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BradyBunch


You are going to LOVE ME!

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Butter Bloom is a special case. Born with severe cerebral palsy, his mind is nonetheless clear enough to understand the deeper, more mature thoughts of ambition. He longs to become more than a cripple. He thirsts for the chance to grow.

One evening in his medical ward, a visitor comes. It is darkness. It is evil. And it is exactly what Butter Bloom needed.

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Butter Bloom is a special case. Born with severe cerebral palsy, his mind is nonetheless clear enough to understand the deeper, more mature thoughts of ambition. He longs to become more than a cripple. He thirsts for the chance to grow.

Me:Ayyyyy

"Who will volunteer to be my enemy?" he asked. "No one, that's who. These other ponies are simply other denizens that don't matter to me. And if they do decide to put me down, well, then…" He flicked his hoof, and red streams shot out of his arm and struck his bedside table. It collapsed with a clatter of wood.

Also Me: Ahhhh!!!

Stories like original ones are really scary. Saving this one for a file

I honestly forgot that the supernatural element was a very literal incarnation.
I read this as a psychological horror about someone in a lucid coma slowly teetering off the edge of rationality.
Well played :eeyup:

This is really good! Extremely unique, too. :twilightsmile:

Holy smokes was this creepy.

I can't possibly be the only person who got serious Venom vibes from the merging scene.

I know the voice was identified as a female but, given its form as a blob of darkness and the ability to bond with a host, I couldn't help but imagine that voice sounding like Tom Hardy's Venom.


9743071
Oh good, I'm not the only one. :twilightsmile:

I really enjoyed it!
Your grammar is great, and all the descriptions are really detailed. I like how you leave it on a slight cliffhanger so we can imagine what will happen next.

Hallo! Have a review! I know you requested Brick to do the review, but things happened. :derpytongue2:

Long story short, remember to submit to only one folder in the future :twilightsmile:

9819985
The link you put only links back to the story itself. I think you made a mistake.

9820005
Oops! Sorry, it's been fixed :twilightsmile:

Nice sorry

I'm not sure why in particular, but I find the cover art to be rather disturbing. Nice find.

You wrote this pretty well. Technically speaking it's impeccable. It doesn't feel like a full story to me, but I still enjoyed it.

10004023
I never intended it to be a full story. It was a what-if I came up with, to see if I could create a satisfying delve into the mind of a genius-level disgruntled cripple, and what they would think if they were offered another chance at life.

I'd really like to see more stories like this, where some of the what-ifs of magic are explored and more original villains are characterized. Nicely done. The idea of a 'villain origin' story always is intriguing.

10041713
Thanks for enjoying it. This was an unfinished idea I had that I couldn't develop into a longer story, but couldn't just leave floating around in my head.

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