Just yes! This is going to be fun. All you need is a random overlord rule at the end of every chapter XD

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huh, thats not a bad idea.

I'll admit it typically don't enjoy these isekai sort of stories but this one feels like it's not gonna be -just- another cliche. This one seems to have genuine inspiration, so I'll just be keeping track of this one.

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and whats more, not only could you do a random overlord rule, you could do a villain quote too, like evil inspirational or just a quote from a villain that was iconic.

This is very, very well done. Not the best but it builds the mc while retaining his humanity. Good job.

A bit utilitarian when it comes to the dialogue, and the pacing could use some work, but seems fine for what it's going for. Some outside perspective on the main protagonist could put into context some of his actions, so I'd certainly recommend interludes/omakes where you get the perspective of another chatacter. Main character's pretty flat, but hey the main appeal seems to be what he's doing and how he's going about it.

Try to remember show don't tell when it comes to events in the story, all exposition doesn't need to be expressed through dialogue. Character's actions are important to describe as well.

Shit... he's gonna be Equestria's Doctor Doom, isn't he. LOATHED by everyone outside, yet in his own Country his people adore him--and he WILL do his level best to actually help poor Tempest Shadow! Eeee…!

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Let us hope for something like that. I could almost see Mane6 or some Equestrian pony special-ops getting caught/surrounded by Storm guards, and our King says something along the lines of "You are trespassing on Sovereign soil of Storm Island. Please leave."

huh a good story not filled with cringey guys with katanas and fedoras i like it all ready have a like and fav

congratulations on the feature

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So you could say that your Canon is just separated from the Multiverse and doesn't know about the rest

I sometimes think about other peoples canons in a way that they separated from the rest in some way and don't know it. So they think they are all of multiverse

Something like in Attack on Titan
People there were thinking that they were last humans, but it turned out that this whole time they were just on island/continent and all that but I'm not going to spoiler more

If you can place them together like that they can kind of coexist or something

Ruling by the tenants of The Evil Overlord List eh? This should make for an interesting account.

I need a update soon this is good

Well now I'm wondering in what season it is happening or its before even the first season?

Nice, only two chapters in and already front page, hope you'll keep up the good work, thou the sceptic in me says this fic will die in less than 5 chapters, care to prove me wrong.

You have my curiosity. Lets see where this goes.

Like the story can't wait to see what happens next

I hope he remembers he can summon his Overlord book as long as its in the same dimension as he is.

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Can he build a device to connect to his original world internet?

Also he should start building a way to fast send messages, like internet.
It would help to get notifications from spies and alarms for example incoming danger

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Look into the origins of the network, there's a reason why we still call social networking just that.

What you probably mean is faster communication, which is easy once you get electricity going, and the reason it took us so long is because we had to figure it out on our own. It's like doing a second playthrough of a game, the first one takes a lot longer because you don't know what you're doing, but the second goes much faster. Having the book means he's basically played the game to memorization, and then starting in a victorian esc era/area such as the badlands/stormlands gives him an even better starting point.

It's good to know he's not a heartless monster.

I love stories like this, that use the evil overlord list as a framework. This, to me, is filling the gap the Darth Vulcan story left behind when it's author quit FiMFiction. I can't wait to see where you take this, as it's a promising start.

A main character that isnt a doormat, and has actual agency AND real direction? Hot dog, you have my attention.

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Going on this and your previous comment: You can still be Evil without being an asshole. Example: Doctor Doom

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this is a good start of a good story. I remember another story similar to this one that went pretty well but was deleted from this site at some point so good luck to you then.

This is a very good start, can't wait for the rest. I must say I was worried at first and then I realized who was reading it...lol this should be a wonderful story

You have caught my eye good sir, and I am LOVING what I see!

I hope he becomes a Benevolent Evil Overlord (Evil to his enemies, but good to his own people) and I can't wait to see what the rest of this world is like!

