End of Act 1
It was late at night, Twilight was exhausted from her search, her friends had all shown up to help with the search and so far no sign of Spinel had been found. Twilight was practically asleep on her hooves, not so much from the time but more so from keeping her echo spell active constantly for over 8 hours.
"Twily maybe you should take a break," Shining suggested.
"Spinel is dangerous," Twilight replied sleepily "If the pony who took her uses mind control or tricks her into attacking us she could hurt a lot of ponies, especially if the one who took her comes with her, what if it's Chrysalis, or Maybe Tirek found a way to use her to amplify his own power, or what if-"
"Twily," Shining cut in "Stop making theories, you gonna make the guards panic,"
"Why shouldn't they be? I am!"
"That's cause your suffering from overuse of Magic, you need to shut down the spell, get a cup of coffee, maybe take a nap-"
"I am not taking a nap!" Twilight replied crankily, as she said this her horn went from a dull glow to glowing bright and then dimmed and started repeating this as she continued talking. "If Spinel enters the empire-"
"Uh, Twily?" Shining said pointing her horn, Twilight looked up for a moment, then jumped to her hooves.
"I FOUND HER!" She screamed, "Follow me and gather every guard!" Twilight didn't wait for an answer as she teleported to the area the Crystal heart was kept, she extended her wings then froze as the echoed spell illuminated Spinel's gem she could see the glow heading towards her. Twilight stood her ground as she cut the Echo spell and sent out a magical flare, she almost fell to her knees when she did so.
"Spinel," She called out "Please tell me you're not gonna go psycho crazy and try and kill me or something," She called, but she received no answer. "That doesn't bode well for my imminent future,"
"Indeed it doesn't," A voice she had never heard before replied, Twilight stood in silence as a colt in a dress came into view, in his magic, he had what looked like a steel spike, and in his hoof, he was casually tossing up and down Spinels gem.
"Oh for the love of Celestia," Twilight groaned. "Are you the weird dress guy who's always surrounded by 5 ponies in cloaks?"
"I see you've heard of me," Topaz replied "I am-"
"-an idiot who better drop the gem if he knows what's good for him," Rainbow Dash called from above as she landed next to Twilight. She stood her ground before breaking her serious expression and trying not to laugh "I'm sorry is this guy wearing a dress?" she looked around like she expected some pony to jump out and tell her she was being pranked. "What is this?" She asked Twilight while motioning at the dress, Twilight just shook her head.
"I am too tired to care," She replied simply.
"What's with the queen?" Pinkie asked as she and Rarity joined the two.
"Not that there's anything wrong with being a queen," Rarity jumped in "It's just...they usually make it work, this gentle colt-" Rarity eyes caught onto Spinel and changed what she was going to say "-seems to have murdered Spinel,"
"What!?" Pinkie demanded having been too caught up in the dress to look at his hoofs "Oh heck no, I'll be right back I'm gonna throw so many pies at this guy..." Pinkie grumbled angrily about how nopony explodes her friends as she went to get some pies.
"So I take it Spinel's been poofed?" Applejack asked as she and Fluttershy made it to the scene "Oh, yup there she is," Fluttershy frowned as Topaz tossed the gem haphazardly around.
"Um sir," She asked kindly "I don't mean to alarm you but that gem is actually alive,"
"Oh yes I know," He replied simply "That's why I have this," he replied holding up the steel pike "I'm going to shatter it,"
"And no longer funny," Rainbow decided.
"Oh?" Topaz asked as he pulled his arm back "Move and I'll shatter it here, it might not be quite where I am supposed to be, but I'm willing to test if the ritual will work over here,"
"do you know what he's talking about?," Rainbow whispered to Twilight, Twilight shook her head "Hey!" Rainbow called "Hey, we don't know what you're talking about,"
"This here is the Anti-Heart!" Topaz said simply "It is said in stories of old to have been created to destroy the Crystal heart,"
"That is not right," Twilight replied simply "Spinel only tries to destroy things that make her mad and the Crystal heart has yet to do that,"
"I'm willing to bet you have thought," Applejack added pointing at Topaz.
