• Member Since 16th Feb, 2012
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Slick Dash


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Sombre Mood just moved to Ponyville, he's been put through hell and back at the hooves of his ex. What happened to them? Why does it hurt so much? Find out while he meets a certain pink pony who takes an interest in making him smile.
"Just smile, and all the bad things wash away with the rain!"

A story based from my own experience, only with ponies ;D

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 30 )

Oh yay a new story! :D I love romance stories :D don't judge me :rainbowwild:

the... (also a few spelling errors)

YESYESYESYESYESYESYESYESYES :twilightblush::twilightblush:

I love it is all i have to say :heart:

it got a few tears out of me :raritydespair:

That was a great story!:pinkiehappy: There were a bit of typos, but other than that, it was just so awesome!:rainbowkiss:

What's with all the spelling and grammatical errors here? The previous chapters weren't nearly as messy...

1075016 Hmmm, I don't know what happened here will go on a massive editing spree tomorrow! I'm too tired tonight. Thank you for drawing my attention to this!

Pretty decent, to say the least. That's...about all I can say.

Maybe it's just me, but I feel like this story would have benefited from some extra length. It feels...short, and rushed.

I'm always a bit worryed with pinkie romance storys but you pulled it off well.

1075415:yay: thank you, I know they can be difficult but i really had the idea for ages, i just needed to keep true to how Pinkie would act, i hope i did that well! :pinkiehappy:

Got a note for you: once you feel that you're making some errors, or you've been typing at a lit screen for hours, it's time to take a long awaited break. And, trust me. You'll want to look over what you just typed. Other than that, the story is marvelous, and I love it. Specifically since I'm going through some heart issues of my own, and Pinkie Pie sure is the proper cure.:pinkiehappy:

1075739 I feel for you bro, replace ponies with humans, sombre with me, and you have what happened with me man. So i know how heartbreak can feel! :pinkiesad2:

Reading that cheating part really gave me a feel. Especially since I'm on the other side of it...:fluttercry:

This fic made me cry. :fluttercry::pinkiesad2:
This story touched me on an emotional level that no one ever has.
i thank you for writing this fic and also hope there will be many more chapters to come.

" in my younger years I would run out to the surrounding fields around Manehatton and gaze up at the starry skies."


Just wondering but is that a 'Under the Starry Skies" reference it's a fanfic I read a little while ago and One of the main ponies that was shipped with applejack "Silver Moonshine" always did the same thing when he was young. Enjoying the story so far /)^3^(\

1078931 Never read that story before, but that's quite a funny coincedence. May need to take a look at that story now :pinkiehappy:

Lot's of D'awwwwwwwwwwwwwww!!!!!!!!!!!!! :pinkiehappy:

are you planning on aking a sequel?

1085427 considering one final chapter to show how it's all like a few weeks later :pinkiehappy:

Okay, you've already had some spelling issues pointed out to you so that aside....holy cow! I feel like you grew so much as a writer between this piece and the one you wrote about Big Mac getting his cutie mark! Really great start and I'm looking forward to reading more when I'm a bit more awake. ^^

You have no idea the rage I am feeling right now.

Just reading this makes me froth from the mouth with anger and hate.

and that's a good thing, because you are able to convey emotions very well in your story.

This is a really great story. Great job on making it through this sort of thing.

I know how tough it can be.

HMB

The whole scene about what happened to Moody made my say "DAAAAAAAAAAAAAANG!" That had to of sucked bro. I kinda felt him since I had dated and broke up with a girl who really didn't like me.

That is so something I could see Pinkie doing.

Dun dun dunnnnnnnn.

HUGS!!!

Very well written, minus all the typos. :raritywink:
Also wanted to point out you use convocation each time you mean conversation. They're two different things, silly. :pinkiesmile:

1132542What a dummy I am! :derpytongue2: glad u enyed it Tea! :pinkiehappy:

Bravo :pinkiehappy:
I genuinely enjoyed this story. The pace was nice and I honestly felt that the character development was perfect. It wasn't just a love story it had some internal and external conflict to it and that made it really stand out from many of the others i've read. I'd love to see a sequel to this or evena continuation to the newly found romance of Sombre and Pinkie. Anyways, good job and stay fabulous. :raritywink:

AWWWW That's it?! ah well that was a good read.
I can't believe that happened to you, man.
Am I coming off as too sympathetic?

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