Needs More Cowbell

Vignette Valencia28 stories ·23 members

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Vignette Valencia has become the Rainboom's manager and been a big help to the group. One day she asks if she can record a practice session, and suggests that they include a cowbell.

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FamousLastWords

FamousLastWords #1 · Aug 7th, 2019 · · ·

ComradeCheese

ComradeCheese #2 · Aug 7th, 2019 · 1 · ·

Cool story bro, I'd give it a solid 9/10: could use more cowbell.

Shimmer Code

Shimmer Code #3 · Aug 7th, 2019 · · ·

🐄🔔

I give this 10\10 🐄

redandready45

redandready45 #4 · Aug 7th, 2019 · 2 · ·

This felt like it could've been an EG short.

Shimmer Code

Shimmer Code #5 · Aug 9th, 2019 · 1 · ·

9770560
I know right lol.

SomeBloke

SomeBloke #6 · Aug 15th, 2019 · 2 · ·

Wild Stallion

Wild Stallion #7 · Nov 18th, 2019 · · ·

I loved the concept but the execution felt a little wooden. If I may make a few suggestions you might want to show us how they are acting rather than just telling us the story. Like when Rarity needs calming down, describe her breathing and her expression, or when the Rainbooms are questioning the use of the cowbell show us how they look whether they are shocked, confused, or exasperated, and describe their tone of voice as sarcastic or skeptical, make us feel their emotion. Other than that nice little story with a very entertaining premise, so thank you for writing it.

TheHardie-Boy