(Story idea inspired and suggested by Chronicler06.)
Sunset Shimmer and her fellow Rainbooms are almost ready to graduate from Canterlot High and move on to the next chapter of their lives. And Sunset's life couldn't be better.
However, just days before graduation, Sunset is called to a meeting where she meets the superintendent of Canterlot High, Neighsay. And the superintendent reveals that he's been keeping tabs on Equestrian Magic.
With graduation lurking over the horizon, Sunset must face the fact that Equestrian magic and her involvement with it can't stay secret for much longer. Now shes faces a dilemma as she must decide not only how to break the news to her friends, but what she'll do when her actions can't stay hidden from the public.
(Sees title for chapter) I cannot resist the obligatory musical references.
This story reminds me of The Gateway Hotel series. A family lives in a hotel above a network of wormholes, and sometimes aliens come through to see earth. So they have to keep the aliens secret while entertaining human guests. Some of the aliens are evil and don't care about being kept secret. One (my favorite) complains when the entire town hides that there is no audience to see his victory. In the end though as you put it is inevitable that the world finds out so in the last chapter. The people in charge decide to tell humanity instead of them poking around.
Very nice! I always found The idea of equestria girls interesting. Like, if celestia's leader of the school, what could be the Royal Guards or what the human cmc could be.
And frankly, i Never understood the hate for Pony Flash.
Hey, great to see this story finally up!
I have to say, this came out a lot better than what I would've been able to write, so I'm glad to see I made the right choice in sharing this idea with someone and letting them give it a try. Perhaps sometime later I might consider sharing some other ideas I also have and see if anyone might be interested in writing them into full stories.
Sunset's expression and posture in the cover image is very amusing.
Huh. Never knew that.
I guess this is what I get for not keeping tabs on official announcements.
Well, Sunset, you're going on about things having the possibility if being better if you never came here, but is that really true?
Would you really give up meeting Princess Twilight and learning the magic of Friendship, becoming all the better pony for it? Can you imagine a life without your close friends now? Are you willing to give that all up?
Things like this have two – or even more – sides, and it won't do to look at only one if them and ignore the others.
Things may seem bleak now, but I'm sure that, with the help of your friends, you'll persevere. You always have.
REALLY good job on Sunset and Human Neighsay's first meeting. The exchanges and characterizations are definitely well done in all the right places.
Anyway, on to the next chapter.
Excellent job on this chapter. I loved how the other Rainbooms took Sunset's news as well as I can understand Sunset's frustration that most of her friends are going to separate colleges (mainly because keeping things under wraps will be that much more difficult).
At any rate, the exchanges, characterizations and finale set-up are all wonderfully done and I'm going on to the final chapter.
Really good job on the wrap-up to this story. :-D The exchanges, characterizations and future story set-up are all well done in all the right places.
I especially liked how Princess Twilight provided Sunset with that bit of thought as well as the point outs the other girls made concerning the other portals. And, yeah, I'm going to be wondering how Sunset will take it when she graduates from college and returns to Equestria to find out that Twilight is now sole monarch of Equestria (well, assuming she survives the series finale, which is very likely, but NOT definite).
And, yeah, seeing the girls' solo adventures in college might be fun to see (especially if more of the human counterparts of the major villains get involved).
I am convinced that this is exactly how they would end the series. Great work giving this some justice and closure!
Good start so far. Admittedly it strikes me as a bit weird to describe human Neighsay as wearing a robe rather than, say, a suit. I mean, the principals wear suits, why not him?
Still, looking forward to seeing how this story progresses from her.
I really enjoyed Twilight's letter to Sunset.
Nice conclusion, and a sweet little possible coda to the EG series.
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Perhaps he's meeting with his DnD group after?
Nice little story with a good message. Nice touch with the Edison quote.
Now that I've had some time to think, there are only two little things I would consider changing. First would be Neighsay wearing a more appropriate suit for his position, as previously mentioned by other comments. Second would be an acknowledgement that Cinch was no longer principal of Crystal Prep shortly after the Friendship Games, perhaps she was forced to resign as part of Neighsay's efforts. Other than that, everything else looks great to me.
And now that I've noticed among these comments there's apparently some interest in expanding this story much further, perhaps we might consider discussing the possibility of going for it. (I'll talk more about it in a PM sometime later, when I can eventually find time for it.)
Great story. Nice to see Neighsay being a big help than a burden in the EQG world compared to Filthy Rich
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As one famous author said, good people will hold on to their misdeeds and forget their good behavior.
Beautiful story. It could easily have been a story line for an EG finale, which I am still hoping Hasbro will do.
Oddly enough, there is a possible story idea I can't get out of my head which sounds like it could be a sequel to this story:
Sunset returns to Equestria permanently a couple of years after finishing college (which would be at least a couple of years after Twilight officially took over for Celestia and Luna as ruler of Equestria. Ultimately, after getting used to things in Equestria again, Sunset becomes a teacher at the School For Gifted Unicorns. Eventually, Sunset meets your choice of stallions, GRADUALLY falls in love and the two produce a daughter - Luster Dawn.
Of course, I haven't been able to think of enough details to make it work, but I have no doubts that YOU COULD, given enough time.
However, I will also be mature enough to accept and respect if you don't like the idea.
And, now that I think about it, it IS kind of ironic how surprisingly similar this is to the true finale of the main series (at least the flashback portions). Admittedly, the similarities are pure coincidence (as this was written BEFORE the MLP:FiM series finale was even leaked), but both stories involve the main groups ultimately having to go their separate ways and trying to find a way to keep their friendship strong.
And, if Sunset DOES return to Equestria following college graduation, it might be interesting to see her accompanying Twilight on a visit to Celestia and Luna in their retirement home and catching up with her former mentor. THAT could have definite story potential.
I wonder if Rarity will get fed up with the camp like Blythe did.
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Wow, just one down vote
Amazing
What's she talking about? Her family lives in town, and Canterlot High is a public school.
The idea of the mane 7 going their separate ways after graduating canterlot high... it's very bittersweet, to say the least. You did a great job discussing it here, and it makes me optimistic for their future. I really feel for sunset here
I still think it be great
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You jinxed it lol
I did hope this story was not all about Neighsay's racism