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Closer-To-The-Sun


You gotta kick at the darkness until it bleeds daylight.

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“Now if I let you see this place,/Where stories all ring true,/Will you let me past your face,/To see what's really you.” –The Outlaws, ‘Green Grass And High Tides’

After a visit from two of the Apple siblings, Rarity seems to be taken by the silent stallion. But can she actually prove to Big Mac that she's not a delicate pony?

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 15 )

Seems a little rushed, but still good.

I have no idea what this is meant to say.:rainbowhuh: Maybe 'to' instead of 'turn'?

"And we don't want you turn have yourself get hurt or anything," Fluttershy meekly spoke.

When did this appear and why wasn't I noticed of its existence?!:pinkiegasp: I'm so excited, but I'll have to read it later.

Just warning you, I'm bad at reviews, so.. yeah. :fluttershysad:
I'll start with the bad..
I've noticed many typos- you probably want to go over it several times out loud before publishing.
Also, what the hay happened with her walkin' away from everypony? I saw in just the beginning of the next chapter that AJ acted all friendly to Rarity.. shouldn't she be angry that she ran off and took Big Mac with her? :unsuresweetie:
And remember- Big Mac is a colt of few words.
Now onto the good..
I really, really like this story. I'm definitely going to keep track of it. Or favorite it. Or whatever. :yay: Yay~
I don't know how to pull apart the good.. but I'll try.
..
*has tried over and over*
Okay, I can't. :facehoof:
But I really do love this story!
Also, sorry for the long comment. I just type.. vertically.

AWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW
I loved this story. :rainbowkiss: There were parts I didn't, but AWWW I just love it so much.
You've got talent~! :twilightsmile: WRITE TONS.
Of course, my opinion probably doesn't mean much- I think almost every story is a good one, unless it's horrendously bad. :twilightblush: Oh well~
*claps* :pinkiehappy:

Wow what a mighty good strory y'all ponys write about!:ajsmug:

That was quick, but a joy to read none the less.:ajsmug:

This reminds me of Beauty and the Beast :twilightsheepish:

you know, right there at the ending I got confused by Mac's words, and thought it would en in "And then they fucked". dunno why, just thought about it, happened to me before, read a good story that ended with that phrase. :twilightsheepish:

anyway, I was glad to see the story ended in a good way, it deserved and ending like that, it was a good story that I really liked :pinkiehappy:

gotta love :duck:X:eeyup:

Ow! I just hit my head on the END. That was a very nice story, but a little quick. It felt like I was just getting into the pace of the story, when I ran into the end. That doesn't mean I didn't enjoy it though. Keep up the good work.

I saw this exact story on dA and loved it. Putting it in here is no different. 5 Macintoshes!
:eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup:

"Oh, wonderful dahling!" Rarity chimed

dahling! yep done with this!

The perfect example of the words 'Opposites Attract' I loved this story and support the Rarimac ship.

So entertaining, I really liked your story.

Inside of her head, Rarity began to curse out Applejack, 'How dare Applejack do this to me! Curse her and her….Applejack-ness! Though I must admit she knows how to be pushy to get things done.'

Indeed, Apple Jack is very pushy. :ajbemused:

Looked it when Applejack realized was serious and then laughed some more! :rainbowlaugh::rainbowwild::pinkiehappy::derpytongue2:

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