Alert: Contains spoilers from the last two episodes. If you don't want to know what happens, I don't recommend reading!! Read at your own risk! But there will only be spoilers in the first chapter, most later will be Sunset Shimmer traveling all over Equestria.
Sunset Shimmer returned to Equestria to review her mentor. But now, Equestria is no longer ruled by Celestia and Luna, but it is reign by Twilight Sparkle, and Twilight grew up and all Twilight friends got old and Spike a adult dragon. Sunset Shimmer goes to Twilight and asks, "Where is Celestia?"
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Oh it's so strange that Celestia and Luna don't govern Canterlot anymore. I will miss them.
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Me too
It is not right, that it ended this way.
They could do at least one other season.
However, nice chapter ❣
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Yeah
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Thanks
You seem to pick some very interesting concepts for your stories, but there is also a certain hastiness and lack of polish in your writing. I will just say that your tenses require work, your sentences are often stunted or lack structure.
For example, the sentences I quoted above could be rendered as:
Like I said, you have great ideas. I think you just need practice in sentence structuring. Try taking two sentences and combining them in different configurations. Another thing you could do is watch (good) television and movies and try to copy the dialogue there, to get a handle on natural speech patterns. And I would always encourage writers to read more books. We are as magpies! We steal from better authors than ourselves and make shiny nests of literature.
And as always, good luck!
Is this ever getting updated soon? I’d love to see Sunset reunite with Celestia.
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I have a written draft, but it's not ready yet
I wanted to thank you for adding this story to my group, ‘Little Ray.’
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You're welcome