"Oh yeah, honestly I'm just gonna let her kick your can for a while when she reforms,"
"And how do you plan on taking her from-" Topaz was cut off by screaming and Rainbow moved out of the way as Pinkie landed where she had been and began to throw infinite pies at Topaz, Topaz was knocked onto his rear and dropped both his spike and Spinel, Rarity used her magic and stopped Spinel from hitting the ground and brought her over to her.
"Wow," she said as she looked at the gem. "She's flawless,"
"Rarity give her to me," Rainbow demanded, "before your instincts kick in and you turn Spinel into a necklace or something." Topaz lit his horn and forced Pinkie to turn with his magic, hitting Rarity with a pie before she could stop, Rarity dropped the gem and Topaz tossed Pinkie aside and took Spinel back only for Rainbow to grab her, he shrugged and took Rainbow as well.
"Oh crud," Rainbow managed to say before he threw her face first into a wall.
"Oh, you simple-minded fools never-ack!" Topaz was cut off as Applejack just kind of walked up to him and punched him square in the face.
"Who's simple-minded now?" She asked as Rainbow walked away from the wall dizzily, years of crashes had made her pretty durable, tho it had still hurt. Spinel lay against the wall, Rainbow having taken the full force of the hit, Topaz laughed as he used his magic and sent the spike hurtling at Spinel, Twilight tried and failed to light her horn, she made to run at it when Fluttershy, who had already been walking to the gem, picked Spinel up, the spike embedded itself in the wall and Applejack began hitting Topaz again, after her second strike he used his horn and threw her at Fluttershy, who had been walking back to Twilight, Fluttershy was hit dead in the side and she and Applejack where sent flying across the ground.
"Oh my gosh, Fluttershy are you OK!" Applejack demanded as she got up.
"Ow," Fluttershy replied as she got up "I think I scraped my knee,"
"The winner is I," Topaz yelled as he managed to pull the spike from the wall and sent it once again at Spinel, just as it was about to hit Spinel's gem it started glowing and rising in the air, sending the spike into another wall, Topaz watched as Spinel took form and landed on her feet looking down, there was silence for a moment before she looked dead at Topaz.
"I am so tired-" Spinel said as she pulled her arm back and enlarged her hand, turning her arm into a spring, she coiled it and turned it to Topaz "-of being stabbed in the stomach," Topaz made a barrier and Spinel opened her hand and sent her arm flying, grabbing Topaz's bubble as she did so, Topaz blinked when he realized she had him, them her arm dropped and proceeded to crush Spike's statue.
"That was just petty," Applejack called to her.
"I need that," Spinel said simply as she pulled her arm back, Topaz firmly stuck in her grip, she reached into her gem and pulled out the Rejuvenator.
"You think you have won?" He asked dizzily, his nose was bleeding and he was missing a tooth "I am the great Crystal Topaz!" as he was talking Topaz used his magic to remove the spike from the wall, he aimed it at Spinels back who smiled.
"No," She said simply, he smiled and sent it flying at her, Spinel dodged and smacked Topaz across the mouth, sending him tumbling out of the spike's path and right into her Rejuvenator. Topaz freaked out for a moment and his cutie mark went glitchy, he jumped back.
"This is not the last you'll see of me!" he yelled as he lit his horn to escape, only for it to spark and do nothing, he blinked as the mane 6 and Spinel looked at him. "Time out?" he asked.
"I'm going to start beating you now," Spinel said as she put her Rejuvenator back in her gem "I don't know when I'll stop" The mane 6 turned to the entrance of the castle as Spinel began pummeling Topaz.
"Alright, the guards are gathering as we-" Shining began.
"It's all good," Rarity said as she made her way into the castle "Spinel's back, she's broken Spike's statue-"
"OH COME ON!" Spike cried out as Rarity ushered him back inside with her.
"-And Spinel's beating the colt who kidnapped her to a pulp,"
"I'm gonna go stop that," Cadance said simply, she walked over to the act "Spinel stop," Cadence yelled in her most motherly voice causing Spinel to flinch and look back at her, the was a moment of silence before she punched him again.
