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Toriandthehorse


A horse doesn’t care how much you know until he knows how much you care. Put your hand on your horse and your heart in your hand. -Pat Parelli

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We all know Scootaloo's tough. (After all, she has Rainbow Dash to look up to) We all know she's cheerful, and that she's positive. But after some shocking test results, Scootaloo falls apart. Maybe even to the point of no return. To the point where only darkness appeals, and only certain magic words can clear it away. Rainbow Dash has always been the younger mare's idol... the pony she looked up to most in the whole world. But now, even Rainbow Dash might not be enough to bring Scootaloo back.

Set a few years in the future, where Scootaloo is already a young mare

Chapters (1)
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Seral #1 · 1 week ago · · ·

“Scoots? Scootaloo? You here?” A blue pegasus mare zipped through the town of Ponyville, flying fast and low. Where is she? Her rainbow tail streamed behind her, a sharp contrast to the pale pink evening. She flew higher, pausing a moment to search the streets. Her gaze froze on the very edge of Ponyville, where there was a small cliff. And, if you looked very closely, an orange figure with a shock of pink sitting in the grass. Oh no. The mare took off in the direction of the cliff, reaching it within minutes. As she neared the clearing, her pace dropped considerably. “Scootaloo?” The younger mare startled“Scoots? Scootaloo? You here?” A blue pegasus mare zipped through the town of Ponyville, flying fast and low. Where is she? Her rainbow tail streamed behind her, a sharp contrast to the pale pink evening. She flew higher, pausing a moment to search the streets. Her gaze froze on the very edge of Ponyville, where there was a small cliff. And, if you looked very closely, an orange figure with a shock of pink sitting in the grass. Oh no. The mare took off in the direction of the cliff, reaching it within minutes. As she neared the clearing, her pace dropped considerably. “Scootaloo?” The younger mare startled.

Think you made a typo

9824095
Oh I can't believe I didn't notice that! :facehoof: Thank you!

Nice! Even if they Never make scoots Fly in the Show, we can.

9824458
:twilightsheepish: Glad you enjoyed it!

9824131
Yet, you didn't correct it?

9826733
How do you mean?
Is there another error I missed? :facehoof:

9826736
Well, I'm not sure what error Seral refers to, except for the fact that the first paragraph repeats itself. (And no, it's not corrected. I have double checked.)

9827350
Oh okay. I should've noticed that a lot sooner :facehoof:
I thought you guys meant the space I missed, but I'll go fix that right now. Thanks!

Scoots? Scootaloo? You here?” A blue pegasus mare zipped through the town of Ponyville, flying fast and low. Where is she? Her rainbow tail streamed behind her, a sharp contrast to the pale pink evening. She flew higher, pausing a moment to search the streets. Her gaze froze on the very edge of Ponyville, where there was a small cliff. And, if you looked very closely, an orange figure with a shock of pink sitting in the grass. Oh no. The mare took off in the direction of the cliff, reaching it within minutes. As she neared the clearing, her pace dropped considerably. “Scootaloo?” The younger mare startled “Scootaloo?” A blue pegasus mare zipped through the town of Ponyville, flying fast and low. Where is she? Her rainbow tail streamed behind her, a sharp contrast to the pale pink evening. She flew higher, pausing a moment to search the streets. Her gaze froze on the very edge of Ponyville, where there was a small cliff. And, if you looked very closely, an orange figure with a shock of pink sitting in the grass. Oh no. The mare took off in the direction of the cliff, reaching it within minutes. As she neared the clearing, her pace dropped considerably. “Scootaloo?” The younger mare startled

There should only be one sentence that says Ponyville

9828118
Thanks! I'll go fix it now. :twilightsmile:

9828150
You’re welcome

This is good stuff. A little darker than I tend to look for, but told very well. And an ending that didn't feel like a cop-out. Excellent.

9831744
Thanks! Glad you enjoyed it! And about the dark part, yeah, I get that. This wouldn't be a story I would directly look for either. :twilightsheepish:

9831787
I just tend towards sappy, fun, and wholesome stuff. Sad gets a pass since I'm in the fandom for the FEELS. :ajsmug:

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