On a side note: Where is Fizzlepop Berrytwist (aka, Tempest Shadow) has she not joined the Empire yet?

To be completely honest, I was on the fence, leaning hard towards not following the story after these two chapters, but then we got to see the human side of him at the end and now I'm definitely going to read more. Let's hope the author doesn't lose his muse anytime soon.

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Not yet. She will show up eventually.

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Wonder if the Compendium has a way to Fix and or Augment her horn >.>

I’m giving you a rare thumbs up from me simply because you mentioned Lord Recluse.

This is a well-written project you got going so far, dear sir. I'm intrigued as to how will our dear hapless Overlord deal with the fish guys who socked him back in town, and how will he harden his resolve to do whatever it takes to prove that he's not a worthless guy to the universe that apparently hated him in his former life.

That being said, I'll be keeping watch over the following chapters as I'm a sucker for this type of story.

Have a thumbs-up and a fav, and may your hands be fruitful for the future!

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Exactly what he said! Also, when can we expect the next one?

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This. This I can fully understand. Have fun, dear sir - methinks we'll be more enriched with your perspective.

Welp, another one of these, there were some good ones before, but NEVER finished ones, all abandoned, I liked the one with Grogar or the others with Sombra, with just one or two chapters only XD, and they gained like 500 likes its first days, I REALLY hope this one is not one of them

Finally! A bad guy fic I can really get behind!
Now, there's a new menace in town, so much more than just a criminal, he's a supervillain.

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The last one I ever read, and the only one I ever read concerning the Overlord's Manual, was one that literally made just... at most a thousand word chapters based on each rule. Too short to keep my attention.

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Then please, play it smart. Take it from almost every villain in the show, all self entitled, arrogant, and brain dead. For example, each and every villain goes into monologue, brags about their power by triumphing over a goddess who can't use all of her power for fear of destroying life on the planet as it is known, whilst the Mane 6 work a plan out to defeat them.
But is there a solution you might ask? Yes. Kill one, just one of the Mane 6(preferably Twilight), and that's a wrap, the Elements all rely on each other, so take one of them out of the equation and it will be like trying to fire a cannon with no shells.
Or play the patient, cautious and calculating character (Equestria needs one of those in my opinion) who works from the shadows, taking every precaution to ensure victory.
But those are just suggestions, you do what you want. It is your story after all.

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I meant the kind of stories that have a human be isekai to a villain in Equestria and are in a position of power or conquering, there was this fic with a Sombra that just finished conquer Equestria and imprisoned Celestia, there was this other where is Grogar instead inside tambelon, and another where a human is summoned by 1000th mares to posses Sombras corpse and resurrect him to conquer the world, all theese really good stories and very well written, the Overlord part is just a bonus that will help the prota rule.

Your sssstory intertainssss ussss. Weee aprovvvve!

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But hes not the definition of evil. Bad sure, but not evil.

I hope the main character here (the villain) actually succeeds in the end and dominates the world. Not like in most other stories like this where the good guys (the ponies) still somehow win.

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Is it weird that I think They’ll be shiped?

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That's a bit limiting. It would be great to have bits of this arcane knowledge spread around but dedicating yourself to specific rules is a way to build boundaries around your story.

I would much rather have it a long and descriptive story about building up the empire and actually dealing with political and economical shit in a clever dictator manner. Don't get the ponies involved too quickly please.

Neat concept. Will you attack Canterlot like in the movie, or do something else?

Please keep Strife around a little while.

Its refreshing to see him get some screen time.

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I think I remember that last one, regarding the 1000 mares resurrecting the protag.

I usually don't like displaced but I will see how this story goes

Supervillain rule number zero: I don't always have to follow all the rules for supervillains.

This should be good. It reminds me of a great Harry Potter fanfic where an MBA grad is put into Voldemort's body. He then uses the lessons from 'The Rules of Power' and 'The Dictator's Handbook' to shape the Death Eaters into something actually effective and terrifying.