A weight has been lifted from my shoulders
Alternate take on Season 5 premiere:
What if the Main Six followed Starlight into the cave? What if they caught her instead of letting her get away? What if there was also a human living back in Ponyville who had trouble making friends?
Inspired by Slave Starlight by titanictime2
EDIT: Featured 7/26/19 Alright! Two in a row!
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I like it! This is an interesting idea with Starlight getting captured by the Mane 6 from the cave, instead of getting away! I'll be tracking this!
Can't wait for the next chapter!
Wow, you work fast!
Looking forward to seeing where this one goes
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If you think this is fast, daily updates for first five chapters
you had me at her getting caught instead of escaping, but then lost me when you mentioned a human in Equastria. no hate on the story but I feel like I've been seeing alot of HiE lately and its kinda getting stale for me. might give this a read later tho.
Cool, this seems like a different take on an interesting character. I'm in!
Interested in seeing where this goes...
amazing so far! keep it up!
I swear I have seen this exact story somewhere else...
As for the story, the Mane 6 could be in very big trouble later if this story hits the same beats as the show, but don't have Starlight as a friend,,
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Huh, wonder why that is?
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Oh. Sorry. Missed that.
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It’s fine. And for the record, even though I like the new one, I thought your old profile pic was cute
Looking forward to the next chapter ^^
What did you do, Rainbow?
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Probably knows so she can escape if she is ever caught/ arrested for the stuff she pulls.
You know, like committing a terrorist act like sabotaging government facility like the weather factory.
That stuff can get you sent go jail for life in the real world.
Hmm... People complain about Starlight doing what she did for such a ridiculous reason, usually forget that she is in good company with the Mane 6, who have done multiple dumb things for ridiculous reasons. The Weather factory and Rainbow are just the tip of the iceberg.
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Or, breaking in and out of the hospital to finish a book
No 'Sex' or 'Non-con' tag? Darn; I'll read it anyway.
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I’ve contemplated adding the ‘sex’ tag, but I’m not sure it fits
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unless there is actual clop or if it some what go into it then you need the tag and i read the other story a bit and there is a lot of similarities between the two
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If there’s no sex then you don’t need it.
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There won’t be, but there are a few...innuendos in the next chapter
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It probably depends on how far it goes.
This has to be the SFW version of Slave Starlight. Also, Lilly is too much like Pinkie for her own good.
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Gee really?
ah.. got tired of waiting for the other one to update huh? me too
Was lunched a typo? Never seen lunch used past tense or in a sentence like this.
I want a pet Starlight too.
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Yes it was. Thanks for pointing that out
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Don’t we all
Or maybe she just didn't know he was joking. Lack of communication.
Way better 5han the original.
Awesome beginning; I can't wait for more.
I just hope this doesn't just peter out after a handful of well-written and entertaining chapters like the other one did...sigh. What could have been...
Well, looks like Spike has got his eyes on another mare.
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Definitely a better choice. Starlight won't take advantage of him like Rarity does all the time.
Biggest reason I hate the idea of Sparity is the fact she knows how he feels and uses those feelings to take advantage of him. Spike deserves better than her.
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Sparlight is definitely a better ship than Sparity in my opinion
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Whatever the case, we need more Sparlight stories in my opinion.
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Agreed
Pretty sure every person on earth has heard music before. Music is in the eyes of the beholder.
Nooooooo!! I can't live without daily updates
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This isn’t Earth, is it
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It’ll be fine. I won’t let this die like the other one
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I don’t really want to say it’s better, but if that’s what you think
Well.... this is a nice story! I really enjoyed reading this take; and characters were spot on. Was lovely to read this!
I just found it a little hard to feel with. Transitions were good.. they got better as the story progressed, but could use a tiny bit of work.. that's not really much of a necessity though. Then a few grammatical errors, but nothing that can't be fixed with another quick read through.
Think that might sound better as 'lay down'
That part might have been what tripped me up most. In my opinion, that would sound a lot better as 'lit her horn again.'
are you planning on continuing this?
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Eventually, when I get both the time and inspiration
Review for you!
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Why'd you cancel it?
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Read the blog
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I did after that and I must say this.....AW.....
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Sorry
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I just wish you had told me about it first. PS I mean you making it.