say something like that in real life?
Other than that it was a great chapter except I'm just thinking everyone got amnesia....
Sorry if I sound rude I really don't mean to be...
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That will be explained in a future chapter.
The search begins. will he find the mare in the picture? will she run into him? will i ever stop asking questions?
i have no idea, but i'm looking forward to seeing what happens.
So it begins
a bed that could fit two ponies on it...foreshadowing.
Why do I get the feeling Sweetie Belle has a crush on a wonderbolt...
slight error: leaving a big large amount
MORE MORE MORE SOON!!!!!!
Let the games begin...
and the story's awesome! 
Also,MOAR!
iron pony competition, huh? this will be good.
Oh my
I can imagine Rainbow going nuts and saying Oh my gosh a thousand times
Rainbow Dash fanspaz will ensue in the next chapter. i can feel it. *saves a bag of popcorn for that* i shall await that day.
Cant wait for more,have a stash :)
Attack of the Dashie's! =D
As promised, one review.
What’s this? A shipping fic that’s not moving faster than a rocket-powered fighter jet piloted by a guy who’s just consumed 500 red bulls?
Well, might as well start from the beginning. The intro could be a little more interesting. Starting with a weather report (“It was a clear day in the peaceful town of Ponyville”) isn’t all that exciting. I think if you jumped right to the action of Dash practicing, it would be a lot more effective. That scene itself was pretty good, if not particularly ground-breaking, and you did a good job of establishing the characters.
Moving on to the Wonderbolts. I thought you did a good job with them as well, though, again, I don’t think these characterizations are anything unique. I like how they know who Dash is. When I read the description, I figured Dash would be Soarin’s love interest, but now I definitely think it’s somepony else.
While you’re not zipping along at rocket-powered jet speeds, I think your pacing is a wee bit fast, particularly with the Wonderbolts. Describing the scenes a little more would probably fix that.
Well, that’s all for now. Good luck!
~Scribblestick, TWE reviewer
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Thanks for the feedback dude.
Bearing in mind that this is gonna be my first long fan-fic and my return to writing so it won't be the best. I can make some improvements on older chapters if need be.
I'll see that I make some improvements on the story based on your review.
Again, thanks for the feedback, it really helps me.
So awesome!
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Why, thank you!
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good chapter though.
I hope you add in the next chapter december 9th :)
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All I can say is don't get your hopes up.
It may happen but it may not.
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Aww, okay :c
I'm still going to watch the story, as I really want to know what's going to happen :D
-Darwin