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DTavs exe


It's not much, but it's honest writing.

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What a lovely story.
I love Filthyjack.

Good work DTavs exe 👍
I would like to read a sequel of this or maybe another story but with Applejack and Filthy Rich as humans.

Have a nice day ^_^

9832787
I was planning on doing something similar for the EQG world, maybe to save Camp Everfree, I dunno, I'll think about it.

I'm glad you enjoyed it, thanks for the comment.

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I would read that if it had a threeway involving Gloriosa.

9832800
Oh, now that sounds nice, I will seriously consider it.

Great story, different take on the AJ/ Filthy relationship. Enjoyed it, good work!

This was a very interesting read.
Great work.

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Thanks I'm really happy you enjoyed it, and yeah I like this take on FilthyJack, it just worked on my head, since there is a lack of fics with consensual sex from them.

That was the last they saw of Spoiled, she supposedly traveled around Equestria and stayed a bit on Las Pegasus where she invested her money with a team of twin business ponies named Flim and Flam.

I don't think there's a faster way to lose money short of just throwing it away.

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Yeah, I loved typing every single letter on that paragraph, Spoiled always rubbed me the wrong way, I believe it's the only character in the show I actally hate well maybe not hate, just really realy dislike, is just that she doesn't act like a mother should, or at least the only one I can think right now.

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She's not the only pony I hate, but the list is short: Spoiled Rich, Svengallop, Suri Polomare.

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At least Svengallop and Suri Polomare got their comeuppance, what boils my blood is that Spoiled pretty much got free easily just with a scolding from Diamond Tiara.

...Is no one going to call out the random grammar issues in this?

~Skeeter The Lurker

Filthy Rich sipped from his glass of wine, lowered his newspaper facing her "I can still prepare myself and join you on this cruise if you want," he proposed to his wife knowing too well she will say no.

Rambling
I remember one of Wodehouse’s novels, someone asks someone else to steal a particular wedding gift of his daughter.
“Won’t the detectives stop me?”
“There won’t be a detective”
“How can you be sure of that?”
“I’ll insist that we have to hire some”

Filthy kept his stoic face "You know what I think about monopolies Spoiled, they ultimately hurt the economy," he put out his cigar and took another sip of his wine "I need to tend to her before she breaks the wall, let me accompany you to the door," the three of them when to the entrance of the house where a very angry looking Applejack was waiting "Hello Applejack, it seems you received my letter, please wait for me on (in) my office, I'm sure you know where it is," Applejack entered the house and went directly to Filthy's office, then he turned to face his wife "this could get messy, do you want to stay?"

I think “this” should be capitalized

Spoiled put an indignated (indignant) face "Absolutely not, the farthest (farther) I am of (from) your negotiations the best (better) for me, let's go Tamarindo, the cruise is waiting," she ordered the big earth pony who put the luggage on the cart and then hitched himself to pull it.

"You planned all this, didn't you? y'all (capitalize rich folk always with their fancy plans tryin’ t’control us normal folk."

Applejack has always been a strong mare, stronger than many stallions she’ve (she’d) ever met, she didn’t like showing any sign of weakness or femininity, for such things were useless on the farm, but with him, it was different, she felt that she could just let herself go, she felt safe and loved but not a love like her granny or her brother and sister, or even like her friends, it was a different kind of love, one that made her heart melt and her nethers leak.

She saw Filthy Rich, a stallion she had known for most of her life, a stallion that rushed to help her family when her parents died, a stallion she respected, with the respect that she felt turned into friendship, friendship that turned into attraction, attraction that turned into love, love that flourished when a night three years ago, he (she) found him in a sad state in the local watering hole drowning his sorrows at discovering that the filly he called daughter wasn’t even his flesh and blood, the stallion she gave her maidenhood that very night and the same one she made a promise with.

Applejack was enjoying the treatment, her forehooves covered her face trying to hide a bright blush adorning her face, she was annoyed at her lover for stopping so close of her nipples, he knew she loved when he toyed with them but then she realized he asked a question, she knew that a purpose of a relationship between a mare and a stallion is to finally form a family and part of the deal is to bear foals, Applejack knew she loved him but does she really want to start a family with him? The answer has always been and always....(will)…. be yes, she had decided that the stallion resting his jaw between her teats was going to be the one that....(she)…. shared her life with, for the rest of her days.

