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Rosebriar Sunfall


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Mossy Trails was born in the Equestrian Wastelands, and knew nothing more than living to survive. She knew only how to keep moving to avoid danger. She grew up alone for the most part, but then began to rescue unwanted, abandoned, or orphaned foals. She knew not to trust others. But the older she's got, and the more foals she's added to her little group of wanderer's, the more she's come to understand that there must be something more. And that she must find safety for her children. Safety and solidity. It's getting harder and harder to hide as the groups grown. And times are changing. She knows she must find somewhere safe to settle them. Before they're discovered.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 2 )

This is a great start.  Your mechanics are decent.  You've written the first-person voice well.  Your prologue has a nice, personal hook.

However, this story could use some editing.  The formatting is off. Your prose is good but has room left to become great. I encourage you to find an editor who can help polish this story so it can shine.

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Thank you. While I appreciate it, I am not too invested in making fanfiction perfect. I'm a published author. I know it could be better, but I better invest my time to my own original written works.

I'm pleased you like the story so far though. Thank you for commenting. I will take into consideration finding an editor, then I'm not investing all my time in editing myself.

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