"Fine." She released him with great reluctance.
"You, your the decent of that traitor Amoura." Topaz coughed as he stubbornly stood up. "Your ancestor doomed the Empire to that monster Sombra." Cadence blinked a couple times in confusion.
"No, no I'm pretty sure she didn't." She said calmly.
"Lies, I am the only one who knows the true history of this country," He said firmly as he tried and failed to stand up straight.
"Can I hit him one more time?" Spinel pleaded.
"No," Cadance said simply "just cause he's crazy-"
"Where is your proof them?" Topaz demanded "Show me the proof of your ancestor's innocence,"
"I'm kinda curious as well seeing as I'm seemingly at the center of this mess," Spinel said, keeping her eye on Topaz. Cadence nodded "Follow me, it gonna be a short hike." Cadence then looked at Topaz's bruises. "You may have to carry him."
"Make up your mind," she mumbled as she hoisted the battered pony over her shoulder and followed the pink princess into the castle. She was not kidding about it being a hike as it took them five minutes to reach their destination which was the very top of the castle. Even higher than where Sombra hide the crystal heart. Inside the room was the remains of a very old ritual and two fossils lay on the floor, one was that of a pony while the other had pony like features but defiantly wasn't a pony, "Wow." Spinel was the first to speak
"What is this?" Topaz followed up.
"I don't know the full story but from notes I found and the history that followed I believe Amoura sacrificed her life to try and stop him." Princess Cadence explained.
"Well, I-um..." Topaz looked at the fossilized remains of what was clearly an Alicorn "...oh no," Topaz rubbed his head "I can't believe this, I feel like the worst kind of pony,"
"As you should." Spinel said as she shapeshifted her nose away "It's really dusty in here," She muttered
"I'm going to jail now aren't I?" Topaz asked looking at the princess
"Yep"
"Man," Spinel said as she sat down on the train seat and sighed. "I can't wait to get back to Camp Pining Hearts," as she put her feet up she felt a weight on her lap and looked down at Rarity, who was examining her gem. "Hey," She said and Rarity jumped away.
"Oh, I'm sorry I just hadn't noticed how...perfect your gem is,"
"Back up!" Pinkie declared making Rarity jump back and Pinkie took the seat "I got dibs on sitting next to Spinel, I'm gonna make sure nothing sharp gets close to her!" as this was going down in the back Applejack and Fluttershy were having their own conversation.
"...and she wasn't even trying to buck the tree!" Applejack was smiling ear to ear "Her time limit is almost up, oh I can't wait to have her working for me, and when Apple cider season comes along her help might double our cider output."
"Oh I think that sounds wonderful," Fluttershy said sweetly, "I think kicking trees will be an excellent outlet for her anger issues, speaking of which I should look into getting her a support animal, I think a Phoenix would be nice, they live forever and she doesn't age, It's a match made in heaven," at the front of the train car Twilight was sleeping to the side while Spike and Rainbow played a game of cards.
"It's kind of ridiculous that they already rebuilt your statue," Rainbow said as she placed a card down.
"It really is," Spike agreed.
"Rarity back off!" Pinkie demanded as she hugged Spinel "No non-Pinkies within touching distance of Spinel!" Twilight groaned as she looked at the loud mess of a train car filled with her friends.
"This is gonna be a long 4 hours," She groaned as she flopped back into her seat, the train only just beginning its departure.
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Phinics? I try really hard to ignore the spelling mistakes, but HOW do you turn "Phoenix" into "Phinics?" I can't just let that one go. I don't mind that he's "Shinning" Armor, I don't care that everyone keeps getting "tiered," but if you plan on getting Spinel a pet Phoenix, please spell the name of species right.
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Google lied to me, thank you for correcting that I'll make sure to make a note (and I think I got all the Shinnings, not sure about the Tiered's tho
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Thanks for that. And can I make a request? When you post the sequel, can you add a link to it in a new chapter at the end of this story? That is my personal favorite way of being notified of a sequel. Very reliable way of people getting to it quickly, since it updates an already favorited or tracked story.