The farmer almost split the pillow in half for how strong her grip was, she could barely stand the torture her stallion was subjecting her....(to),.... “Richard please,” she softly said but loud enough for Filthy’s ears to catch his mare’s plead (plea), he looked at her in the eyes, winked and then his tongue ran from the bottom of her lower lips to her winking love button where he stayed and played with it with his tongue. This was enough to drive Applejack over the edge, she threw the pillow while she came with a powerful moan that she could swear even Celestia at Canterlot could hear, Filthy opened his mouth to receive a generous amount of mare’s cum which he savored with gusto before happily swallowing as if it were ambrosia given by Faust herself, he attacked his lover’s folds with his tongue trying to get as much of Applejack’s honey as he could while his lover pushed her hips and held his head with both hooves until she reached another orgasm.

Seconds passed, maybe minutes or years, time was not important in their lives right now, only the pony they were staring at, “Richard,” he snapped out of the trance when he heard her, “are you gonna tell me how you (you’re) gonna do it?” she asked now with a serious expression on her face.

She laid her head on Filthy’s chest, “wow, that filly is really smart, so how ‘bout the divorse (divorce)? How you plan t’keep your fortune without a prenup?”

“You mean where the Pears used t’live? Granny is (has) been meanin' t'buy that terrain for years, there's still rich land 'sides the main house an’ the grove where mah parent’s double tree is.”

“You wouldn’t believe me,” it would probably ruin the mood, if she told him that two nights ago, she discovered Sugar Belle moving her hips while riding Big Mac, on (in) one of the barns.

:eeyup:

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The like bar should be a good indicator that it's mostly shippers reading this right now and they aren't really gonna complain. Give the fic a bit of time to simmer down and wait for the non-shippers to stick their heads in.

But you are right, this story needs a good thorough proofread.

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Yeah, I know it's far from being perfect and I'm sorry that I didn't get a proofreader, I'm kinda paranoid that everyone is up to get me, so it's kinda hard to ask for help to people I don't know. So how do I get one of them proof readers anyway?

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You ask.

Someone somewhere will say yes.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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I'll do, even if the embarrassment kills me, thanks.

9833775
Hey Thanks, fixed now, I didn't think there would be that many, in fact I thought I fixed like two you mentioned, I guess I forgot to save that, I appreciate you taking the time to help with this, also I don't think I understood the first one, is it the context that is wrong?

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No, just a comment on married life. That’s why it was spoilered

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What happened to them? Svengallop quit of his own accord, and I don't remember if we learn Suri's fate.

9838167
Well he lost his most famous star and sully lost her best assistant and the competition, I believe that's more than what happened to Spoiled.

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I'd rewatched Rarity Takes Manehattan since I posted the comment, and you're quite correct.

I suspect Spoiled has too much influence in Ponyville politics to be properly punished, as the Riches are ludicrously powerful. It reminds me somewhat of that episode of Parks and Recreation (if that's a concept to you) where one of the characters attempts to prevent the destruction of an old building at the hands of the Newports, the main family in the town of Pawnee (where the show is set). However, it proves impossible to get anything done as the Newports control practically everything, from government donations to owning all the town's newspapers.

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Crude reality filling our shows, where the law doesn't apply to you when you have a big wallet.

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It's similar in the UK. The government is too scared of moving against the fat cats because they control business and donations.

Love it.💖

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I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I really do enjoy Filthyjack stories, they are so rare I wish there was more of them.

Thank you for this wonderful read! :twilightsmile::ajsmug:

the grandchild from one of the founders of Ponyville

Not to mention a major reason her husband is rich.

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Hey you are right, but knowing Spoiled, I bet she disregarded that part of history.

My favorite fanfic of 2019.
I wish you the best DTavs exe
You are not only a great artist but a good writer.
Keep going! 👍

I hope to see more FilthyJack fanfics next year
I love that ship :)

9974107
Hey thanks! I appreciate it, yeah I'm planning to do another FilthyJack fic but can't seem to focus on that right now, since I don't really have that much free time this time of the year, besides all the gaming and my other fic I'm working on.

By the way I'm not that good artist, I can't draw if my life depended on it, I can make so-so edits tho.

Nicely done for your first try. I am eager what else you will do in the future

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