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Entirely because you are the first person (Ever) To ever point out that I was spelling Shining armor's name wrong I will do just that.
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I dunno, I don't think that use knew what Steven universe was.
Yeeessss
Have it continue off of this chapter. It'd be interesting to see what crazy thing happens next after they return back to Ponyville.
Maybe a small skip of a week or a month
Well done.
looking forward to the sequel.
Me gustó la historia
Soy de Perú
I. Love. It!
Spinel's attitude through out this is hilarious.
Just a thought: How would Spinel explain fusion to these ponies?
Loved it
i'm okay with a small time skip but ultimately its up to you
Honest question, what was the purpose of making this a displaced fic if the main character doesn´t retain any of its memories?
Not that im complaining, displaced characters are normally unlikable because they represent the unholy union of a self-incert and the bastardization of an already liked character...but if the main character thinks he is Spinel, why not just using the real Spinel for the story?
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Plot points for the second story mainly
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that is an interesting effect with the rejovinater
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I figured it should have some effect on magic and in the end I went with it glitching a ponies magic out preventing Unicorns form using magic, Pegasus from flying properly, Earth ponies from properly using there strength, and of course mess with a ponies cutie mark and prevent them from doing what they do best.
I like this story. There are a lot of homophone mistakes like witch/which, weather/whether, and threw/through. Is English your first language? If not, then I appauld you with how well you did writing this story.
Since the rejuvenator resets gems wouldn't it regres magic back to a ponys childhood hold on it. I think it would be hilarious if it was used on twilight and it turns her back into a unicorn
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I guess
Makes sense
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I don't think so, the rejuvenator does not affect a biological being's appearance. Hence why Steven did not revert back into a baby when he was struck by the rejuvenator in the movie. If her wings were made of light or magic then I can see it happening.
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I'll think it over for the sequel
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i just think with the it effecting the ponys who kidnapped her it could effect other acpect of ponys as well such as tirik getting hit by it might reset his magic to relising the rest. Also ponys arnt just organic they are magical creatures so it is likly while it will effect them it proberbly wont do something we can know about before hand. With stevens reaction to it that was because he was only half gem so it had its limits of what it could do but with a pony a creature who from what we have seen with twilight's magic effects their bodys it could just disrupt their magic tempareraly or forever. I would like to point (spoilers for if you havent seen the full final episode yet) when cozy takes discords power her size and body chnage to match so it is possible that a twilight turned back into a child alicorn is possible or even just being put back into a unicorn.
This was long sorry
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Good point with cozy glow changing appearance. Certain creatures in mlp seem to change when given enough/certain types of magic either temporarily or permanently (tirek, the main six when channeling the elements of harmony, and the changelings) however the the amount of magic does not change when being struck with a rejuvenator and therefore it would be unlikely to have a creature with biological needs change appearance when struck. At least not so drastically. All of this is just based on assumptions on how the rejuvenator works and the biology of ponies but that does get me thinking about what would happen if a changling were to be hit with a rejuvenator since in the comics the original changelings were born from a carnivorous plant that grew from a rotten acorn that fell into a magic pond under a cemetery and therefore be primarily made of magic. Either way it is totally possible to have twilight, Cadance(since she was originally a Pegasus) or any type of alicorn revert to their original tribe of pony. I just think it's unlikely given some of the reasons stated above.
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fair didnt luna and celestia acend as well i forget that bit i think they where earth ponys or unicorns. Also you make a good point with the changlings and twilight and cadneces acencions (i suck at spelling) so i will propose an alternate, if we assume the injectore canot harm or disrupt physical forms and only effects gems and magic creatures and constructs, and after that we also say that it only resets or tryes to rest a magic creature then the most likly thing that would happen is that maby when twilight or cadence get struck they loose the ability to use the magic from their aliconhood exept for the tribe they where born from so they would just be the same but limitid magic as well as possibly tempareraly loosing their cutiemarks or having them in a state of disruption (eg glitched out) that seems the most likly cenario for them but with the changlings.... proberbly stop them from transforming or just have it so they have bugged out powers like steven did becuase the point you rasied of it only effecting magic and gems and with the alicorns it is pretty simple the guess they just cant use the other tribes they gained powers but with changlings it proberbly is likly they will just be glitching out every time they try use their magic
Warning word vomit
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I don't think there was a comfirmation on what the original tribe(if there was one) of Celestia and Luna were. There might have been in diary of the two sisters but I never read that one. I totally agree with you about the effects of the rejuvenator on ponies and changlings on this case. If you notice there are a lot of parallels between changlings and gems in terms of abilities and biology since both are shapeshifters and both don't need solid food to survive. There are a lot of ways to explore these ideas and I look forward to see if these ideas are touched upon in the (possible) sequel.
A thought accursed to me. If Applejack ever sees what a REAL quartz can do, then she'd probably want to contract them to work at her farm.
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Yea it been a great story so far and i hope it will continue in some way and who knows apparently discord was opening alot of portals that night some other gems might be there as well and maby even a steven... would it be weired if i said i hoped steven and lion were there with spinel so it can be ther 3 of them with the ponys?
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It would be fun to incorporate other characters from Steven universe. For me personally I love the nonchalant attitude a lot of the characters seem to have in this story. It's like: I think I'm losing my memories and having my personality overwritten. Let me just shove that in a box and deal with that later. or There is a possibly unstable alien currently living in our barn. I wonder how many more apples I can harvest with her around. It's so ridiculous and fun and I love it!
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this is the first time I've ever had a debate going on in my comment section about something that actually happened in the story, yall deserve rewards, check yo PM's
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yea i definatly like that applejack wants twilight to leave spinels reguvinator alone not because it is hers and twilight shouldent be a theif aswell as a jerk by levitating her but beacue applejack doesnt want a squeakey spinel around as it would drive her to insanity
Haven't finished reading the story yet and not sure if anyone else brought this up but does anyone think that Pinkie Pie might be a Spinel? Hear me out. Spinel's are programmed to be the bestest friend ever to the one they are assigned to. If Pinkie was a Spinel she ended up in equestria and never got her assignment before ending up in gem form and ending up on the Pie family rock farm. She lost her memories due to the dimension travel and woke up as a pony and got adopted by the pies. Also due to this her base programming 'be bestest friend and brings joy and happiness to assigned friend' was suppressed until the rainboom kicked in however with out a assigned friend she decided on her own to make friends with everyone, Hence why Pinkie is so bouncy, friendly and at times acts cartoonishly just like Spinel and why seeming rejection from her friends has such a profound effect on her. When you think on it the theory makes sense.
Post note-Just finished reading story. Good fic. On another note any whom feel like making that theory into a fic go nuts.
Why do I get the feeling that Rarity is gaining an unhealthy obsession with Spinel's gem?
22 chapters in 10 days very impressive
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also very hard, 30 chapters in 25 days was actually easier
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Yeah you made it work. Are you planning a sequel because I'd definitely read it.
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It's being worked on. expect it maybe late October
what if spinal think that crystal heart that is anther spinal was trap and spinal take it way and run away
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I dumped a bucket of water down his chimney and extinguished it's flames (EVIL HORSE NOISES!)
This was fun
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My fireplace?
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*GASSSSP* how did you find about my deepest secret!?
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you said hearth instead of heart
hearth is the floor of a fireplace/the area in front of a fireplace.
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Oh i see, didn't know that
Thanks for pointing it out
This was a whole lot of fun. A small skip would be fine with me.
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your request has been fulfilled.
Tried to read this story but...while I am sure the author does get better later on. The massive overuse of commas to make very long run on sentences in the beginning chapters. Make it just...difficult to read. Sorry if it sounds snobby I just get driven nuts by things like that.
Fun idea, would like to get into it. But the punctuation issues is keeping me from enjoying it enough. Not giving it a thumbs up or a thumbs down though, it isn't terrible it just needs some TLC from an editor.
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An upside down heart